for Red as Blood9/1/2003 c8 Nemurenai
Hmm...no checking back until far, far in the future and I STILL manage to dash back in for a cliffhanger-like thing! Ah, my timing sucks.
Though this was incredibly wonderful. The grammar and spelling were pretty well flawless. I stayed up until 4 AM just reading it, and I would keep on, if there was more. I hope there is. Everyone that wrote on this was quite good.
Continue?
~SolarCloud
Hmm...no checking back until far, far in the future and I STILL manage to dash back in for a cliffhanger-like thing! Ah, my timing sucks.
Though this was incredibly wonderful. The grammar and spelling were pretty well flawless. I stayed up until 4 AM just reading it, and I would keep on, if there was more. I hope there is. Everyone that wrote on this was quite good.
Continue?
~SolarCloud
7/17/2003 c3 
39zelle
marvellous. I love the humor you've put into this. And the relationship between Loki and Linn was portrayed perfectly ^_^. I think Loki has to be my favorite character so far. And I still giggle over the "Bloody Mary" bit at the end of the last chapter.
"a friendly wave from across the not-busy street"
hmm...not-busy is a little awkward. A change in word choice maybe?
OOh! Loki can turn invisible! I like...
HAH! I love the mind-game Loki plays with the "coppers"...mortals amuse me *evil grin...with fangs*
And wow...the action was superb ^_^. Played in my head just like a movie. Be proud. Few can accomplish that kind of writing...especially for fighting and action-packed scenes like that.
haha! And a funny ending to relieve the tension. Love it. Must read more... WRITE!
39zellemarvellous. I love the humor you've put into this. And the relationship between Loki and Linn was portrayed perfectly ^_^. I think Loki has to be my favorite character so far. And I still giggle over the "Bloody Mary" bit at the end of the last chapter.
"a friendly wave from across the not-busy street"
hmm...not-busy is a little awkward. A change in word choice maybe?
OOh! Loki can turn invisible! I like...
HAH! I love the mind-game Loki plays with the "coppers"...mortals amuse me *evil grin...with fangs*
And wow...the action was superb ^_^. Played in my head just like a movie. Be proud. Few can accomplish that kind of writing...especially for fighting and action-packed scenes like that.
haha! And a funny ending to relieve the tension. Love it. Must read more... WRITE!
7/15/2003 c2 zelle
HAH! Love this~! Political vampires, eh? And a werewolf? Delicious ^_-. You're humor shines through in just the right places so that this entire think flows smooth as water. Marvellous job! ^_^
HAH! Love this~! Political vampires, eh? And a werewolf? Delicious ^_-. You're humor shines through in just the right places so that this entire think flows smooth as water. Marvellous job! ^_^
7/11/2003 c8 phantomphether delete this
um...you uploaded it. Goody.
But, if you care, you left in one of my little sentences. About the first ending. Uh...I suppose you COULD leave it, but if you want to take it out there it is.
um...you uploaded it. Goody.
But, if you care, you left in one of my little sentences. About the first ending. Uh...I suppose you COULD leave it, but if you want to take it out there it is.
7/11/2003 c1 zelle
pwaha ^_^. I like this! This is a far more interesting (and logical!) take on vampires. I mean..before, we all knew vampires didn't like the sun and stuff like that...but now we know why.
*caught in interest*
*adds to favorites*
pwaha ^_^. I like this! This is a far more interesting (and logical!) take on vampires. I mean..before, we all knew vampires didn't like the sun and stuff like that...but now we know why.
*caught in interest*
*adds to favorites*
5/23/2003 c7 Insane Authors
JEM:We got a few things to point out.
JEWL:Firstly, that chapter was NOT short.
DREEM:Then again, all out chapters, if interesting, are notoriously short, so everything seems long to us.
JEWL:*to DREEM* Will you STOP pointing out bad parts of our stories! It's bad publicity.
JEM:Ignore them. Secondly, it's really, really good. More please.
JEM:We got a few things to point out.
JEWL:Firstly, that chapter was NOT short.
DREEM:Then again, all out chapters, if interesting, are notoriously short, so everything seems long to us.
JEWL:*to DREEM* Will you STOP pointing out bad parts of our stories! It's bad publicity.
JEM:Ignore them. Secondly, it's really, really good. More please.
4/20/2003 c7 1The Grim Amentia
First off, I have to apologize for not reviewing in what seems like forever. I've been terribly busy, and not too attentive. Ack.
Well, customary excuses given, I ought to get on with the review. :P
-First off, I've gotta say that I'm both impressed and confused by the heaping load of techincal mumbo-jumbo you put into this story. I don't know the difference between a bolt and a nut, much less a *smacks forehead* Eh, nevermind. :P
-I liked the beginning bit. Glad to know that there's still some resistance alive and kicking.
-Waif bothers me for some reason. The alcohol thing was as funny as all get out, but I just don't emphasise with the little guy. Guardian or not, Loki's still the man.
-Not bad for a cotton candy chapter, Fog. Not bad in the least. :)
1The Grim AmentiaFirst off, I have to apologize for not reviewing in what seems like forever. I've been terribly busy, and not too attentive. Ack.
Well, customary excuses given, I ought to get on with the review. :P
-First off, I've gotta say that I'm both impressed and confused by the heaping load of techincal mumbo-jumbo you put into this story. I don't know the difference between a bolt and a nut, much less a *smacks forehead* Eh, nevermind. :P
-I liked the beginning bit. Glad to know that there's still some resistance alive and kicking.
-Waif bothers me for some reason. The alcohol thing was as funny as all get out, but I just don't emphasise with the little guy. Guardian or not, Loki's still the man.
-Not bad for a cotton candy chapter, Fog. Not bad in the least. :)
4/19/2003 c7 2DF Cade
Woo and hoo. I think I like it. Cap. Redslag...the other guy...happy guns...Red w/ walkie talkies...
Sounds like a toys r' us commercial. Ah well. Always here when you need me. Nice job.
2DF CadeWoo and hoo. I think I like it. Cap. Redslag...the other guy...happy guns...Red w/ walkie talkies...
Sounds like a toys r' us commercial. Ah well. Always here when you need me. Nice job.
4/18/2003 c5 20Xelena
i got partially through ch6. anyways, this chapter was really good. and i liked how Loki got the new Guardian "out of there"/ it was very funny. please continue
20Xelenai got partially through ch6. anyways, this chapter was really good. and i liked how Loki got the new Guardian "out of there"/ it was very funny. please continue
4/17/2003 c7 Open-Wood-Silence
Totally awesome! I lvoe this chapter better then the last one, so muchmore story to it, personally it's better when you write to me sometimes.
Skye*~
Totally awesome! I lvoe this chapter better then the last one, so muchmore story to it, personally it's better when you write to me sometimes.
Skye*~
2/24/2003 c6 Open-Wood-Silence
Totally cool! THIS IS THE BEST CHAPTER YET! Up-date soon! totally luvit!
~*Skye*~
Totally cool! THIS IS THE BEST CHAPTER YET! Up-date soon! totally luvit!
~*Skye*~
2/22/2003 c1 5gaile
This looks really neat and quite different from the average vampire novel what with your gaseous vampires :).
5gaileThis looks really neat and quite different from the average vampire novel what with your gaseous vampires :).
2/22/2003 c6 1The Grim Amentia
Ach, very cool, Phantom and Fog. You guys have outdone yourselves this time. :)
I would give a super-long, crazy review, but it would be pointless. I'd just be quoting directly from the story and putting down stuff like 'LOL!' or 'That was so goddamn sweet!'. Not too constructive, eh? :P
BTW, Fog, chapters four, five, and six of WR are up, and I suppose that psychotically violent chapters are the new craze, 'cuz chapter 6 is a doozy. *grins stupidly*
-Cait out.
P.S. Phantom, if you're reading this, I will get to reading and reviewing your stuff as soon as possible. But not tonight, 'cuz I need mah sleep. :P
1The Grim AmentiaAch, very cool, Phantom and Fog. You guys have outdone yourselves this time. :)
I would give a super-long, crazy review, but it would be pointless. I'd just be quoting directly from the story and putting down stuff like 'LOL!' or 'That was so goddamn sweet!'. Not too constructive, eh? :P
BTW, Fog, chapters four, five, and six of WR are up, and I suppose that psychotically violent chapters are the new craze, 'cuz chapter 6 is a doozy. *grins stupidly*
-Cait out.
P.S. Phantom, if you're reading this, I will get to reading and reviewing your stuff as soon as possible. But not tonight, 'cuz I need mah sleep. :P
2/22/2003 c6 bubabaloo
!WOW! Oh my gosh! I LOVE it! Great job! Please DON'T stop writing! You are SO much better at writing fight scenes than me!
!WOW! Oh my gosh! I LOVE it! Great job! Please DON'T stop writing! You are SO much better at writing fight scenes than me!
1/12/2003 c5 Xy Hapu
Whoa, that was the wierdest experience ever!
Ok, so I was reading this last night, at maybe 2 in the morning, and naturally I was really really sleepy. So I finish chapter 4, then go on to 5 (which in itself was a little wierd, different authors and all!) and I'm reading along, and everything's a blur cuz my heads not working exactly right, and then it's like I'm suddenly reading about Murdok and I'm saying to myself what the fuck? Seriously, I thought I lost my friggin mind and was hallucinating, or that I'd somehow accidently clicked out of your story and wound up in Shadows of a Broken Life without realizing it! So that just completely freaked me out for a while, thankfully I eventaully got my bearings straight and managed to finish reading. Anyway, enough about my craziness, just wanted to say I like your story! Vampires and werewolves and red raptor thingies and WW3 and things getting nuked... not to mention Murdok suddenly popping up at complete random! Hmm, I just realized I have no idea which author I ought to adress this to... this has got to be the most confusing thing ever! Not that it's a bad thing, I like works that make me question my sanity :) Well, good job... er, both of you. Next chapter I fully expect Chanlder from Friends to drop in! LOL that would be hilarious, he'd get his ass kicked while making his little sarcastic remarks! LOL HAHAH-*giant plastic dog flies out of nowhere and knocks him upside the head, rendering him unconscious*
Whoa, that was the wierdest experience ever!
Ok, so I was reading this last night, at maybe 2 in the morning, and naturally I was really really sleepy. So I finish chapter 4, then go on to 5 (which in itself was a little wierd, different authors and all!) and I'm reading along, and everything's a blur cuz my heads not working exactly right, and then it's like I'm suddenly reading about Murdok and I'm saying to myself what the fuck? Seriously, I thought I lost my friggin mind and was hallucinating, or that I'd somehow accidently clicked out of your story and wound up in Shadows of a Broken Life without realizing it! So that just completely freaked me out for a while, thankfully I eventaully got my bearings straight and managed to finish reading. Anyway, enough about my craziness, just wanted to say I like your story! Vampires and werewolves and red raptor thingies and WW3 and things getting nuked... not to mention Murdok suddenly popping up at complete random! Hmm, I just realized I have no idea which author I ought to adress this to... this has got to be the most confusing thing ever! Not that it's a bad thing, I like works that make me question my sanity :) Well, good job... er, both of you. Next chapter I fully expect Chanlder from Friends to drop in! LOL that would be hilarious, he'd get his ass kicked while making his little sarcastic remarks! LOL HAHAH-*giant plastic dog flies out of nowhere and knocks him upside the head, rendering him unconscious*