11/10/2002 c2 1Ripper
Hey...This'll sound like a put-down, but I was really expecting this to be more full of shite than an Ex-Lax-aphobics Anon. group therapy session (yeah, I crack me up too. Get in line). After all, it's a pre/post/during apocalyptic original fantasy. With vampires. Which usually spells angsty Rice-a-thon with guns. Instead, it's good. Damn good. I like your short, punchy style, and the ironic VO technique. I like your slinky characters with snippy dialogue. But I'm a bastard, so I'm going to say how *I* think it could be better. Yeah? Yeah.

1. Vampire Hunter's Guide: A nice touch. They *would* have a manual, wouldn't they? But do we have to get it all at once? I'm presuming the interesting (and often highly original) snippets of info you give us there will come into play later on, so why not give us the excerpts as and when they become relevant?

2. What's going on with your Chapter set outs? It's confusing...unless it's meant to be Art, in which case you're horrible.

3. "It's only the end of the world again..." I'm a big fan of the ol' Armageddon, when done correctly. Which you could. It's a big subject to tackle without getting unspeakably dry, admittedly, but you're quite talented enough to keep us interested through a bit more scene setting jazz. It's the end of the berloody world, ducky: have some fun. Orbital jets? Meh?

4. Likewise, your characters. They're interesting. Let them run free. We can take it.

Don't take this as excessive criticism. Or do, if it gives you pleasure. Anyfuck, you're a damnably good writer (better'n me), and I just wanted to pick at the things that would make it perfect for me. Meh. *shrug*

Like your other stuff, too.

11/7/2002 c2 hello
I love this story! finish it soon! If you don't I'll cry! ); [Sniffle Sniffle] PLEASE!

Bye Bye

Ps: WRITE!

10/29/2002 c2 20Xelena
I really like the Guide- is that true vampire lore or is that just for the purposes of

your story? You know, if i didn't know better, i'd say that Loki was purposely trying to

scare the bejezzus (sp?) out of that poor kid. and i like Cayt and Linn.

10/28/2002 c2 Amorith
Nice.I could visualize everything in my mind.I'll be interested to see how this turns out.

10/23/2002 c2 Fang kat
Nice touch with the bloody mary, *grins* I hink this will be a good story.

Monette_La_Vampirechild

10/10/2002 c2 1The Grim Amentia
^.^ Melikes!

I know you're going for dark and spooky, but I can't help but think that this is more of a 'darkly humorous' sort of fic. The dialogue is anything but flat (most characters on this site are so boring...), and I like the descriptions. Your voice is a tad on the pithy side, but I like it, and hope you try to maintain the same balance of cheap-jibes-Of which I know a lot about-and intelligent jesting-of which I know nothing about-throughout the rest of the story.

The Highly Overpowered Precision Extendable rifle sounds like it could do some damage...Where can I order (or steal..hee-hee)one?

As I said in my e-mail, I read over your suggestions, and will try to make use of them in the chapters to come. Then again, I *am* the master of stupid mistakes, and it would be a pity to ruin my grand reputation. *gets kicked*

10/10/2002 c1 1John Chao
'Ey! I want to write something like that, now. Looks useful. A lot of the things you wrote here don't agree with my vampires-like the feeding, the speed, and all that- but it's good stuff. You tend to make vampires less lethal than everyone else does, but- hey! Your world, right? After all, we can at least HOPE vampires don't exist. But, where I come from, vampires use blood to heal, to run fast, to be real strong, and all that. And the best way to kill them? Not silver, but the Sun. Or the old fashioned stake-em-and-bake-em. Email me.