for Laughter in a Lonely Wood8/14/2003 c1 Jewelgirl
*once again feels special* I was one of the first people to read this! I helped critique it! *tears flow down cheeks w/ pride* GO POSI! I LOVE YOU! WHOHO! I'm sure u know how I feel about it. i didn't even have to reread it. I know it's good.
*once again feels special* I was one of the first people to read this! I helped critique it! *tears flow down cheeks w/ pride* GO POSI! I LOVE YOU! WHOHO! I'm sure u know how I feel about it. i didn't even have to reread it. I know it's good.
8/11/2003 c1 Prose
Nice thought. It conveys a sense of the wood and the whole autumn season. You've done a good job, but the whole thing's a bit wordy. I'd suggest rephrasing-for instance, instead of "now the trees do not seem stern or forbidding," I'd put "the trees no longer seem stern and forbidding." Good, in any case! I especially like the muffled giggles of the stream and the way you personified the trees as grandparents. ^^ -Prose
PS Thanks for reviewing!
Nice thought. It conveys a sense of the wood and the whole autumn season. You've done a good job, but the whole thing's a bit wordy. I'd suggest rephrasing-for instance, instead of "now the trees do not seem stern or forbidding," I'd put "the trees no longer seem stern and forbidding." Good, in any case! I especially like the muffled giggles of the stream and the way you personified the trees as grandparents. ^^ -Prose
PS Thanks for reviewing!
1/16/2003 c1 
4katbird
hey posi..member me..crazy girl at alira's party..no not wynne..kt...or girl on alicorn...but this was good...i had fun..continue...and read mine!
4katbirdhey posi..member me..crazy girl at alira's party..no not wynne..kt...or girl on alicorn...but this was good...i had fun..continue...and read mine!
11/5/2002 c1 53Individual-9086
This is so well written and awsome . . .
Great theme, it creates a mood and setting that seem to stay with me.
Keep writing, youv'e got some talent.
53Individual-9086This is so well written and awsome . . .
Great theme, it creates a mood and setting that seem to stay with me.
Keep writing, youv'e got some talent.
11/3/2002 c1 12All Mighty Terrestrial
That sounds like a place I want to visit. I hadn't noticed that bikes make a 'trit' sound before, that's a unique detail. Nice reflection, hope you got a good grade on it.
12All Mighty TerrestrialThat sounds like a place I want to visit. I hadn't noticed that bikes make a 'trit' sound before, that's a unique detail. Nice reflection, hope you got a good grade on it.
10/28/2002 c1 21Lira-chan
Oooooooooooooo, now that was interesting... ^^; And you're right, lots o personification there, I like the creek, it does seem like a little child... hee-hee, if you ever write what happens to Rem, you have to add lovely personification, only maybe not so sorrowfully-happy, Rem isn't happy at all... Well, not NOW...
~_^ Alira
21Lira-chanOooooooooooooo, now that was interesting... ^^; And you're right, lots o personification there, I like the creek, it does seem like a little child... hee-hee, if you ever write what happens to Rem, you have to add lovely personification, only maybe not so sorrowfully-happy, Rem isn't happy at all... Well, not NOW...
~_^ Alira