for Heart Of The Dragon2/20 c1 adamfranklin.uu
The characters felt authentic, and the emotions kept me engaged from start to finish. I believe this would translate beautifully into a comic book format, and I'm excited to bring it to life.
Thank you for sharing this incredible piece, I look forward to experiencing more of your stories.
The characters felt authentic, and the emotions kept me engaged from start to finish. I believe this would translate beautifully into a comic book format, and I'm excited to bring it to life.
Thank you for sharing this incredible piece, I look forward to experiencing more of your stories.
5/3/2003 c9 
1Tesla's Hand
Very Interesting story. My one problem with it was that I think it was a little short. Write more stories!
1Tesla's HandVery Interesting story. My one problem with it was that I think it was a little short. Write more stories!
4/6/2003 c9 nightsword04
Hi- this is JL
I read through the whole story... it was great, your description has certainly gotten a lot better. I especially think the wording of the epilogue is beautiful, from an aesthetic viewpoint... yes, I have an obsession with style. The actual story flows well, although there are still a few places where events seem to occur too suddenly and illogically.
Hi- this is JL
I read through the whole story... it was great, your description has certainly gotten a lot better. I especially think the wording of the epilogue is beautiful, from an aesthetic viewpoint... yes, I have an obsession with style. The actual story flows well, although there are still a few places where events seem to occur too suddenly and illogically.
12/21/2002 c9 siond
very good. i liked it very much. just read the intro to you sequel(dont know if i wrote in it- but it is good too).
Matane
very good. i liked it very much. just read the intro to you sequel(dont know if i wrote in it- but it is good too).
Matane
12/21/2002 c9 siond
very good. i liked it very much. just read the intro to you sequel(dont know if i wrote in it- but it is good too).
Matane
very good. i liked it very much. just read the intro to you sequel(dont know if i wrote in it- but it is good too).
Matane
12/19/2002 c9 2nightdragon0
A nice ending. I enjoyed this story a lot!
With all the riddles and all too.
2nightdragon0A nice ending. I enjoyed this story a lot!
With all the riddles and all too.
12/16/2002 c5 2Suthaze
Another great chapter. The thing in the last chapter that might have thrown people for a loop was Martha appearing out of nowhere. If the Huntress does that by magic, how would Martha do that? Its funny that everyone seems to be in on this 'Song is the savior' thing.
2SuthazeAnother great chapter. The thing in the last chapter that might have thrown people for a loop was Martha appearing out of nowhere. If the Huntress does that by magic, how would Martha do that? Its funny that everyone seems to be in on this 'Song is the savior' thing.
12/16/2002 c4 Suthaze
It was great but the first time you introduce Windwing, that whole paragraph, you have to admit that is pretty convienent.
It was great but the first time you introduce Windwing, that whole paragraph, you have to admit that is pretty convienent.
12/16/2002 c3 Suthaze
The riddle is a little obvious, but that's because the reader knows that it will have something to do with dragons. If I were the main character, who doesn;t know about the dragons, I would be seriously freaked.
The riddle is a little obvious, but that's because the reader knows that it will have something to do with dragons. If I were the main character, who doesn;t know about the dragons, I would be seriously freaked.
12/16/2002 c2 Suthaze
A mysterious girl that put claw marks in metal, or whatever Jerold was wearing for armor, and almost killed a dog with one blow might put some people off ease, but not these people. . . again, great chapter but you should consider these things.
A mysterious girl that put claw marks in metal, or whatever Jerold was wearing for armor, and almost killed a dog with one blow might put some people off ease, but not these people. . . again, great chapter but you should consider these things.
12/16/2002 c1 Suthaze
That was very cool. It does seem a little weird that Rubyflame would use a last resort spell before the battle even started. Another queston is: where exactly was the girl? If she was at the back of the lair, Rubyflame didn't do a very good job of defending. I know, I know, your setting up cool characters with a history but youmight want to think about those things.
That was very cool. It does seem a little weird that Rubyflame would use a last resort spell before the battle even started. Another queston is: where exactly was the girl? If she was at the back of the lair, Rubyflame didn't do a very good job of defending. I know, I know, your setting up cool characters with a history but youmight want to think about those things.
12/15/2002 c9 Araceil
ohh please do a sequal pleaaase!
-pout- ill cry and scream and stamp my foot though fucking lot thats gonna do
ohh please do a sequal pleaaase!
-pout- ill cry and scream and stamp my foot though fucking lot thats gonna do
12/14/2002 c9 Amber Evans Potter
^.^ Very sweet. I really loved this story and I want to thank you for writing it. I thought it was very beautifully written.
^.^ Very sweet. I really loved this story and I want to thank you for writing it. I thought it was very beautifully written.
12/7/2002 c8 Amber Evans Potter
That was AWESOME! Please continue with it soon! I absolutely loved it! I can't wait to see how this ends, it was so good! ^.^
That was AWESOME! Please continue with it soon! I absolutely loved it! I can't wait to see how this ends, it was so good! ^.^
12/7/2002 c8 2nightdragon0
I expected she'd have a little more reaction to her ture dragon form, but the story's great anyway!
2nightdragon0I expected she'd have a little more reaction to her ture dragon form, but the story's great anyway!