for Arien and the Rift3/30/2005 c1 Dark Ninja of Avolon
Hey why don't you have Arien fall in love with Mike's girlfriend or something like that. But hay I'm just a reviewer. It has a bit of humor in it and if Arien's "richer than crap" why doesn't he just buy his own house?
Hey why don't you have Arien fall in love with Mike's girlfriend or something like that. But hay I'm just a reviewer. It has a bit of humor in it and if Arien's "richer than crap" why doesn't he just buy his own house?
7/16/2003 c1 
5Kageisuke
That first scene was hilarious. The way you described him was great. I always thought of antennas as sticking up, but having them tucked behind his ear is unusual. Not difficult for me to imagine, but unusual. Is funny how they twitch. ^_^
So, this poor Mike guy has suddenly found himself saddled with an other-worlder who sucks at magic so badly he managed to get himself stuck in another world, and through a trunk even... I'm hoping the barber didn't try to trim his antennae. That would be painful. _
Owari. Kageisuke. A quick question. Cher and Meatloaf?
5KageisukeThat first scene was hilarious. The way you described him was great. I always thought of antennas as sticking up, but having them tucked behind his ear is unusual. Not difficult for me to imagine, but unusual. Is funny how they twitch. ^_^
So, this poor Mike guy has suddenly found himself saddled with an other-worlder who sucks at magic so badly he managed to get himself stuck in another world, and through a trunk even... I'm hoping the barber didn't try to trim his antennae. That would be painful. _
Owari. Kageisuke. A quick question. Cher and Meatloaf?
3/3/2003 c1 how do you delete accounts
Heeheehee. I LOVE this story. Pleasepleaseplease continue it! It has the most original plotline I've seen in a while. Totally random. The best kind of story there is. Truly awesome. Write more?
Heeheehee. I LOVE this story. Pleasepleaseplease continue it! It has the most original plotline I've seen in a while. Totally random. The best kind of story there is. Truly awesome. Write more?
2/24/2003 c1 2OnyxLining
I like it! Unique plot line (as far as I know), interesting characters, not overly and needlessly dramatic. (And then, with the smallest, faintest quiver, almost like a bee flicking dew off of his wing in the early dawn to mid-morning timeperiod on an early August day-no wait-it was still July, and summer's breath was bringing life to the earth and ripening her for harvest-but-wait-there was no dew on the bee's wing-however there was some condensation on the wasp's antennae-is that how you spell it?-but with the faint quiver of a bee who WOULD flick dew off its wing-Mike sighed.)
That was drawn out and more time than it was worth. But, I really would like to see more of the story, it was fun to read. I'll give you "creative critisizm" if I can come up with any. (Don't expect it any time soon.)
-Onyx
2OnyxLiningI like it! Unique plot line (as far as I know), interesting characters, not overly and needlessly dramatic. (And then, with the smallest, faintest quiver, almost like a bee flicking dew off of his wing in the early dawn to mid-morning timeperiod on an early August day-no wait-it was still July, and summer's breath was bringing life to the earth and ripening her for harvest-but-wait-there was no dew on the bee's wing-however there was some condensation on the wasp's antennae-is that how you spell it?-but with the faint quiver of a bee who WOULD flick dew off its wing-Mike sighed.)
That was drawn out and more time than it was worth. But, I really would like to see more of the story, it was fun to read. I'll give you "creative critisizm" if I can come up with any. (Don't expect it any time soon.)
-Onyx
11/13/2002 c1 43Carter Tachikawa
Interesting story so far. I can't believe looked me up and reviewed me, I almost had a heart failure. But I don't mind. Nice story, keep writing.~CT
43Carter TachikawaInteresting story so far. I can't believe looked me up and reviewed me, I almost had a heart failure. But I don't mind. Nice story, keep writing.~CT