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12/29/2002 c1 Star7
gorgeous opening stanza, that hopeful note that starts the song. lovely. the middle was a bit vague and beginning of the end. your final lines were good, but seemed dreary and the wording was confusing. it seemed more chopped than the first stanza and threw it off rhythm. it was pretty good, could use some different vocabulary but i like the message. nicely done.

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