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12/4/2000 c1 Me Large Balls
It was good...Learn how to use correct grammer though.
11/16/2000 c1 30Lioness Black
The ending was sort of rushed, and seemed to have a 'just a little too easy' feeling about it. And when they talked, they seemed a little over-rehersed, but I do that, so I can't critisize. I can't spell as well. :-) Back to the story. Putting "u" instead of "You" or putting "5" instead of "five" looks sloppy, and takes notice away from the story and onto the sloppiness, and no one want that.~Lioness
11/8/2000 c1 1Jules Dickens
A really good story. Very clever twist. I think that you should write you like "you" instead of "u" since it's a formal bit of writing and right at the beginning in the first paragraph you wrote "fine" instead of "find" But besides for that I think it's really cool.
11/8/2000 c1 CompleteandUdder CRAP
Watt arr u like n 3 grade? Or arr u a crimal that rides w/ppl n they're trunks?

(by the way, I'm making fun of you. I don't really talk like that. But that's okay. Well, I guess I'll try to fine some help now!)
11/6/2000 c1 Shit
That sucked ass

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