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1/10/2004 c1 Just Wolf
i loved the idea of yourself being your biggest secret of all. the descriptions were gorgeus. i loved "roccoon smudged mascara eyes". gave me good images! it was a nice, if stark, story.
7/29/2003 c1 6Black and Silver Dreamer
Wow, this is amazing, really. The last few lines just pull it all together, and you really give a good image of what she's like, on the inside and out. All and all a beautiful piece of writing.
6/15/2003 c1 12Vuelo
This is different. For some reason, i think of like a trailor park... i dont even know why! Its a girl/woman and she's living a bland boring shit life and she pretends to be okay with that, but really inside she dreams of lights and colours and everything but what she has... but nobody knows. I really dont know... but thats what i think! I like it.

6/10/2003 c1 13Beau Porteur De Diamant
Awesome poem. I especially liked the last line with the "I am my biggest secret of all." You have talent.
3/15/2003 c1 27Loganberry
I absolutely love the "prism" idea. And "ashes of cigarettes and her soul" is genius. This is really very good stuff indeed... the only problem being that "raccoon mascara" has put an image into my head that I simply cannot get rid of - and I doubt it's the one that was intended! =;)
11/26/2002 c1 reject punk rocker
this is also amazingly good. ur writing is real sweet, u should keep it up. its diff from other stuff iv read, urs seems more open...in a way:S and better than mine cas my stuffs just a shitload of spur of the moment crap. to me, my stuffs just reflections of how i feel at the time...if u get me? and i have these freaky lil caracters hehe, called adam and isoble which my band play the songs i wrote to. for now

farewell, god bless AND KEEP WRITING! kerry xxx
11/21/2002 c1 6j.e. falton
very real. nice job.
11/19/2002 c1 12Robin the Jarbog
Wow. That's deep.
11/13/2002 c1 Lippy
This has a very angsty feel to it. I like it. Is it about you? Or about a character? Or even your bestest friend?

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