for The Game1/18/2003 c4 
6Sabeline Malenfant
this is getting extremely... boring and repetitive. i find myself asking, repeatedly, good god, *when* do the filler chapters end?
6Sabeline Malenfantthis is getting extremely... boring and repetitive. i find myself asking, repeatedly, good god, *when* do the filler chapters end?
1/18/2003 c8 2krazy-cutie-chic
nice storyyy u have goin on here, is she gonna die? and im thinking rini and kaner or wahtever his name is llikes eachodert but hes supposed to be wiht rainy...or whatever im r=very out of it keep up the writting tho
mich
2krazy-cutie-chicnice storyyy u have goin on here, is she gonna die? and im thinking rini and kaner or wahtever his name is llikes eachodert but hes supposed to be wiht rainy...or whatever im r=very out of it keep up the writting tho
mich
1/16/2003 c8 LazyDaze06
i'm glad u ^dated. so, raina & normak's supposed 2 fall in love? i thought it was kander & raina who were supposed 2 fall in love. n e ways, can't wait until the next chap.
i'm glad u ^dated. so, raina & normak's supposed 2 fall in love? i thought it was kander & raina who were supposed 2 fall in love. n e ways, can't wait until the next chap.
1/16/2003 c8 ski1118
well of course i review every chapter! i'm just nice like that and i just have to let you know that i enjoy your story. so, about this chapter! i knew she wasn't dead. I KNEW IT! lol. i'm glad she isn't. now this plan can get on with it. whatever the hell it is. i think i know, so let me take a stab at, alright? here goes. plan was to have normrak and raina fall in love isn't it? and there is more to it than that, which i can't figure out. she will enjoy her life more now, after he's killed her family and all? and rina keeps saying that she doesn't deserve it? i don't know, it makes me think of some kind of power or some kind of position she will gain? i don't understand. you have to clarify it sooner or later! so kander and rina are officially a couple? well, i kind of figured and all, but they started talking serious about relationships in this chapter soooo... yeah. well, i still don't like her. and kander is okay. he's just okay now. he's not the best guy in the world, but he's not too bad. normrak is still my guy. i don't care about how much he torments her, okay so i do, but i love the bad guys. can't you tell? i've always loved the bad guys and i always seem to fall for them. *sighs* don't we all? oh well... and would you stop saying that your writing is not good? it's amazing and you know it, so stop it already. no more compliments out of me, can't feed your ego too much now can we? if i did we'd all probably be waiting for chapters forever just because you know we would! lol. well, another well written chapter, as always. and they sort of kind of fell to sleep together at the end. good good good. they are getting there. it'll be a while, but they are getting there. so i'm going to go now because i'm just going to start rambling and it's very late right now. very late. but it's snowing here again! hopefully i won't have snow tomorrow, let's hope, right? lol, bye bye now! update as soon as you can!
well of course i review every chapter! i'm just nice like that and i just have to let you know that i enjoy your story. so, about this chapter! i knew she wasn't dead. I KNEW IT! lol. i'm glad she isn't. now this plan can get on with it. whatever the hell it is. i think i know, so let me take a stab at, alright? here goes. plan was to have normrak and raina fall in love isn't it? and there is more to it than that, which i can't figure out. she will enjoy her life more now, after he's killed her family and all? and rina keeps saying that she doesn't deserve it? i don't know, it makes me think of some kind of power or some kind of position she will gain? i don't understand. you have to clarify it sooner or later! so kander and rina are officially a couple? well, i kind of figured and all, but they started talking serious about relationships in this chapter soooo... yeah. well, i still don't like her. and kander is okay. he's just okay now. he's not the best guy in the world, but he's not too bad. normrak is still my guy. i don't care about how much he torments her, okay so i do, but i love the bad guys. can't you tell? i've always loved the bad guys and i always seem to fall for them. *sighs* don't we all? oh well... and would you stop saying that your writing is not good? it's amazing and you know it, so stop it already. no more compliments out of me, can't feed your ego too much now can we? if i did we'd all probably be waiting for chapters forever just because you know we would! lol. well, another well written chapter, as always. and they sort of kind of fell to sleep together at the end. good good good. they are getting there. it'll be a while, but they are getting there. so i'm going to go now because i'm just going to start rambling and it's very late right now. very late. but it's snowing here again! hopefully i won't have snow tomorrow, let's hope, right? lol, bye bye now! update as soon as you can!
1/16/2003 c8 Abby
wow wow wow wow, this is good . . . so he saved her . . . i wasnt that far off lol
OMG i cant waite to see what'll happen next
thanks for the email :)
lotsa lovin Abby ^_^
wow wow wow wow, this is good . . . so he saved her . . . i wasnt that far off lol
OMG i cant waite to see what'll happen next
thanks for the email :)
lotsa lovin Abby ^_^
1/15/2003 c8 Arsenal Always
Amazing, fantastic, superb, woderful, and if you don't write more quickly I'll skin you. This story is great but what on earth is wroung with Rina; Why don't the two of them get along? And what is wroung with the Head? Dosn't he find his SON's actions slightly. . .disturbing? How can Raina sleep, isn't she scared that the homicidal vampire with homicidal tendancies that's in love with her is sleeping in the same house? By the way, I have a guess: Can part of this whole 'game' thing be something about competition for Raina's love between the two vampires? Obscure, but I try. The story is great but I still feel like it could be slowed down a bit instead of her being in the hospital one minute and on some desserted isle in the next sentence! Please write!
~Blue Eyes~
Amazing, fantastic, superb, woderful, and if you don't write more quickly I'll skin you. This story is great but what on earth is wroung with Rina; Why don't the two of them get along? And what is wroung with the Head? Dosn't he find his SON's actions slightly. . .disturbing? How can Raina sleep, isn't she scared that the homicidal vampire with homicidal tendancies that's in love with her is sleeping in the same house? By the way, I have a guess: Can part of this whole 'game' thing be something about competition for Raina's love between the two vampires? Obscure, but I try. The story is great but I still feel like it could be slowed down a bit instead of her being in the hospital one minute and on some desserted isle in the next sentence! Please write!
~Blue Eyes~
1/11/2003 c7 Arsenal Always
This story is great! My one criticism is a lac of description other than that this is amazing!
~Blue Eyes~
This story is great! My one criticism is a lac of description other than that this is amazing!
~Blue Eyes~
1/6/2003 c7 ski1118
oh my god... you so did NOT kill raina! no, not when her and normrak kissed, finally! and what was up with him kissing her right before she died in the water? i don't know... but she can't be dead. not yet! it's not fair. it's too open ended and you are going to have me pondering this whole story until you update again! ahhhh! and what is this whole huge big plan thing that the head concocted! and how come rina knows about it too? i don't get it. i'm confused. but that is obviously the point isn't it? well, just to let you know, i really, really HATE rina. with a passion, and i was so hoping that she was dead when normrak knocked her out. grrrr! anyway. i was so angry when i saw reviews for chapter 7 and then i couldn't read it! i was literally flipping out, and then finally ff.net stopped being a bitch and let me read! *grins* ff.net really pisses me off sometimes. anyway. another reason she can't be dead! he 'killed' her a day before he was supposed to! and that just kind of tips me off right there. and birthday? is it normrak's birthday? hmmm... well, gotta cut this one just a bit short today. sorry! and hey, go right ahead and use the summary if you want to. it was just an idea, but if you like it than go for it! :o) and as for names, i'll think if you want me to... but i really think that the title is sufficient for your story. but i'll think anyway. lol, okay, really gotta go now!
oh my god... you so did NOT kill raina! no, not when her and normrak kissed, finally! and what was up with him kissing her right before she died in the water? i don't know... but she can't be dead. not yet! it's not fair. it's too open ended and you are going to have me pondering this whole story until you update again! ahhhh! and what is this whole huge big plan thing that the head concocted! and how come rina knows about it too? i don't get it. i'm confused. but that is obviously the point isn't it? well, just to let you know, i really, really HATE rina. with a passion, and i was so hoping that she was dead when normrak knocked her out. grrrr! anyway. i was so angry when i saw reviews for chapter 7 and then i couldn't read it! i was literally flipping out, and then finally ff.net stopped being a bitch and let me read! *grins* ff.net really pisses me off sometimes. anyway. another reason she can't be dead! he 'killed' her a day before he was supposed to! and that just kind of tips me off right there. and birthday? is it normrak's birthday? hmmm... well, gotta cut this one just a bit short today. sorry! and hey, go right ahead and use the summary if you want to. it was just an idea, but if you like it than go for it! :o) and as for names, i'll think if you want me to... but i really think that the title is sufficient for your story. but i'll think anyway. lol, okay, really gotta go now!
1/6/2003 c7 tricklingdust
Horrible? This was not horrible! This was ADDICTIVE! AND A CLIFFHANGER! AND YOU MUST WRITE MORE! O_O And what's with this "everything was working out perfectly" thing? It's all freaky.. Can't wait for next chapter!
Horrible? This was not horrible! This was ADDICTIVE! AND A CLIFFHANGER! AND YOU MUST WRITE MORE! O_O And what's with this "everything was working out perfectly" thing? It's all freaky.. Can't wait for next chapter!
1/6/2003 c7 Abby
Would you listin to ur self . . . THIS IS DAMN GOOD . . . it is really; but whats gona happen next is normrak gona come pick up her body and finish the Transformation coz we all know he fell for her bad ;p lol
or will she have enough of his blood to wake up ?
OMG OMG i dont know what to think! see how meany questions u've aroused AND you SAY this is a BAD chapter . . .HA! its really good
Would you listin to ur self . . . THIS IS DAMN GOOD . . . it is really; but whats gona happen next is normrak gona come pick up her body and finish the Transformation coz we all know he fell for her bad ;p lol
or will she have enough of his blood to wake up ?
OMG OMG i dont know what to think! see how meany questions u've aroused AND you SAY this is a BAD chapter . . .HA! its really good
1/3/2003 c6 tricklingdust
Wow, this is a great story! ski1118 knows how to pick 'em. ^_^ While I've been waiting for her to update HER story, I've been reading her favorites. And she has great taste. ^_^ Post chapter 7 already, will ya?
Wow, this is a great story! ski1118 knows how to pick 'em. ^_^ While I've been waiting for her to update HER story, I've been reading her favorites. And she has great taste. ^_^ Post chapter 7 already, will ya?
1/2/2003 c6 Abby
OOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMGGGGGGGGG, this is really good :)
i like it, i really do.
is normrak gona end up falling in love with her? are they gona end up together?
and will kander gona be with rina ... well duh thats clear ;p
neways please write more soon :) please
and could u please email me telling me that you updated :P
thanks ;)
lotsa lovin Abby ^_^
OOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMGGGGGGGGG, this is really good :)
i like it, i really do.
is normrak gona end up falling in love with her? are they gona end up together?
and will kander gona be with rina ... well duh thats clear ;p
neways please write more soon :) please
and could u please email me telling me that you updated :P
thanks ;)
lotsa lovin Abby ^_^
12/31/2002 c6 ski1118
so sorry about my last review, a little misinterpretation on my part. didn't mean to insult anyone, seriously. devin, you sounded a little pissed off in your last review, and i'm sorry if i was the cause of that~
now, about the chapter! oh my god he got her back. should we give him a gold metal or something for finally doing it? lol, anyway. cat fight was great. raina should have killed her though. i think she got most of her moves from being the reciever of them from normrak. and yes, i really do like normrak, and i believe that he likes raina, even if he won't admit it. yeah he beats her, and that's a definite no-no... but, i don't know. gotta love the bad guys. lol. but anyway, yeah, still not liking kander much. he's turning into a player if the little thing at the end indicated that those two were going to start something. grrr... really don't like him. can't wait for normrak to come get her back, because now he can, right? with him being 'bonded' to her and all... but knowing him he'd find her anyway. but what was this with kander saying stuff like normrak wouldn't kill her? interesting... ;o)
names and summaries... well i can't say i'm great with coming up with names for stories, believe me i suck at it. just take a lot at how cliched my titles are, geez. i plan on changing mine as well, sometime. lol.
summary though... hmmm... i think raina summed it up pretty well in this chapter. just take something from that little speech she said, it would work fine, just play with it a little to create a summary.
"Raina is kidnapped the night after her graduation, only to be thrown into a game of life and death that she had no idea existed with concepts she cannot even grasp. With a man she's supposed to fall in love with, and another out to kill her, things are heating up..."
something like that. but i don't know, i'm not too good with summaries either...
question: how long are your chapters on microsoft word? i love the length of them, but i was just curious because you said you are almost done the next chapter already, which i'm thrilled to pieces about, but you have 4 more pages to go. mine are only 15-20 most of the time, what are yours, like 30? no complaints at all though! love the long chapters, and i cannot wait for you to update again.
well, in conclusion(damn my reviews are getting too long, lol) wondeful chapter, as usual! and i hope you finish up those 4 pages soon! :o)
so sorry about my last review, a little misinterpretation on my part. didn't mean to insult anyone, seriously. devin, you sounded a little pissed off in your last review, and i'm sorry if i was the cause of that~
now, about the chapter! oh my god he got her back. should we give him a gold metal or something for finally doing it? lol, anyway. cat fight was great. raina should have killed her though. i think she got most of her moves from being the reciever of them from normrak. and yes, i really do like normrak, and i believe that he likes raina, even if he won't admit it. yeah he beats her, and that's a definite no-no... but, i don't know. gotta love the bad guys. lol. but anyway, yeah, still not liking kander much. he's turning into a player if the little thing at the end indicated that those two were going to start something. grrr... really don't like him. can't wait for normrak to come get her back, because now he can, right? with him being 'bonded' to her and all... but knowing him he'd find her anyway. but what was this with kander saying stuff like normrak wouldn't kill her? interesting... ;o)
names and summaries... well i can't say i'm great with coming up with names for stories, believe me i suck at it. just take a lot at how cliched my titles are, geez. i plan on changing mine as well, sometime. lol.
summary though... hmmm... i think raina summed it up pretty well in this chapter. just take something from that little speech she said, it would work fine, just play with it a little to create a summary.
"Raina is kidnapped the night after her graduation, only to be thrown into a game of life and death that she had no idea existed with concepts she cannot even grasp. With a man she's supposed to fall in love with, and another out to kill her, things are heating up..."
something like that. but i don't know, i'm not too good with summaries either...
question: how long are your chapters on microsoft word? i love the length of them, but i was just curious because you said you are almost done the next chapter already, which i'm thrilled to pieces about, but you have 4 more pages to go. mine are only 15-20 most of the time, what are yours, like 30? no complaints at all though! love the long chapters, and i cannot wait for you to update again.
well, in conclusion(damn my reviews are getting too long, lol) wondeful chapter, as usual! and i hope you finish up those 4 pages soon! :o)
12/27/2002 c5 lucy ann
yeah it is a lot easier to read ... please write another chapter soon
thanx
yeah it is a lot easier to read ... please write another chapter soon
thanx
12/26/2002 c1 Devin
To ski1118 (again): Heh, she IS 13 now, she'll be turning 14 soon, and she already is in high school, she skipped a grade. And she's been writing since she's been 8, so that gave her 5 years to get reeeeeeally good. Which she is. And she's gonna get something published, 'cause I said so. Er...yeah. I know all this about her, 'cause I'm her best friend WHEE. -cough- Anyway...Shelle, I hope you don't mind me telling all this stuff about you. Heh, it was fun though.
To ski1118 (again): Heh, she IS 13 now, she'll be turning 14 soon, and she already is in high school, she skipped a grade. And she's been writing since she's been 8, so that gave her 5 years to get reeeeeeally good. Which she is. And she's gonna get something published, 'cause I said so. Er...yeah. I know all this about her, 'cause I'm her best friend WHEE. -cough- Anyway...Shelle, I hope you don't mind me telling all this stuff about you. Heh, it was fun though.