for Guardian Angel1/6/2003 c6 Spud
Welll, really. It's a nice story and all. But I do advise you to use a thesaurus more. Because you tend to use the same words a lot. That makes the story harder to read and duller. Other than that it's great.
Welll, really. It's a nice story and all. But I do advise you to use a thesaurus more. Because you tend to use the same words a lot. That makes the story harder to read and duller. Other than that it's great.
1/6/2003 c13 
1mistressofterror
Sad. What is he sick with though? My brain is not functioning right or I might be able to figure it out. Oh well. Great story!
1mistressofterrorSad. What is he sick with though? My brain is not functioning right or I might be able to figure it out. Oh well. Great story!
1/5/2003 c13 Slim
Although it seems that this is the end, I certainly hope that it is not, or that you are planning a sequel. ::nods:: I strongly suggest it, as this is an absolutely beautiful story. I like the way you made the ending happy and sad at the same time, which I have found is an extremely difficult thing to accomplish.. It's like he isn't over Adam's death but he can look at it in a positive way.. like remembering all the good times they shared and the places they liked to go.. And this part here: 'But I suddenly felt this great release from my soul, as if some unbearably heavy burden had been removed', I like a lot. It explains so much about the way he is feeling. Great writing. ^-^
*slim*
Although it seems that this is the end, I certainly hope that it is not, or that you are planning a sequel. ::nods:: I strongly suggest it, as this is an absolutely beautiful story. I like the way you made the ending happy and sad at the same time, which I have found is an extremely difficult thing to accomplish.. It's like he isn't over Adam's death but he can look at it in a positive way.. like remembering all the good times they shared and the places they liked to go.. And this part here: 'But I suddenly felt this great release from my soul, as if some unbearably heavy burden had been removed', I like a lot. It explains so much about the way he is feeling. Great writing. ^-^
*slim*
12/29/2002 c12 Lorie
First of all, I want to say sorry for not reading this sooner. I haven't had the time, and I am sorry.
On that note, I want to saw wow. You're story, many times over has left me speechless. It won me over from the start as a great piece of work, and anyone who doesn't take part in reading this is simply missing out. You struck so many emotions in me, and that can be truely hard thing to do.
I can't get over how simply amazing this story is... So wonderfully worded, extremely well thought out, a great story line... It was wonderful.
Whether this story is done, or you still have something to write on it, I can't wait to see more from you... Please, write more =) You did a superb job with this... Well done... =)
First of all, I want to say sorry for not reading this sooner. I haven't had the time, and I am sorry.
On that note, I want to saw wow. You're story, many times over has left me speechless. It won me over from the start as a great piece of work, and anyone who doesn't take part in reading this is simply missing out. You struck so many emotions in me, and that can be truely hard thing to do.
I can't get over how simply amazing this story is... So wonderfully worded, extremely well thought out, a great story line... It was wonderful.
Whether this story is done, or you still have something to write on it, I can't wait to see more from you... Please, write more =) You did a superb job with this... Well done... =)
12/17/2002 c12 Gloria-Krasy
Poor Adam!
I didn't expect it to happen, it was really, really sad, but I suppose you know that.
Is this the last chapter?
I hope it isn't, because it is very good story. We know how John must feel after that, but at least one more chapter...
Anyway, keep on writing.
Poor Adam!
I didn't expect it to happen, it was really, really sad, but I suppose you know that.
Is this the last chapter?
I hope it isn't, because it is very good story. We know how John must feel after that, but at least one more chapter...
Anyway, keep on writing.
12/16/2002 c12 1mistressofterror
You are mean! How could you kill Adam? You must be one of those people who don't like happy endings huh? I'm not to angry I mean it's a great story but why so sad? I want to cry...
1mistressofterrorYou are mean! How could you kill Adam? You must be one of those people who don't like happy endings huh? I'm not to angry I mean it's a great story but why so sad? I want to cry...
12/16/2002 c12 8PaperLanterns
woah, that was really sad. I wasn't really expecting that to happen...that's a good thing. It takes a lot to make me cry, but congratulations, you did it. Well done, powerful writing
8PaperLanternswoah, that was really sad. I wasn't really expecting that to happen...that's a good thing. It takes a lot to make me cry, but congratulations, you did it. Well done, powerful writing
12/16/2002 c12 Slim not signed in
You...killed him. Well, there's some mistake right?
RIGHT?
::blinks and looks around hopefully::
Write more soon...just make something good happen...
::cries::
...*slim*
You...killed him. Well, there's some mistake right?
RIGHT?
::blinks and looks around hopefully::
Write more soon...just make something good happen...
::cries::
...*slim*
12/15/2002 c11 1mistressofterror
Ohhh...I hope you plan to have this go well. I might cry if you have Adam die.
1mistressofterrorOhhh...I hope you plan to have this go well. I might cry if you have Adam die.
12/15/2002 c11 8PaperLanterns
i really like your story, it has elements of a soap opera, yet somehow it's not to chliched and you do a good job of making the reader get attached to the characters.
8PaperLanternsi really like your story, it has elements of a soap opera, yet somehow it's not to chliched and you do a good job of making the reader get attached to the characters.
12/15/2002 c11 Slim
Beautiful. I like the style of this chapter, it's very emotional and meaningful. I really do hope Adam is alright . . . ^~^ Write more soon . . .
*slim*
Beautiful. I like the style of this chapter, it's very emotional and meaningful. I really do hope Adam is alright . . . ^~^ Write more soon . . .
*slim*
12/13/2002 c10 Slim
Seems that Mark is a little shy. Probably just new to the whole gay scene, lol. Very good writing, get another chapter up sooooooooon!
*slim*
Seems that Mark is a little shy. Probably just new to the whole gay scene, lol. Very good writing, get another chapter up sooooooooon!
*slim*
12/11/2002 c9 suicide-is-painless
what's going on with mark? hum... guess i'll have to wait and find out!
what's going on with mark? hum... guess i'll have to wait and find out!
12/9/2002 c9 1mistressofterror
Like this chapter too though it was kind of slow. Can't wait to see what you have planned for chapter 10!
1mistressofterrorLike this chapter too though it was kind of slow. Can't wait to see what you have planned for chapter 10!