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3/23/2003 c1 53Artemis Astralstar
this is awesome. the repeating "i love you" is very effective
11/30/2002 c1 Cammy4
Awwwwwwww...
11/30/2002 c1 90SweetGrape
Great flow to the end.

Each stanza gives a little message idea in itself, all connected by the bittersweet "I love you"s

First stanza is reminiscent and cute 'same words through different methods'- so many ways to say something so seemingly simple.

Next stanza is much more sorrowful and sad 'ever in my dreams do you say'

The next one focuses mroe on being lonely and englufed in sorry tears, each signifying "I love you".

The next stanza is hopeful and dreamy, romatic and sweet 'spell out in the stars':) nice image.

Next stanza is worried and scared, but determined 'inside I am screaming', very strong and pained and almost out of control, underneath the surface.

Last stanza is sweet and sorrowful 'Although I cannot have you close to me'.

Beautiful contrasts and ideas, very sweet:)
11/30/2002 c1 4Aran
I like how you ended each stanza with "i love you". It was well written out and deserves a good review. So, terrific job :p
11/30/2002 c1 3Faith In A Bad Guy
very good, keep it up!

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