for The Legend of the Lenarean Necklaces6/11/2003 c3 
54Werecat99
I suppose it was not an attacker but a rescuer? Well, we'll see.
Interesting twist with those people. A secret society to find and guard the chosen one? Good!
And she doesn't want to be the chosen one. This will be tough.
54Werecat99I suppose it was not an attacker but a rescuer? Well, we'll see.
Interesting twist with those people. A secret society to find and guard the chosen one? Good!
And she doesn't want to be the chosen one. This will be tough.
6/1/2003 c2 Werecat99
Well, I'm back.
Loved the opening paragraphs and the info on the Moon Festival. I always liked these celebrations. They can used in a million ways in a story, from romance to murder.
The inn was a nice touch too. It was very vivid and added to the reality of the story. And I really like your little thief.
Thanks for the review.
Well, I'm back.
Loved the opening paragraphs and the info on the Moon Festival. I always liked these celebrations. They can used in a million ways in a story, from romance to murder.
The inn was a nice touch too. It was very vivid and added to the reality of the story. And I really like your little thief.
Thanks for the review.
5/30/2003 c5 7chikadee
So far so good. I'll read more when I'm more awake. Off to bed, hopefully I'll get to it tomorrow but since I've got company it may take a few days.
chikadee
7chikadeeSo far so good. I'll read more when I'm more awake. Off to bed, hopefully I'll get to it tomorrow but since I've got company it may take a few days.
chikadee
5/29/2003 c1 54Werecat99
The scene of Creation was just beautiful. I could almost see it happen.
Loved the concept of the Grismonds. And again, I like all dark things...
The One of Shadow and The Lightbringer. I suppose these will be your heroes? I like it.
This is a very good story. I like your style. Clear, honest and poetic. And it's a joy to read it.
I'll be back for more.
54Werecat99The scene of Creation was just beautiful. I could almost see it happen.
Loved the concept of the Grismonds. And again, I like all dark things...
The One of Shadow and The Lightbringer. I suppose these will be your heroes? I like it.
This is a very good story. I like your style. Clear, honest and poetic. And it's a joy to read it.
I'll be back for more.
4/14/2003 c3 HannahMarieWillow
Really good plot, well 4t out. I like the bit @ the beginning, the legend bit. I'll b wanting 2 read more when I have the time.
Really good plot, well 4t out. I like the bit @ the beginning, the legend bit. I'll b wanting 2 read more when I have the time.
4/3/2003 c7 8DeeEe
Hmm...and the plot continues in it's plunge. It seems that her wandering down that single ally in her haste to escape the guard has definitly put her in a postition she never planned for. Almost ironic, though amusing that she would have the mark in the one place it would not easily be found.
8DeeEeHmm...and the plot continues in it's plunge. It seems that her wandering down that single ally in her haste to escape the guard has definitly put her in a postition she never planned for. Almost ironic, though amusing that she would have the mark in the one place it would not easily be found.
3/15/2003 c3 1Madame Mad
Again: wow! This keeps getting better and better. I couldn't stop to review chapter two, because I'm so into the story. (But needed to stop now, because I have so many things I want to say). I love how you are handling this story. The introduction of Kaly was great and really set up her character. I also love how you are handling the other characters as well. The dialogue and situation you have placed them in really helps define each character, even though some of them are only secondary right now. The dialogue is great, and again the prose is superb. I'm sorry I really don't have anything insightful to say (it's late at night, in my defense). This is such a GREAT story (going on my favourites for sure).
1Madame MadAgain: wow! This keeps getting better and better. I couldn't stop to review chapter two, because I'm so into the story. (But needed to stop now, because I have so many things I want to say). I love how you are handling this story. The introduction of Kaly was great and really set up her character. I also love how you are handling the other characters as well. The dialogue and situation you have placed them in really helps define each character, even though some of them are only secondary right now. The dialogue is great, and again the prose is superb. I'm sorry I really don't have anything insightful to say (it's late at night, in my defense). This is such a GREAT story (going on my favourites for sure).
3/15/2003 c1 Madame Mad
Oh wow! This is such an INCREDIBLE story (and I'm only on chapter one!). The mythology you have created here is so vivid. The foreshawdowing and conflict is great- I can already see the endless possibilites of an epic tale unfolding! Your writing style is great, very excellent prose and eloquent dialogue. I'm off to chapter two now! This is soo good!
Oh wow! This is such an INCREDIBLE story (and I'm only on chapter one!). The mythology you have created here is so vivid. The foreshawdowing and conflict is great- I can already see the endless possibilites of an epic tale unfolding! Your writing style is great, very excellent prose and eloquent dialogue. I'm off to chapter two now! This is soo good!
3/13/2003 c6 Uneverno
I haven't started reading your other story because I am still holding out hope that you will write more on this one. I really would like to know how the rest of the story turns out. But if you have a block I do understand. I guess I will just have to read your new story.
I haven't started reading your other story because I am still holding out hope that you will write more on this one. I really would like to know how the rest of the story turns out. But if you have a block I do understand. I guess I will just have to read your new story.
2/24/2003 c6 8DeeEe
Hmm.the first chapter had a few rough spots, but you seemed to have gotten better or something and the later chapters flow very well. I love this little world you created and the fact that the Lightbringer doesn't seem to be super human. Her reaction was so real, probably how any person would react if told this (rather than the reaction a person hopes to have.) It's wonderful.
8DeeEeHmm.the first chapter had a few rough spots, but you seemed to have gotten better or something and the later chapters flow very well. I love this little world you created and the fact that the Lightbringer doesn't seem to be super human. Her reaction was so real, probably how any person would react if told this (rather than the reaction a person hopes to have.) It's wonderful.
1/15/2003 c5 Leanne
So far I am really enjoying your story. I don't have any critism to offer. I just hope you keep writing so I can find out how it all ends. Keep up the good work.
So far I am really enjoying your story. I don't have any critism to offer. I just hope you keep writing so I can find out how it all ends. Keep up the good work.
1/11/2003 c1 Kyonae Falconatoo lazy to log in
Yo, naughty little munchkin! i love your story! I once had an idea slightly like it, but now it's evolved into something so out of whack it unrecognizable. Haven't poseted it up yet. anywho, I love this and I'm going to review all of your chapters, so you will be inspired to write more. Please write more! Please? *puppy dog eyes* Later!
Kyonae Falcona~~~
Yo, naughty little munchkin! i love your story! I once had an idea slightly like it, but now it's evolved into something so out of whack it unrecognizable. Haven't poseted it up yet. anywho, I love this and I'm going to review all of your chapters, so you will be inspired to write more. Please write more! Please? *puppy dog eyes* Later!
Kyonae Falcona~~~
12/12/2002 c2 1NightChild
NadieG!
what happens next!
This is so good! i love how u used old fashioned english stuff. ie six and ten? lol.. just like in Jane Austin.. :)
lol! i want to know.. is she the lightbringer or da one of shadow? please post more!
love, ur friend Danni
Also... email me da next chapter of SwanRider please!
1NightChildNadieG!
what happens next!
This is so good! i love how u used old fashioned english stuff. ie six and ten? lol.. just like in Jane Austin.. :)
lol! i want to know.. is she the lightbringer or da one of shadow? please post more!
love, ur friend Danni
Also... email me da next chapter of SwanRider please!
12/12/2002 c1 NightChild
Oh mi god! NadieG!
Is this the story you wrote before SwanRider?
lol.. this is so good! so suspenseful!
i love all the names... well onwards to chapter 2!
Oh mi god! NadieG!
Is this the story you wrote before SwanRider?
lol.. this is so good! so suspenseful!
i love all the names... well onwards to chapter 2!