2/16/2004 c1 rd-kittykat
Despite having the same title as my poem, I find this one much better. Good job with the metaphors. This one is going in my favs.

12/23/2002 c1 Kes Yamahi
Your description of setting and place is really good! I can totally see the scene. I think it's hard today to write angst that can be taken at all seriously and this poem shows a lot of promise. It was kind of hard for me to identify with the narrator, though; there's no description or real self involved, just a voice. I almost feel more empathy with the darkness itself than the narrator because the darkness is so anthropomorphized and it has identity and description. But your diction is good, and you have a great sense of where to break your lines! :) The poem reads really easily, too. Pretty good work.

12/17/2002 c1 26K. Coulson
This is a really good poem. I know i sound so cliche, but this is a really deep poem. I'd like to see more of your work!