for Pity for my Foe7/11/2003 c1 K. Evenstar
I'm studying War Poetry for English A-level at the moment, this reminds me of that. It was very moving, very good.
I'm studying War Poetry for English A-level at the moment, this reminds me of that. It was very moving, very good.
6/9/2003 c1 
106cosmo-queen
Very good poem, I liked the story element and I especially liked the ending. It just goes to show that everyone is human. I liked the lines:
"I silently climbed up the hill
And watched the sunset rise
A silhouette of my foe came
With malice in his eyes"
Great work, keep writing :)
*cosmo-queen*
106cosmo-queenVery good poem, I liked the story element and I especially liked the ending. It just goes to show that everyone is human. I liked the lines:
"I silently climbed up the hill
And watched the sunset rise
A silhouette of my foe came
With malice in his eyes"
Great work, keep writing :)
*cosmo-queen*
5/6/2003 c1 72CancerianQueen
Umm, okay. Great poem, written well... but sad... arrogant! *LOL* Sorry, nah, you are a really good writer! :)
Keep writing,
Vnomi. ;)
72CancerianQueenUmm, okay. Great poem, written well... but sad... arrogant! *LOL* Sorry, nah, you are a really good writer! :)
Keep writing,
Vnomi. ;)
5/4/2003 c1 lehes
O poor person. I liked the battle part. Ok I liked the hole thing but the battle was my fave.
O poor person. I liked the battle part. Ok I liked the hole thing but the battle was my fave.
5/1/2003 c1 219RNL
Thats kinda cool. I can't begin to imagine what goes on in your head, but its cool nevertheless
219RNLThats kinda cool. I can't begin to imagine what goes on in your head, but its cool nevertheless
4/30/2003 c1 51Lieschen
Definitely good. I liked the little twist, wouldn't it have been scary if he'd known the guy ? i know..impossible. But yeah, very well done.
ELise
51LieschenDefinitely good. I liked the little twist, wouldn't it have been scary if he'd known the guy ? i know..impossible. But yeah, very well done.
ELise
4/30/2003 c1 Abandoned Love
This is a great poem, except the rhyme seems a bit unsteady. It's a very nice narrative poem and tells an interesting story.
This is a great poem, except the rhyme seems a bit unsteady. It's a very nice narrative poem and tells an interesting story.
4/30/2003 c1 4arkarian-named
actually nothing much to do wif ur stuff...i just wanted to say princess mononoke is a very nice show. ITS NO. 1 ON MY LIST... cuz i dun see ppl around who like it...yar... aniwaes...just to say sumthng about ur poem...-its g00d-
4arkarian-namedactually nothing much to do wif ur stuff...i just wanted to say princess mononoke is a very nice show. ITS NO. 1 ON MY LIST... cuz i dun see ppl around who like it...yar... aniwaes...just to say sumthng about ur poem...-its g00d-
4/29/2003 c1 12Tyde
Ouch - harsh - but I liked it even so. Good descriptive language.
Thanks for reviewing my song even though you don't like country :o)
12TydeOuch - harsh - but I liked it even so. Good descriptive language.
Thanks for reviewing my song even though you don't like country :o)
4/27/2003 c1 54Werecat99
That was certainly different. Overall, I liked it. However, the names used for the brothers struck me a bit odd in the fantasy setting of the poem. Too modern, in a way.
Apart from that detail, it was a good poem.
54Werecat99That was certainly different. Overall, I liked it. However, the names used for the brothers struck me a bit odd in the fantasy setting of the poem. Too modern, in a way.
Apart from that detail, it was a good poem.
4/7/2003 c1 6Belle the Shadow-Cat
Nice poem, Xero...although i'd change the the i'd at the end of the poem to i had
-Belle
P.S: Playing with characters is fun isn't it
Poor Nexis
6Belle the Shadow-CatNice poem, Xero...although i'd change the the i'd at the end of the poem to i had
-Belle
P.S: Playing with characters is fun isn't it
Poor Nexis
3/4/2003 c1 Angelette1
I don't like this poem. It's decent I suppose, but I don't like the subject matter, and it would be so much better for me if you didn't talk like you were coming out of King Arthur's court. And just a small question, why would the opponent raise a brow when you looked at him? And how would you be able to tell he was if his face was covered in blood? I honestly think you should stick to writing stories.
I don't like this poem. It's decent I suppose, but I don't like the subject matter, and it would be so much better for me if you didn't talk like you were coming out of King Arthur's court. And just a small question, why would the opponent raise a brow when you looked at him? And how would you be able to tell he was if his face was covered in blood? I honestly think you should stick to writing stories.