for First and Eldest1/11/2003 c1 
39The Jzoe
Very good story. It makes me wonder who this "character" is. Possibly you? Just reading this has givin me some imput about who you are. Very good piece and I hope you continue. ;)
39The JzoeVery good story. It makes me wonder who this "character" is. Possibly you? Just reading this has givin me some imput about who you are. Very good piece and I hope you continue. ;)
1/11/2003 c1 Nicholas
I was encaptured by the faint breeze of soft, sweet language and words emulated in this story. I was quite pleased with the use of vocabulary and visual artistry, as well as the peaceful nature of the entire story. I enjoyed the indirect development of setting and plot; everything was only understood through the mind of the character, no narration was included, and the reader discovers everything with the character. I enjoyed the theoretical self-inquiries proposed by the character, and how life is seemingly tranquil, without the presence of humanity's destruction known in my present existence. Quite a wonderful story, pleasing and something, if expounded upon, and created more thoroughly into a longer story or book, I would definitely enjoy reading and absorbing.
-Nicholas
I was encaptured by the faint breeze of soft, sweet language and words emulated in this story. I was quite pleased with the use of vocabulary and visual artistry, as well as the peaceful nature of the entire story. I enjoyed the indirect development of setting and plot; everything was only understood through the mind of the character, no narration was included, and the reader discovers everything with the character. I enjoyed the theoretical self-inquiries proposed by the character, and how life is seemingly tranquil, without the presence of humanity's destruction known in my present existence. Quite a wonderful story, pleasing and something, if expounded upon, and created more thoroughly into a longer story or book, I would definitely enjoy reading and absorbing.
-Nicholas
1/5/2003 c1 5yeaka
you read my stories, so here i am ^_^
i've never read any stories other than Yu-Gi-Oh! ones, but i must say, this one was very.. cool. i liked it ^_^. very descriptive. but i'm a bit confused. now we're even for my strange stories.
^_^
5yeakayou read my stories, so here i am ^_^
i've never read any stories other than Yu-Gi-Oh! ones, but i must say, this one was very.. cool. i liked it ^_^. very descriptive. but i'm a bit confused. now we're even for my strange stories.
^_^
12/26/2002 c1 15MySatiah
That was a very descriptive story, and it was very well-written. I haven't read many outside of...well you know anyway. Are you going to continue? Please do, or I might be the one tracking YOU down.
15MySatiahThat was a very descriptive story, and it was very well-written. I haven't read many outside of...well you know anyway. Are you going to continue? Please do, or I might be the one tracking YOU down.
12/26/2002 c1 YOYOYOYOYOYO
U switch too much from a melodramitic and descriptive to a harsh and plain tone to often keep the mood the same through out the story
U switch too much from a melodramitic and descriptive to a harsh and plain tone to often keep the mood the same through out the story
12/25/2002 c1 456427.AKA Danny
good job penny, you've started your way to a spirtual journey. your next task is to start finding answers to these questions. Don't look into books for answers at first. Because they will just confuse you at this point. Searth the world around you, and when you feel you are ready then you will be ready to take on all the philosophy of the past onto your soul
good job penny, you've started your way to a spirtual journey. your next task is to start finding answers to these questions. Don't look into books for answers at first. Because they will just confuse you at this point. Searth the world around you, and when you feel you are ready then you will be ready to take on all the philosophy of the past onto your soul
12/21/2002 c1 8Raonaid Luckwell
First off. You should receive anonymous reviews. You could be missing out on some great help there. Not meaning to be mean or pushy. Just some helpful advise.
Neat way to start with one's views of life. The only reason I opened this up to read was ::sheepish:: I have a friend who is five years older than me named Arda.
Pretty good.. it really makes one think about this person.
8Raonaid LuckwellFirst off. You should receive anonymous reviews. You could be missing out on some great help there. Not meaning to be mean or pushy. Just some helpful advise.
Neat way to start with one's views of life. The only reason I opened this up to read was ::sheepish:: I have a friend who is five years older than me named Arda.
Pretty good.. it really makes one think about this person.
12/21/2002 c1 Attara
That was a really descriptive and intellectual beginning. I have never read a chapter that began like that! I can't wait for the next update!
That was a really descriptive and intellectual beginning. I have never read a chapter that began like that! I can't wait for the next update!