for Richness Isn't Everything1/11/2008 c1 Guest
wow...this is pretty badly written. the sentences should be broken up instead of going on and on. the dialog and thoughts should be more slang-y instead of like in an essay. you have made some grammar and spelling mistakes throughout and u should beta ur story.
other than that i find ur idea quite interesting.
wow...this is pretty badly written. the sentences should be broken up instead of going on and on. the dialog and thoughts should be more slang-y instead of like in an essay. you have made some grammar and spelling mistakes throughout and u should beta ur story.
other than that i find ur idea quite interesting.
5/18/2003 c16 
1fayt of houkiboshi
All this just to make sure her family will be safe. Alexandra is a very strong girl... I admire her. Update soon
1fayt of houkiboshiAll this just to make sure her family will be safe. Alexandra is a very strong girl... I admire her. Update soon
5/17/2003 c16 29TheAwakenerViari
that evil... fill in the blank. good luck with finals and i hope you post another chapter when they're done!
29TheAwakenerViarithat evil... fill in the blank. good luck with finals and i hope you post another chapter when they're done!
5/13/2003 c15 1fayt of houkiboshi
Wow, an update after so long. I wonder what will happen to Alexandra and Tim? Well, update soon.
1fayt of houkiboshiWow, an update after so long. I wonder what will happen to Alexandra and Tim? Well, update soon.
5/3/2003 c6 1Killer Tofu
So they fell in love with each other all in one day? Kinda fast aint it? And youve got some spelling mistakes and missing words from sentences.
1Killer TofuSo they fell in love with each other all in one day? Kinda fast aint it? And youve got some spelling mistakes and missing words from sentences.
4/23/2003 c14 Star
When are you gonna update? I really really really wanna see what happens next. Please update soon.
When are you gonna update? I really really really wanna see what happens next. Please update soon.
4/20/2003 c14 10Blade Griffin
SO sorry i haven't reviewed. My computer keeps breaking down. I have to say i'm very happy that you had them get back together quickly, i'm a hopeless romantic. And i like the plot twist.
10Blade GriffinSO sorry i haven't reviewed. My computer keeps breaking down. I have to say i'm very happy that you had them get back together quickly, i'm a hopeless romantic. And i like the plot twist.
3/31/2003 c14 Star
so...Update much, yes? Thankies!Thankies! :D
so...Update much, yes? Thankies!Thankies! :D
3/31/2003 c14 she4
The story is getting more and more interesting.It's too good.
I am really feeling scared for Alexandra, Tim and little Tim. Oh! Please don't kill them. Do somehow get rid off that cruel boss and make this story have a happy ending.
I beg you not to make this a tragedy. I would feel really down in the dumps if you do so.
The story is getting more and more interesting.It's too good.
I am really feeling scared for Alexandra, Tim and little Tim. Oh! Please don't kill them. Do somehow get rid off that cruel boss and make this story have a happy ending.
I beg you not to make this a tragedy. I would feel really down in the dumps if you do so.
3/21/2003 c14 Star
Gravey. Me likes. But just a little constructive criticism. B4 you put up your chapters online, go through and check the story to make sure that you have no grammer problems. Also, go through a spell check too. Well I think thats all I have to say. Great story. Keep going.
~Star~
Gravey. Me likes. But just a little constructive criticism. B4 you put up your chapters online, go through and check the story to make sure that you have no grammer problems. Also, go through a spell check too. Well I think thats all I have to say. Great story. Keep going.
~Star~
3/21/2003 c14 Killing-Fantasy
bum bum bum..."BeWaRe Someones BACK!" ...guess who's back, back agian ,shaddy's back tell a friend guess whos back guess whos back guess whos back danuhna...hehe sorry listing to eminem! update update update! i want to know whats gonna happen bum bum bum...great story keep it up!
bum bum bum..."BeWaRe Someones BACK!" ...guess who's back, back agian ,shaddy's back tell a friend guess whos back guess whos back guess whos back danuhna...hehe sorry listing to eminem! update update update! i want to know whats gonna happen bum bum bum...great story keep it up!
3/20/2003 c14 Tanya
I have one thing to say...OMG! i wasnt really expecting the ending ofthe chapter. very nice. do update soon.
I have one thing to say...OMG! i wasnt really expecting the ending ofthe chapter. very nice. do update soon.
3/20/2003 c14 1fayt of houkiboshi
This is a really good chapter... oh no! guess who back, back again ^_^ update soon
1fayt of houkiboshiThis is a really good chapter... oh no! guess who back, back again ^_^ update soon