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12/2/2004 c13 10depressed-and-bored
good but not as good as ur other story the Real World
12/1/2004 c13 1PhearsomePshycho
*sigh* so many stories for you to update, so little time before I die of uh... not reading. lol- update soon!
7/15/2004 c13 13Twizzlers
Okay, no offense, but that makes me mad that Michele just gave up on virginity like that. I mean, I'm not gonna be real mean to you about it, but I just had to stick to my convictions there. Anyway, even though this chapter made me mad, I'm still gonna be waiting for you to update. I hope Michele feels guilty for what she did because she really should. But I'll wait to see what you do with it.
Twizz
7/12/2004 c4 Twizzlers
You're an excellent writer and you crack me up! I'm enjoying this becasue it's so .. real. If you threw my band into a house to live together, that's exactly how we would act too. Even though we're really not a band yet, but that's beside the point. Anyway, you're a fantastic writer and I really like reading this, even though I didn't finish yet. But I will. I have to get up early tomorrow morning, however. So no matter how addicting this story is, I do need to sleep eventually. I can't wait to finish reading.
Twizz
5/31/2004 c3 sweetie
hey sounds great...gtg now- read it l8r. keep updating!
5/31/2004 c13 Dreaming One
Hey, thank-you for taking the time to read and review my story. It means a lot to me. ;)
Hmm...not a bad fic you've got here. My only suggestion would be to up the level of description a bit. I know, I know, nobody likes writing description, but that's the best way to get your readers emotionally involved in a story. The more information you give us, the easier it is for us to imagine the events occuring, and the more real it seems. And emotions...emotions are key. You have to either show us what your characters are feeling by giving us their physical reactions, right down to facial expression and gestures, or give us some insight into their minds. And I don't mean simply ~stating~ how they feel...it's hard to explain. Actually, it's something I've always struggled with. The speed with which your characters form relationships might make a bit more sense with more insight, though.
That's the only help I can give you. *shrugs* You've got a good handle on plot and what-not, and definitely have a way with 'cute-ness.' hehehe. Your readers are enjoying this, so keep it up!
~May
5/29/2004 c13 Kate
I'm confused: didn't Michelle want to stay a virgin until her wedding night?
5/29/2004 c13 6Angel-Eyes4
Heya!
Wowie! ME LIKES! hehe!
Very nice touch, you know, the whole soccer challenge, and then the "What do I get if I win?", "me". Vety vety vety nice! hehe.
It was very mushy-ness! I like mushy-ness! (you knew that already, didn't you? lol)
anywho, i must say my farewells! *dramatic sigh*
Au revoir, mon amie! hehehe
Angel-Eyes
5/29/2004 c13 11DreamNightmare
did u read this b4 u posted it? holy fucking shit
-Speechless Melissa
5/26/2004 c12 6Angel-Eyes4
Hiya! Pretty cool story! The Liz chick sounds like a real bitch, lol. Tyler sounds like the typical dream guy (*blissful sigh*), attractive, romantic, sweet, caring.. ahh..let me stop. LOL. Anywho, all in all, great story. Tyler and Michele so need to get together and be all lovey dovey! hehe! Okay? Okay!
=^.^=
meow!
Angel-eyes
2/20/2004 c12 11jules2206
Its true some guys [like Tyler who is a perfrect example] are so blind ! of I could beat him with a stick!
11/29/2003 c12 8wendy chism
Omg...i love this story! ahh Tyler so sweet! i had a guy fer a best friend when i was 5...he asked me to marry him one day when we were playin in his dogs sleepy igloo thingy...yea special huh? *cough cough* newayz just felt like sharin that tidbit of info, but plz update soon! i love it!
10/25/2003 c12 ShorTi
update soon!

-THE RANDOM CRITIC
10/11/2003 c12 1Lily and Tianra
hey, awesome story, keep it up

it's REALLY good

yep...

um...

ya

well

g2g

TTFN

Luv Yas

Lils
10/2/2003 c12 Alyssa
Imma get in shape for Basketball just from reading your stories. UPDATE GRL! UPDATE!1 lol.. -mumbles something about flushing toilets-
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