for Signs of Life Within6/12/2004 c1 
20Ophelia Glace
you have an affinity with pain which, while beautiful, is also troubling. your poetry feeds on it, and it seems that the more the narrative voice hurts, the better the poetry is, but...
20Ophelia Glaceyou have an affinity with pain which, while beautiful, is also troubling. your poetry feeds on it, and it seems that the more the narrative voice hurts, the better the poetry is, but...
1/16/2003 c1 60dollface and her cancer
Wow. Well, I like it. It catches you from those first two lines, 'These are the only walls/that don't rust with time' and blends magically into the 'signs of life within my wrists'. An almost whimsical description of a topic that could have gone the opposite way. Nice writing.
60dollface and her cancerWow. Well, I like it. It catches you from those first two lines, 'These are the only walls/that don't rust with time' and blends magically into the 'signs of life within my wrists'. An almost whimsical description of a topic that could have gone the opposite way. Nice writing.
1/13/2003 c1 37wingless
at first its slightly confusing but the last line really pulls it together and gives the whole thign meaning. even though its simple its interesting and sad
37winglessat first its slightly confusing but the last line really pulls it together and gives the whole thign meaning. even though its simple its interesting and sad
1/13/2003 c1 Needa S
I will be nice and say your poem was 'nice' and you ask if I believe in Hell you bet I do for if we're not forgiven of our sins by Lord Jesus Christ we are surely bound for hell. For no one goes to heaven only through him. I never said it was a contest I was refering to people putting down my writing all the time, you misunderstood me there. And no there are no favorites to the Lord. The meek will inherit the sames as any one else. I could go on and on about Jesus and the Bible. I'm not trying to hurt you either and this isn't a flame. keep writing!
I will be nice and say your poem was 'nice' and you ask if I believe in Hell you bet I do for if we're not forgiven of our sins by Lord Jesus Christ we are surely bound for hell. For no one goes to heaven only through him. I never said it was a contest I was refering to people putting down my writing all the time, you misunderstood me there. And no there are no favorites to the Lord. The meek will inherit the sames as any one else. I could go on and on about Jesus and the Bible. I'm not trying to hurt you either and this isn't a flame. keep writing!
1/13/2003 c1 4axania chic
wow i really liked this the imagery is so powerful and the twist at the end very good
axy
thank u for ur review im workign on the 3rd chappie now btw bit depressing :(
4axania chicwow i really liked this the imagery is so powerful and the twist at the end very good
axy
thank u for ur review im workign on the 3rd chappie now btw bit depressing :(
1/13/2003 c1 58Ghost Writer
*smile* I love the poem. It is a good portrayal of the way that life can be. {{hugs}} later~
58Ghost Writer*smile* I love the poem. It is a good portrayal of the way that life can be. {{hugs}} later~
1/13/2003 c1 43Carter Tachikawa
Interesting poem, I especially like the last sentence. Great job, keep it up.~CT
43Carter TachikawaInteresting poem, I especially like the last sentence. Great job, keep it up.~CT