for DARKSABRE: Awakenings4/19/2004 c1 Rara Punk
Awesome prologue! It's in my faves so I can finish it later. Sorry - I have no constructive comments - it's damm good :D
Awesome prologue! It's in my faves so I can finish it later. Sorry - I have no constructive comments - it's damm good :D
2/21/2003 c1 
44Stormer
Hey there Chris! I’m here at last to read your story! Or to start anyway *g* Firstly I thought I’d mention that I calculated that you have an average of 2305.63 words per chapter so far :P Anyway, as for this chapter, it was a good introduction and intriguing, but of course there are a few technical improvements that could be made – would you rather I sent them on email? They’d be pretty damn long if I put them in reviews *S* Anyway, good start and I will be reading more very soon!
44StormerHey there Chris! I’m here at last to read your story! Or to start anyway *g* Firstly I thought I’d mention that I calculated that you have an average of 2305.63 words per chapter so far :P Anyway, as for this chapter, it was a good introduction and intriguing, but of course there are a few technical improvements that could be made – would you rather I sent them on email? They’d be pretty damn long if I put them in reviews *S* Anyway, good start and I will be reading more very soon!
1/29/2003 c6 20Xelena
i wonder why Darryl thought they were after him- i mean, they were- but i wonder why he thought so... nice style
20Xelenai wonder why Darryl thought they were after him- i mean, they were- but i wonder why he thought so... nice style
1/26/2003 c5 Xelena
so Darryl and Roseanda are the same age, correct? also, was Darryl's father a mage or a demon? just curious... anyways, please continue as soon as possible.
so Darryl and Roseanda are the same age, correct? also, was Darryl's father a mage or a demon? just curious... anyways, please continue as soon as possible.
1/13/2003 c1 1Queen Nabooru
First off: cool title! That's what caught my attention right away. So many people seem to have trouble coming up with good titles, but this one's interesting.
Secondly, I love your description and detail! It's hard, in my experience, to find good original fantasy works that aren't solely made up of either lengthy descriptions of the main character or one-line paragraphs that barely manage to move the story along. However, you obviously have a good grasp of mechanics and know how to write a good story. I'm interested, and looking forward to more.
1Queen NabooruFirst off: cool title! That's what caught my attention right away. So many people seem to have trouble coming up with good titles, but this one's interesting.
Secondly, I love your description and detail! It's hard, in my experience, to find good original fantasy works that aren't solely made up of either lengthy descriptions of the main character or one-line paragraphs that barely manage to move the story along. However, you obviously have a good grasp of mechanics and know how to write a good story. I'm interested, and looking forward to more.