for Destiny Falls5/3/2003 c5 
7Vakril
Great story. need more. though i think ur making the droken way too powerful. just coming up with random powers. its making them seem almost invulnerable or god like. what r their weakness. like u added how that power that karin used she needed more energy. this is just my thinking. great story. of course u have those little typing erros etc. but its still good. keep it up.
7VakrilGreat story. need more. though i think ur making the droken way too powerful. just coming up with random powers. its making them seem almost invulnerable or god like. what r their weakness. like u added how that power that karin used she needed more energy. this is just my thinking. great story. of course u have those little typing erros etc. but its still good. keep it up.
5/3/2003 c3 Vakril
O that blows! i hate it when that happens. kind of hollywood though. but still. that sux. i hope chase will understand! i know i would be a little disapointed after asking the girl i liked out fir the first time and then found out she cant go. i hope it gets better...gotta read more...chiao!
O that blows! i hate it when that happens. kind of hollywood though. but still. that sux. i hope chase will understand! i know i would be a little disapointed after asking the girl i liked out fir the first time and then found out she cant go. i hope it gets better...gotta read more...chiao!
4/4/2003 c1 Ellbee
A thousand, a million apologies for not getting to this sooner.
It's got a very dark and spooky tone, which I like, and you seem to have developed quite an interesting world. It doesn't come across really clearly yet, but then I'm only on the first chapter. And it does need a good, thorough proofreading, but I think you've got something with a lot of potential here. Unfortunately, I'll have to catch the rest later, but I certainly will.
-Ell
A thousand, a million apologies for not getting to this sooner.
It's got a very dark and spooky tone, which I like, and you seem to have developed quite an interesting world. It doesn't come across really clearly yet, but then I'm only on the first chapter. And it does need a good, thorough proofreading, but I think you've got something with a lot of potential here. Unfortunately, I'll have to catch the rest later, but I certainly will.
-Ell
3/27/2003 c5 89Lyria Shard
This waas an excellent chapter! Looking forward to the next chapter Silverlight!
From your buddie,
sal
89Lyria ShardThis waas an excellent chapter! Looking forward to the next chapter Silverlight!
From your buddie,
sal
3/25/2003 c5 1Prickly Thorn
hey!
this story is very creative, and very interesting. it makes you want to read more! please continue! if you get the chance, please read the prologue to the story i will be starting. i have written the first chapter, but will not post it till i get a few reviews. mine is also about vampires! hehehehe ok i gotta go now, but please continue! i'll be back :)
*Prickly Thorn*
1Prickly Thornhey!
this story is very creative, and very interesting. it makes you want to read more! please continue! if you get the chance, please read the prologue to the story i will be starting. i have written the first chapter, but will not post it till i get a few reviews. mine is also about vampires! hehehehe ok i gotta go now, but please continue! i'll be back :)
*Prickly Thorn*
3/25/2003 c4 Prickly Thorn
hey!
and the tension builds. i can't wait to see what happens next!
*Prickly Thorn*
hey!
and the tension builds. i can't wait to see what happens next!
*Prickly Thorn*
3/25/2003 c3 Prickly Thorn
hey!
i like the whole ordeal between friend and crush ;) very sneaky. i'm gonna read on to see what happens now!
*Prickly Thorn*
hey!
i like the whole ordeal between friend and crush ;) very sneaky. i'm gonna read on to see what happens now!
*Prickly Thorn*
3/25/2003 c2 Prickly Thorn
hey!
aw this chapter's so cute! are they gonna fall in love? i guess i better read on to find out, huh?
*Prickly Thorn*
hey!
aw this chapter's so cute! are they gonna fall in love? i guess i better read on to find out, huh?
*Prickly Thorn*
3/25/2003 c1 Prickly Thorn
hey!
nice story, i love ones about vampires. i'm even writing one myself. i like how you make your own invention of the droken, which i have never heard of before. that makes your story less cliche. i like it, please continue!
*Prickly Thorn*
hey!
nice story, i love ones about vampires. i'm even writing one myself. i like how you make your own invention of the droken, which i have never heard of before. that makes your story less cliche. i like it, please continue!
*Prickly Thorn*
3/1/2003 c4 89Lyria Shard
Erm. chapter 3 was exactly the same asd chapter 2, and because of that I didnt understand chapter 4 very well. I think something must have happened with the uploading or the transfer from ff.net. Let me know after you've checked it out/fixed it. Great for everything else though, I really like this, I wish I'd read it sooner.
89Lyria ShardErm. chapter 3 was exactly the same asd chapter 2, and because of that I didnt understand chapter 4 very well. I think something must have happened with the uploading or the transfer from ff.net. Let me know after you've checked it out/fixed it. Great for everything else though, I really like this, I wish I'd read it sooner.
2/22/2003 c4 ShadowBlaze
awesome story.coupla punctuation and grammar corrections need to be made.but other than that it's great! u should send the story to someone else (**cough** **cough** me) so that they can help w/ the corrections or w/e.lol! oh well.this is a fairly long review so i'll shut up now.but it was an awesome story!
awesome story.coupla punctuation and grammar corrections need to be made.but other than that it's great! u should send the story to someone else (**cough** **cough** me) so that they can help w/ the corrections or w/e.lol! oh well.this is a fairly long review so i'll shut up now.but it was an awesome story!
2/22/2003 c1 mikey
so far only one chapter down ill finish it later cuz im busy but i like. the only thing that was kinda idk not an author thingy was when u described her hair u went or something like that .something like that lol. it ur character u make her look like whta u want her to. maybe im jsut stupid idk lol
so far only one chapter down ill finish it later cuz im busy but i like. the only thing that was kinda idk not an author thingy was when u described her hair u went or something like that .something like that lol. it ur character u make her look like whta u want her to. maybe im jsut stupid idk lol
2/21/2003 c4 1halfyoukai
WHoa!
You're really good!
It,s me Gill? remember? I promised i would read your stories, and i did, and they,re fantastic, but this one is my favourite
What are you waiting?, write the next chapter you baka!
1halfyoukaiWHoa!
You're really good!
It,s me Gill? remember? I promised i would read your stories, and i did, and they,re fantastic, but this one is my favourite
What are you waiting?, write the next chapter you baka!
2/19/2003 c3 6Sweet Golden Fairy
Hey!, Alex im back again. i really liked that story a lot it was great! I cant wait for the 4th chapter. Keep it up your doing great!
Sincerly.
Carina
6Sweet Golden FairyHey!, Alex im back again. i really liked that story a lot it was great! I cant wait for the 4th chapter. Keep it up your doing great!
Sincerly.
Carina
2/17/2003 c1 Random
Pretty. hehe this is my reveiwing my own work.. pathetic aint it?
Pretty. hehe this is my reveiwing my own work.. pathetic aint it?