for All Work, All Play11/10/2006 c1 
14Gilda Brennan
that is very intense! all action, nice fast-pace which never keeps you bored. please continue!
14Gilda Brennanthat is very intense! all action, nice fast-pace which never keeps you bored. please continue!
8/9/2006 c2 11Crimson Ara
Why arn't you continuing it, it's a great story. Please please please continue.
-Crimson ara
11Crimson AraWhy arn't you continuing it, it's a great story. Please please please continue.
-Crimson ara
6/7/2006 c2 borrowedangels
That's intense. Are you going to continue it. I'm curious as to what's going to happen.
That's intense. Are you going to continue it. I'm curious as to what's going to happen.
11/7/2003 c2 Unreal
and ur not updating why?
and ur not updating why?
7/21/2003 c1 8Teresz
interesting and well written, but one thing...the dialouge is confusing. You have it in one big paragrahp, when really, whenever a new speaker is speaking, the paragraph should change. That confused me, but the rest was great.
8Tereszinteresting and well written, but one thing...the dialouge is confusing. You have it in one big paragrahp, when really, whenever a new speaker is speaking, the paragraph should change. That confused me, but the rest was great.
4/5/2003 c2 Guest
If she was so horny, why couldn't she just have used her hand? it feels just as good...
If she was so horny, why couldn't she just have used her hand? it feels just as good...
3/6/2003 c2 TC
Does he beat her? Oh God!
Does he beat her? Oh God!
2/27/2003 c2 5DayDreamer731
Great story! The first chapter was a little more graphic than what i'm used to reading but its great all the same. I wish you didn't leave that stupid cliff at the end! I really hope you update soon! Its great! I want to know who the stranger is!
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5DayDreamer731Great story! The first chapter was a little more graphic than what i'm used to reading but its great all the same. I wish you didn't leave that stupid cliff at the end! I really hope you update soon! Its great! I want to know who the stranger is!
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2/23/2003 c2 HS
I hope that's Jamie giving her a birthday present! Update soon!
I hope that's Jamie giving her a birthday present! Update soon!
2/22/2003 c2 C
Not bad.
I liked the second chapter more than the first one becuase it left the reader with something to ponder about.
Update soon.
I read some of the other reviews and I know some people are dying to know what happens.
Not bad.
I liked the second chapter more than the first one becuase it left the reader with something to ponder about.
Update soon.
I read some of the other reviews and I know some people are dying to know what happens.