for Immortality12/30/2004 c15 liv-star
What a satisfyingly wonderful story! *sighs* I always become content at the end of stories. ^_^ I love you!
...that was random, sorry.
What a satisfyingly wonderful story! *sighs* I always become content at the end of stories. ^_^ I love you!
...that was random, sorry.
12/5/2004 c4 Iqisiazsi
I really like this story, but being my perfectionist self when it comes to writing, I just thought I'd point out a couple mistakes I noticed.In "Kushite Fire" Priest Chike is referred to as Prince Chike at one point. I can understand why your editors wouldn't catch that since it's a well written story, but I thought you'd like to know.That and you seem to have "then" and "than" confused.In saying that, thankyou for giving me something interesting to do today :)
I really like this story, but being my perfectionist self when it comes to writing, I just thought I'd point out a couple mistakes I noticed.In "Kushite Fire" Priest Chike is referred to as Prince Chike at one point. I can understand why your editors wouldn't catch that since it's a well written story, but I thought you'd like to know.That and you seem to have "then" and "than" confused.In saying that, thankyou for giving me something interesting to do today :)
11/8/2004 c16 
3LuvDragons
Yes, I want you to publish this book! You should to! If you do, please leave me a review on one of my stories at fanfiction.net My name is "Lt. Col. Eowyn" there. Please say where your book will be (which bookstore), and I promise you that I for one will buy it. Once again, please publish this, it's great! PLEASE! Again, leave me a review telling where it will be selling if you do publish it. And as a review for this story, I say that it's original, and realy good. PUBLISH IT! (Did I get my point across?) PLEASSE!
3LuvDragonsYes, I want you to publish this book! You should to! If you do, please leave me a review on one of my stories at fanfiction.net My name is "Lt. Col. Eowyn" there. Please say where your book will be (which bookstore), and I promise you that I for one will buy it. Once again, please publish this, it's great! PLEASE! Again, leave me a review telling where it will be selling if you do publish it. And as a review for this story, I say that it's original, and realy good. PUBLISH IT! (Did I get my point across?) PLEASSE!
11/1/2004 c5 lololala
WOW, this story is so cool.
Before i read it i thought it was going to be crap but it turned out to be one of the bestest stories on this site.
WOW, this story is so cool.
Before i read it i thought it was going to be crap but it turned out to be one of the bestest stories on this site.
9/3/2004 c1 4jemraja
wonderfully long first chapter :):) great! didn't even have to strain to enter the story - just started reading and it slowly introduced itself - very skilfully done. some original ideas - only part i didn't like was when she started shouting back at the prince? so far she hadn't shown any rebellion, but at that moment, like those typical arrogant jerk + fiery girl stories...
but otherwise (seriously) it was a very enjoyable read, which explored and introduced the characters really well
4jemrajawonderfully long first chapter :):) great! didn't even have to strain to enter the story - just started reading and it slowly introduced itself - very skilfully done. some original ideas - only part i didn't like was when she started shouting back at the prince? so far she hadn't shown any rebellion, but at that moment, like those typical arrogant jerk + fiery girl stories...
but otherwise (seriously) it was a very enjoyable read, which explored and introduced the characters really well
9/2/2004 c15 5CrystalDusk
ah...kid's cute. i thought you were gonna make her die there. like you did with half the other characters...but you controlled yourself. congrats. this story came out really really well.
5CrystalDuskah...kid's cute. i thought you were gonna make her die there. like you did with half the other characters...but you controlled yourself. congrats. this story came out really really well.
9/2/2004 c11 CrystalDusk
ah he's alive! i'm so glad i went and saw what happened a few chapters later! i forgive you ^^
ah he's alive! i'm so glad i went and saw what happened a few chapters later! i forgive you ^^
9/2/2004 c7 CrystalDusk
WHAT THE HELL HE DIED? SHE DIED? WHAT WERE YOU THINKING? that TOTALLY stuffed up the story! it was good up till then! i was waiting for them to get together!
WHAT THE HELL HE DIED? SHE DIED? WHAT WERE YOU THINKING? that TOTALLY stuffed up the story! it was good up till then! i was waiting for them to get together!
8/24/2004 c16 Ai Yuukan
*applause* wonderful story! i definitely one of the best stories I've read. The plot was excellent and the characters very believable! Congrats on a great story!
*applause* wonderful story! i definitely one of the best stories I've read. The plot was excellent and the characters very believable! Congrats on a great story!
8/6/2004 c1 2Mina Skywalker
This is one awesome story! I TOTALLY love Egyptian mythology so this was definetly a treat! You should try to get it published! hehehe! If you could do me a big favor- I would love you to read and review my work "The Violin". Thank you so much for creating such an enjoyable story! Keep up the GREAT work!
2Mina SkywalkerThis is one awesome story! I TOTALLY love Egyptian mythology so this was definetly a treat! You should try to get it published! hehehe! If you could do me a big favor- I would love you to read and review my work "The Violin". Thank you so much for creating such an enjoyable story! Keep up the GREAT work!
7/12/2004 c16 4YoursTilChaos
Wow.
THis is one of the best stories I've read on this site. Of course there were some holes, but the good far outweighs the bad. I wish you much luck in finding a publisher!
~~Lin
4YoursTilChaosWow.
THis is one of the best stories I've read on this site. Of course there were some holes, but the good far outweighs the bad. I wish you much luck in finding a publisher!
~~Lin
6/10/2004 c15 Squid
Sigh... That really is the perfect ending. Although, I am curious about what Khalid is. Did Ra have a son... or sun ^_^? Yeah, yeah, bad pun...
Anyways, this is such a great story, I admire you for writing it. Good luck on any other stories you wish to write, I'll be here reading them ^_^. Thank you so much for sharing this with us readers. It really was beautiful
Sigh... That really is the perfect ending. Although, I am curious about what Khalid is. Did Ra have a son... or sun ^_^? Yeah, yeah, bad pun...
Anyways, this is such a great story, I admire you for writing it. Good luck on any other stories you wish to write, I'll be here reading them ^_^. Thank you so much for sharing this with us readers. It really was beautiful
5/27/2004 c15 9Chione
REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY GREAT! I love it! And though I like all ancient Egypt stories, I love this one. Well written, interesting characters, historically accurate, and a wonderfully entertaining plot! Not too many grammar/spelling, though their are a few.
Ciao!
Chione
9ChioneREALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY GREAT! I love it! And though I like all ancient Egypt stories, I love this one. Well written, interesting characters, historically accurate, and a wonderfully entertaining plot! Not too many grammar/spelling, though their are a few.
Ciao!
Chione
5/15/2004 c16 8Hotkitty
i REally liked this story...it was excellent and well i dont know wat else 2 say but it was just SO wiked! i luvved it seriously! ill check out ur other fics if i get time altho im VERY busy lately with exams an all...i LUVVED THIS FIC and i am adding it 2 my favourites most definitely.. i always thought it wud be lateef lol that wud be twisted. Luv it! An BOMANI ROX!
8Hotkittyi REally liked this story...it was excellent and well i dont know wat else 2 say but it was just SO wiked! i luvved it seriously! ill check out ur other fics if i get time altho im VERY busy lately with exams an all...i LUVVED THIS FIC and i am adding it 2 my favourites most definitely.. i always thought it wud be lateef lol that wud be twisted. Luv it! An BOMANI ROX!