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I like these lines:
"This feeling now - like I'm finally sane/The right chemicals pumping through my brain"
I know the feeling. There are times when you can just sit and think "I feel right".
I like these lines:
"This feeling now - like I'm finally sane/The right chemicals pumping through my brain"
I know the feeling. There are times when you can just sit and think "I feel right".
12/16/2003 c11 Anikki
I loved "I need my muse." Really. I tried to make up a muse for a story and it was weird when I drew it. **shrugs** I also liked "A Life Gone Past." Eh, but I like most of the poems I've read here. =P
-Anikki
I loved "I need my muse." Really. I tried to make up a muse for a story and it was weird when I drew it. **shrugs** I also liked "A Life Gone Past." Eh, but I like most of the poems I've read here. =P
-Anikki
11/10/2003 c12 Kyalia
I really liked the first stanza of 'Speak', and 'Blink, I'm Gone'; very nice pieces.
I really liked the first stanza of 'Speak', and 'Blink, I'm Gone'; very nice pieces.
11/1/2003 c1 KatyGirl1219
"The world is crashing down
Without making a sound
No one knows but me
Because it's only the world I see"
I love that!
"The world is crashing down
Without making a sound
No one knows but me
Because it's only the world I see"
I love that!
10/30/2003 c12 
18CatGirl-Luna
I love Reflections! All of the other poems are wonderful as well! =3 Keep writing.
18CatGirl-LunaI love Reflections! All of the other poems are wonderful as well! =3 Keep writing.
10/14/2003 c2 8Niggles
This is very good,
I like the prefrences, and all the ideas,
but the rhyme time doesnt work in this power.
If i were u, and i wanted some power to this,
to really make someone feel w/ me,
make it not just a sing-song rhyme.
Keep writing & great idea's too!
Niggles, aka doodlebug, aka dorkbuster
8NigglesThis is very good,
I like the prefrences, and all the ideas,
but the rhyme time doesnt work in this power.
If i were u, and i wanted some power to this,
to really make someone feel w/ me,
make it not just a sing-song rhyme.
Keep writing & great idea's too!
Niggles, aka doodlebug, aka dorkbuster
9/7/2003 c11 4Exclamation
This is so incredibly awesome. I love every single verse in this collection, brilliant.
4ExclamationThis is so incredibly awesome. I love every single verse in this collection, brilliant.
8/18/2003 c1 49recalcitrant
i think your poem was really good. i liked the your used of vocabulary and structure.e r+r my stuff if u want. i suggest "goodbye to you", "hurt" and "this one is called f* you." keep up the good writing because i would love to read more.
peace
recalcitrant
49recalcitranti think your poem was really good. i liked the your used of vocabulary and structure.e r+r my stuff if u want. i suggest "goodbye to you", "hurt" and "this one is called f* you." keep up the good writing because i would love to read more.
peace
recalcitrant
7/13/2003 c10 nolongerinuse
I like how you've put so many works up, and I'm glad you did like I did, posting in chapters rather than 60 separate works. I like "Blink - I'm Gone" in particular. You seem to have a set style in couplets, but personally, I think you might want experiment in other forms. I do about 99% free verse. I think that too many people are afraid to break out of rhyme, and sometimes you have to force things or make something up just to rhyme. It is easier to have that kind of guideline, but I find it easier and purer to write it straight (and I'm not so poetic I think in rhymes!). But, everyone has their own style, and you should do whatever you want, whatever comes from your heart. Keep writing!
I like how you've put so many works up, and I'm glad you did like I did, posting in chapters rather than 60 separate works. I like "Blink - I'm Gone" in particular. You seem to have a set style in couplets, but personally, I think you might want experiment in other forms. I do about 99% free verse. I think that too many people are afraid to break out of rhyme, and sometimes you have to force things or make something up just to rhyme. It is easier to have that kind of guideline, but I find it easier and purer to write it straight (and I'm not so poetic I think in rhymes!). But, everyone has their own style, and you should do whatever you want, whatever comes from your heart. Keep writing!
7/5/2003 c1 38Shadafakup
This sounds pretty finished actually.. There are some pretty good pieces up in this collection.. Actually some sounded completed to me but some had this hollow feelin that it never ended.. Anyway back to 'Mindless ramblings'.. Good piece I would say.. Very interestin.. And well expressed too.. Perhaps you could move away from rhymin schemes and write in free verse.. You might be able to write what you feel better.. Just a suggestion.. Anyway, keep writin poetry!
38ShadafakupThis sounds pretty finished actually.. There are some pretty good pieces up in this collection.. Actually some sounded completed to me but some had this hollow feelin that it never ended.. Anyway back to 'Mindless ramblings'.. Good piece I would say.. Very interestin.. And well expressed too.. Perhaps you could move away from rhymin schemes and write in free verse.. You might be able to write what you feel better.. Just a suggestion.. Anyway, keep writin poetry!
7/3/2003 c9 4disneydiva89
I absolutley love "Blink I'm Gone" :)It's a really strong piece, with a lot of meaning to it. Very good. All of your poetry is really good, but I didn't wanna submit 8 other reviews. *applauds* :)
~disneydiva89
4disneydiva89I absolutley love "Blink I'm Gone" :)It's a really strong piece, with a lot of meaning to it. Very good. All of your poetry is really good, but I didn't wanna submit 8 other reviews. *applauds* :)
~disneydiva89
6/24/2003 c9 Kyalia
I have allergies and a cold right now... anyways, good poems, all of them. IMO, the last was the best.
I have allergies and a cold right now... anyways, good poems, all of them. IMO, the last was the best.
6/24/2003 c4 Kyalia
Good Dune spice description. (When you got into fear, I was like 'oh no, here goes the litany')
Good Dune spice description. (When you got into fear, I was like 'oh no, here goes the litany')
6/2/2003 c8 RoseMeade
It is truly amazing to be your age and have so many poems written. Congratulations. Thanks for getting in touch with me and asking my opinion. Out of all that I read here, my favorites were Stoner (I like pg. 4 best), A Life Gone Past, Word, and Happiness; all are very good. As an editor and mentor, it has been my pleasure to help poets in a lot of different ways. Please visit http:/w.threeglances.com and see how life for three poets grew from asking me to read their works. I'd be honored to work with you too. Also, visit my website at http:/w.poetryhighway.com and let me know if you would mind me places two of your poems there after you and I work on them a bit together.
yours truly
RoseMeade
ps - now I'm off to read your articles as I am on the hunt for some good sci fi writers...
It is truly amazing to be your age and have so many poems written. Congratulations. Thanks for getting in touch with me and asking my opinion. Out of all that I read here, my favorites were Stoner (I like pg. 4 best), A Life Gone Past, Word, and Happiness; all are very good. As an editor and mentor, it has been my pleasure to help poets in a lot of different ways. Please visit http:/w.threeglances.com and see how life for three poets grew from asking me to read their works. I'd be honored to work with you too. Also, visit my website at http:/w.poetryhighway.com and let me know if you would mind me places two of your poems there after you and I work on them a bit together.
yours truly
RoseMeade
ps - now I'm off to read your articles as I am on the hunt for some good sci fi writers...