for Fireflies1/11/2004 c1 
28frugale
We are dealing with a high quality author. I'll surely get addicted to your writing.
28frugaleWe are dealing with a high quality author. I'll surely get addicted to your writing.
8/4/2003 c1 20midnights shadow
Oh, I think you have captured one in verse...gently now-lets look together.
20midnights shadowOh, I think you have captured one in verse...gently now-lets look together.
6/14/2003 c1 200Ashes of a Willow
Great description! I remember catching tons of fireflies in my old neighborhood :)
200Ashes of a WillowGreat description! I remember catching tons of fireflies in my old neighborhood :)
6/7/2003 c1 34Smoky Bear
i like fireflies, nice... but it doesn't really fit within the confines of haiku as i understand them to be.
34Smoky Beari like fireflies, nice... but it doesn't really fit within the confines of haiku as i understand them to be.
6/2/2003 c1 The Black Rider
You deserved all of the acclaim you received for this piece; not just for the lovely picture you painted with your words, but for not sticking to the strict 5-7-5 pattern. Excellent.
You deserved all of the acclaim you received for this piece; not just for the lovely picture you painted with your words, but for not sticking to the strict 5-7-5 pattern. Excellent.
5/30/2003 c1 42Lady of the Moon
Beautiful, just beautiful. You captured fireflies perfectly! I love fireflies. Nice short and descriptive. But you could add another stanza if you so wished.
Asta Chantrea Orra
42Lady of the MoonBeautiful, just beautiful. You captured fireflies perfectly! I love fireflies. Nice short and descriptive. But you could add another stanza if you so wished.
Asta Chantrea Orra
5/20/2003 c1 wheresmydopamine
I'm a huge firefly lover, I guess I'm not the only one who thinks they're pretty... Another great piece!
I'm a huge firefly lover, I guess I'm not the only one who thinks they're pretty... Another great piece!
5/6/2003 c1 1aleppine
This needs one thing to make it perfect: a comma between 'fluttering' and 'those'. Otherwise, it's beautiful. Heh, it's not just me who thinks fireflies are frozen time then ... :D
1aleppineThis needs one thing to make it perfect: a comma between 'fluttering' and 'those'. Otherwise, it's beautiful. Heh, it's not just me who thinks fireflies are frozen time then ... :D
5/6/2003 c1 8RavenPhoenix
fireflies are nice too :) i think your free verses and longer poems are better though... i do like these also :):)
8RavenPhoenixfireflies are nice too :) i think your free verses and longer poems are better though... i do like these also :):)
5/5/2003 c1 212VOIDKing Ki
Very nice! The last line was perfect! Fireflies are quite the creature, which you captured in this poem, keep writing!
212VOIDKing KiVery nice! The last line was perfect! Fireflies are quite the creature, which you captured in this poem, keep writing!
5/4/2003 c1 36obsidian katana
wonderful! you really have a way with words! this is nicely written, very well described. i love fireflies, watching them flash during the summer nights. good job on this! keep up your writing! btw, are you also at tps? just wondering.
36obsidian katanawonderful! you really have a way with words! this is nicely written, very well described. i love fireflies, watching them flash during the summer nights. good job on this! keep up your writing! btw, are you also at tps? just wondering.
4/27/2003 c1 12Silverlight Elf
Very nice, very sweet. I like it! Simple and straight to the beauty and discriptions of them.
12Silverlight ElfVery nice, very sweet. I like it! Simple and straight to the beauty and discriptions of them.