for Living in the Last Sane City on Earth5/31/2003 c9 Smitts
This story's been on my favorites list for a long time but I never review... I guess I don't know what to say... this story is good to read, everything flows, and it's very descriptive without over doing it... just a really good job!
This story's been on my favorites list for a long time but I never review... I guess I don't know what to say... this story is good to read, everything flows, and it's very descriptive without over doing it... just a really good job!
5/21/2003 c7 
1WishBunny
Poor Fran! She's quite depressed, isn't she? Interesting choice of narrator, one who is definitely part of the action but feels removed from it, an impartial observer of her surrounds. It makes me curious, also, as to how reliable she is. I know how fond you are of Turn of the Screw, I wouldn't put it past you to have some card up your sleeve there, or am I not supposed to let on to the other readers. Not that you have many, dear, but look! Someone else likes you too! *waves to Souzou-chan* Ohayo!
As for the rest of you, please review this. Jing has been feeling down about her writing lately and I'd hate for her to quit just because no-one tells her they love her.
Lastly, I thought you promised an update? Where is it? Where's my Things He Never Meant update too? I need to know what Harry and Voldemort have planned, and whether or not Draco's going to help or hinder in the end. also, I need to see Blaise Zabini get snotted by Ron again because the little bastard deserves it and Ron needs the exercise. *giggles at sudden image of fat!Ron* oh, please don't let that turn into a plot bunny, the last thing I need is tubby Ruperts clogging the place up.
(I'll call you as soon as I get home and you can explain where your updates are :P)
1WishBunnyPoor Fran! She's quite depressed, isn't she? Interesting choice of narrator, one who is definitely part of the action but feels removed from it, an impartial observer of her surrounds. It makes me curious, also, as to how reliable she is. I know how fond you are of Turn of the Screw, I wouldn't put it past you to have some card up your sleeve there, or am I not supposed to let on to the other readers. Not that you have many, dear, but look! Someone else likes you too! *waves to Souzou-chan* Ohayo!
As for the rest of you, please review this. Jing has been feeling down about her writing lately and I'd hate for her to quit just because no-one tells her they love her.
Lastly, I thought you promised an update? Where is it? Where's my Things He Never Meant update too? I need to know what Harry and Voldemort have planned, and whether or not Draco's going to help or hinder in the end. also, I need to see Blaise Zabini get snotted by Ron again because the little bastard deserves it and Ron needs the exercise. *giggles at sudden image of fat!Ron* oh, please don't let that turn into a plot bunny, the last thing I need is tubby Ruperts clogging the place up.
(I'll call you as soon as I get home and you can explain where your updates are :P)
5/21/2003 c6 WishBunny
Another character! I forgive you because it's Silver, and you have a picture of him on your website.
Your descriptions are, as always, quite beautiful, "the rare gas burner, flickering blue in its cage of reinforced glass," and the sense of light and shadow highlights thedifferent parts of the city wonderfully. I'm wondering what exactly Raven is doing with them out there. Training for what, exactly? *t00bs*
Another character! I forgive you because it's Silver, and you have a picture of him on your website.
Your descriptions are, as always, quite beautiful, "the rare gas burner, flickering blue in its cage of reinforced glass," and the sense of light and shadow highlights thedifferent parts of the city wonderfully. I'm wondering what exactly Raven is doing with them out there. Training for what, exactly? *t00bs*
5/21/2003 c5 WishBunny
Very sneaky use of withholding evidence, now I want to know what they saw. I admire the way you use detail, sometimes giving descriptions that seem irrelevent in order, I imagine, to hide the details which are important and to give it all a sense of authenticity because you do tend to remember strange things about events which seem utterly insignificant.
I think you're introducing too many characters too quickly, though, and I'm having trouble keeping up. So far we have Fran, Rowan, Falcon, Sheba, Raven, Julian, Father Brannon and now Cadogan. Softly, softly, dear.
Very sneaky use of withholding evidence, now I want to know what they saw. I admire the way you use detail, sometimes giving descriptions that seem irrelevent in order, I imagine, to hide the details which are important and to give it all a sense of authenticity because you do tend to remember strange things about events which seem utterly insignificant.
I think you're introducing too many characters too quickly, though, and I'm having trouble keeping up. So far we have Fran, Rowan, Falcon, Sheba, Raven, Julian, Father Brannon and now Cadogan. Softly, softly, dear.
5/21/2003 c4 WishBunny
You said Metatron! (insert Good Omens quote here)
I love the poem, especially the lines 'and the air/ feels like slate/ and marble'. Rowan's gift for poetry gives us an insight into her character which presents a very different Rowan, one who is vulnerable and not entirely dealing with her lot in life. Also, is that a 'Stranger in a Strange Land' reference you've got there? I never much liked the book but it is part of the alternative canon.
*t00bs off to read the rest
You said Metatron! (insert Good Omens quote here)
I love the poem, especially the lines 'and the air/ feels like slate/ and marble'. Rowan's gift for poetry gives us an insight into her character which presents a very different Rowan, one who is vulnerable and not entirely dealing with her lot in life. Also, is that a 'Stranger in a Strange Land' reference you've got there? I never much liked the book but it is part of the alternative canon.
*t00bs off to read the rest
5/16/2003 c7 7Souzou-chan
Wow, that was depressing but it seemed essential for the plot. I'm actually glad you don't have a main struggle against outsider creatures or a higher force. Instead, you have them struggling with themselves and with each other, like a realistic family of sorts. That gives your story such a breath of fresh air that it's wonderful. I can't wait to see your next update. Bye!
7Souzou-chanWow, that was depressing but it seemed essential for the plot. I'm actually glad you don't have a main struggle against outsider creatures or a higher force. Instead, you have them struggling with themselves and with each other, like a realistic family of sorts. That gives your story such a breath of fresh air that it's wonderful. I can't wait to see your next update. Bye!
5/14/2003 c6 Souzou-chan
Tres cool here, demons and vampires and stuff? Wowies, looks really cool. This story's always getting better, so of course I can't wait to read more. Bye!
Tres cool here, demons and vampires and stuff? Wowies, looks really cool. This story's always getting better, so of course I can't wait to read more. Bye!
5/12/2003 c4 35Krikoris
Beautiful poem! I can't write poetry. No matter. Chapter was good too, obviously. I don't review bad stories. Wo!
Krikoris
35KrikorisBeautiful poem! I can't write poetry. No matter. Chapter was good too, obviously. I don't review bad stories. Wo!
Krikoris
5/12/2003 c1 Krikoris
I am obviously going to keep on reading but I wanted to review this right here. You give the reader so much and yet so litte information that it aches. I don't know why no one is reviewing this, you have my vote!
Krikoris
I am obviously going to keep on reading but I wanted to review this right here. You give the reader so much and yet so litte information that it aches. I don't know why no one is reviewing this, you have my vote!
Krikoris
5/10/2003 c5 7Souzou-chan
Another well-written chapter. It flows so well as your chapters always seem to do. I have no comments to make, and I don't need to repeat all the good comments I have said before. ^^ Keep up the good work, and see you later when you post your new chapter!
7Souzou-chanAnother well-written chapter. It flows so well as your chapters always seem to do. I have no comments to make, and I don't need to repeat all the good comments I have said before. ^^ Keep up the good work, and see you later when you post your new chapter!
5/7/2003 c4 Souzou-chan
I liked this chapter a lot, especially in regards to Fran. I know it's not really cool to harbor feelings of jealousy and discontent toward people, but providing this element gives the story even more of a human nature, making it more realistic. It makes Fran more than a narrator, it actually makes her a real person too, not seen often by those who become the narrator's of the story. I like that. The poem too is very pretty, gave me shivers in a good way because it was just that good. Very mystical and mysterious. ^^
I can't wait to read more in the future, so I hope I won't have to wait too long for the next chapter of LILSCOE, because this is a very well written piece of fiction. Very wonderful. See ya then!
- Hope exists all around us..., it's just not always in the form you want it to be.
I liked this chapter a lot, especially in regards to Fran. I know it's not really cool to harbor feelings of jealousy and discontent toward people, but providing this element gives the story even more of a human nature, making it more realistic. It makes Fran more than a narrator, it actually makes her a real person too, not seen often by those who become the narrator's of the story. I like that. The poem too is very pretty, gave me shivers in a good way because it was just that good. Very mystical and mysterious. ^^
I can't wait to read more in the future, so I hope I won't have to wait too long for the next chapter of LILSCOE, because this is a very well written piece of fiction. Very wonderful. See ya then!
- Hope exists all around us..., it's just not always in the form you want it to be.
3/4/2003 c2 Sophie J
Wow this is really really good, I like the tone and feel of the peice it's great. Can't wait to read more, esepcially if it reveals mroe about waht actually.happened
Wow this is really really good, I like the tone and feel of the peice it's great. Can't wait to read more, esepcially if it reveals mroe about waht actually.happened
3/3/2003 c3 7Souzou-chan
Another good chapter! I like where this is going so I hope you post another chapter soon ^^
7Souzou-chanAnother good chapter! I like where this is going so I hope you post another chapter soon ^^
2/22/2003 c2 Souzou-chan
Wow, I really like this story a lot! The way you've set it up is unique and it definitely provides a sense of individuality. The character's you've interoduced are very excellent, and I like how not too much is revealed so it keeps a mysterious aura floating around. I'm definitely adding this to my favorite's list so I can read more when you post. Bye!
"I am called, called at night, spirits rising and falling" - Inner Universe
Wow, I really like this story a lot! The way you've set it up is unique and it definitely provides a sense of individuality. The character's you've interoduced are very excellent, and I like how not too much is revealed so it keeps a mysterious aura floating around. I'm definitely adding this to my favorite's list so I can read more when you post. Bye!
"I am called, called at night, spirits rising and falling" - Inner Universe