for Please Pretend1/11/2005 c1 
59Vigilant
Well this was a nce piece. It brings up the pretense that so many would do anything just to live under for a short while once more. Funny what people will do when it hurts bad enough, they'll betray even themselves.
Well the writting is good, you've stuck to your style and your guns and its come through for you once again. I'm not sure if it ever happened to you or not, but as with all your stories, the reader is really brought into the characters themeselves, feeling as if they're actually there. I complement you on a job well done. Nothing left for me to read so hopefully there will be more to come.
- Vigilant
59VigilantWell this was a nce piece. It brings up the pretense that so many would do anything just to live under for a short while once more. Funny what people will do when it hurts bad enough, they'll betray even themselves.
Well the writting is good, you've stuck to your style and your guns and its come through for you once again. I'm not sure if it ever happened to you or not, but as with all your stories, the reader is really brought into the characters themeselves, feeling as if they're actually there. I complement you on a job well done. Nothing left for me to read so hopefully there will be more to come.
- Vigilant
12/24/2004 c1 45Greenwords05
i really like this story it touches apart of me i chose to forget its funny how you can convince yourself that it wont hurt when youve done it so many times
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45Greenwords05i really like this story it touches apart of me i chose to forget its funny how you can convince yourself that it wont hurt when youve done it so many times
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1/14/2004 c1 Jenna
Hey, this is Jenna from Poetry Blackboard., and I just wanted to say that was an amazing piece of writing. Truly wonderful. :) I shall be emailing you soon! Take care. Love, Jenna
Hey, this is Jenna from Poetry Blackboard., and I just wanted to say that was an amazing piece of writing. Truly wonderful. :) I shall be emailing you soon! Take care. Love, Jenna
1/1/2004 c1 11Jez-Arinn
quite touching i must say.
i've not thought of it this way before.
great job. it's good! ^_^
11Jez-Arinnquite touching i must say.
i've not thought of it this way before.
great job. it's good! ^_^
9/7/2003 c1 2Jennifer H. Westall
I think this a great piece that captures the turmoil of trying to be friends after breaking up. The pain is so fresh for so long, and slipping back into the comfort of the familiar is so easy. Great piece.
2Jennifer H. WestallI think this a great piece that captures the turmoil of trying to be friends after breaking up. The pain is so fresh for so long, and slipping back into the comfort of the familiar is so easy. Great piece.
6/14/2003 c1 8moodykooj
Good...
Very good, in fact. I could really sense the emotion. Kudos.
I want to read another work of yours, and see where you're comming from. Is what you wrote in "Please Pretend" your style? Or was it just an expirement, to try a new type of writing?
keep it up!
8moodykoojGood...
Very good, in fact. I could really sense the emotion. Kudos.
I want to read another work of yours, and see where you're comming from. Is what you wrote in "Please Pretend" your style? Or was it just an expirement, to try a new type of writing?
keep it up!
6/13/2003 c1 3Arabella Silverbell
wow... this is... really, really good. this really did get through to me, almost broke my own heart...
please continue writing! you have a great talent!
3Arabella Silverbellwow... this is... really, really good. this really did get through to me, almost broke my own heart...
please continue writing! you have a great talent!
6/7/2003 c1 15Aneena Darc
It put me in my "old" place. It brought bittersweet memories up that I don't know how to get rid of. I suppose I should hate you for this, but in fact...I applaud you. At least your writing brought someone to a different level then the robot-reading type form. Thank you...
15Aneena DarcIt put me in my "old" place. It brought bittersweet memories up that I don't know how to get rid of. I suppose I should hate you for this, but in fact...I applaud you. At least your writing brought someone to a different level then the robot-reading type form. Thank you...
3/21/2003 c1 Marie
Really good. Moving.
Really good. Moving.
3/9/2003 c1 13elmo44449999
Oh, good. Me likes. There is so much feeling in this piece that you do a good job of getting out. I am kind of wondering what happens next. Anything the readers are wondering is explained (like the background of their relationship) without being too clumsy. It also is based on dialogue, but not too much. In this story, you keep a very clear, very skilled balance between all elements of literature, while portraying emotions that aren't cliched.
Excellent work. Like I said, me likes.
13elmo44449999Oh, good. Me likes. There is so much feeling in this piece that you do a good job of getting out. I am kind of wondering what happens next. Anything the readers are wondering is explained (like the background of their relationship) without being too clumsy. It also is based on dialogue, but not too much. In this story, you keep a very clear, very skilled balance between all elements of literature, while portraying emotions that aren't cliched.
Excellent work. Like I said, me likes.