for What can you see?6/16/2003 c1 
36these and those enormous
You weren't kidding when you said it was deep. I really like it. Unfortunately, I think I can relate to it in some way. Your detail and words were beautiful and perfect for this.
36these and those enormousYou weren't kidding when you said it was deep. I really like it. Unfortunately, I think I can relate to it in some way. Your detail and words were beautiful and perfect for this.
6/3/2003 c1 8RavenPhoenix
EXCELLENT! bug hug for a job well done! this is really really good! keep up the great work and if you want to add me on msn im at feel free to add me if you wish :):)
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8RavenPhoenixEXCELLENT! bug hug for a job well done! this is really really good! keep up the great work and if you want to add me on msn im at feel free to add me if you wish :):)
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3/24/2003 c1 60dollface and her cancer
I think you're right, Elentari, you've got a good thing going here. The rhythm, the beat... wow. I think this falls under that wonderful category of "Holy Hell, do you believe this!" It's going on my favorites list for sure. Mainly because, I suppose, it goes into one of my favorite questions - if humans saw nothing of each other, only spoke.. what would we find to hate each other for?
But now listen to me ramble when I'm supposed to be critiquing you. Very well: my favorite parts. I love the way you make the lines into a sort of irony. "What 'can' you see."
I *can* see an incredible poem.
60dollface and her cancerI think you're right, Elentari, you've got a good thing going here. The rhythm, the beat... wow. I think this falls under that wonderful category of "Holy Hell, do you believe this!" It's going on my favorites list for sure. Mainly because, I suppose, it goes into one of my favorite questions - if humans saw nothing of each other, only spoke.. what would we find to hate each other for?
But now listen to me ramble when I'm supposed to be critiquing you. Very well: my favorite parts. I love the way you make the lines into a sort of irony. "What 'can' you see."
I *can* see an incredible poem.
2/22/2003 c1 13Pretenna
This poem is really good i think it's one of the best i've read on here! Good work and keep it up.
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13PretennaThis poem is really good i think it's one of the best i've read on here! Good work and keep it up.
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2/22/2003 c1 50Alequinn
That was really an intelligent piece and wonderfully expressed. I like the way you show contrast between being a child, teen and woman is all about. Never stop writing!
50AlequinnThat was really an intelligent piece and wonderfully expressed. I like the way you show contrast between being a child, teen and woman is all about. Never stop writing!
2/22/2003 c1 darkchild4
Hey this was really good. I like the way you just seemed to easily string the words together. It was really deep and interesting.
Well done.
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Hey this was really good. I like the way you just seemed to easily string the words together. It was really deep and interesting.
Well done.
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