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1KrytzieGood language and explanations, but one thing you should try is to keep a timeline. Try to keep all the events in order. You double describe some things too, like the sister being the perfect princess and such.
Just some ideas. Keep it up.
2/22/2003 c1 5Dark PuckIt's only slightly OBVIOUS what transpired. But - my lips are sealed. THe muses are seeing to it, damn them.
Very well done, and I can't wait for chapter 2~
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