for Princess of Thieves3/24/2006 c4 
19Burnt Bread
what can I say - this story is very entertaining. I started reading to see what the fuss was all about about and the next thing I knew, I'd read all four chapters in your re-writer version.
Just some housekeeping things, I've noticed that sometimes there is a lack of spacing between words (maybe you type quickly?) It doesn't really subtract from the overall appeal of the story though, so I don't know if any of these are pressing changes needing to be made. For example, in the last few paragraphs of the first chapter:
"The library two floors below my roomwas my haven."
and
"My sixteenth birthdaycame fast"
Also, in the summary of the story (the one attatched to the story as opposed to the one on your profile), You refer to the princess as "Rae"... I think you've changed her name slightly since then.
I am also actually interested in the old version of the story. I saw some updates for it a while back, and the reviews you recieved for it are kinda good, but never actually read it - and now it's gone. Is there a chance that it may be posted again somewhere?
I hope you like to update.
Bread.
19Burnt Breadwhat can I say - this story is very entertaining. I started reading to see what the fuss was all about about and the next thing I knew, I'd read all four chapters in your re-writer version.
Just some housekeeping things, I've noticed that sometimes there is a lack of spacing between words (maybe you type quickly?) It doesn't really subtract from the overall appeal of the story though, so I don't know if any of these are pressing changes needing to be made. For example, in the last few paragraphs of the first chapter:
"The library two floors below my roomwas my haven."
and
"My sixteenth birthdaycame fast"
Also, in the summary of the story (the one attatched to the story as opposed to the one on your profile), You refer to the princess as "Rae"... I think you've changed her name slightly since then.
I am also actually interested in the old version of the story. I saw some updates for it a while back, and the reviews you recieved for it are kinda good, but never actually read it - and now it's gone. Is there a chance that it may be posted again somewhere?
I hope you like to update.
Bread.
8/30/2005 c3 Skeeter the Groundhog
hi! you're story is quite good. the characters rock! anyway, this story caught my eye because i have one called the prince of thieves (don't worry, the storyline is way different). anyway, feel free to r/r.
hi! you're story is quite good. the characters rock! anyway, this story caught my eye because i have one called the prince of thieves (don't worry, the storyline is way different). anyway, feel free to r/r.
8/23/2005 c3 Sally-andersonn
Fantastically fast-paced and still desriptive. A few spelling mistakes.
Please please please please put the next chapter up. please!
Fantastically fast-paced and still desriptive. A few spelling mistakes.
Please please please please put the next chapter up. please!
8/23/2005 c2 Sally-andersonn
Oh! really emotional. SOund like she was never really loved. Are you going to make realise that she needs to let her feelings show in the end like a sappy romance story? i hope not. Lovely story!
Oh! really emotional. SOund like she was never really loved. Are you going to make realise that she needs to let her feelings show in the end like a sappy romance story? i hope not. Lovely story!
8/23/2005 c1 Sally-andersonn
Very descriptive and developes characters very well. I really like the last line ' This is were my story begins.' except for that ittle bittle 'h' missing from were/where.
Very descriptive and developes characters very well. I really like the last line ' This is were my story begins.' except for that ittle bittle 'h' missing from were/where.
8/15/2005 c1 Ophira
I just read the first chapter (the prologue actually) and i just felt like i need to say that I like it alot! Anyways, I'll continue reading and make a more interesting review when I get more into it.
It's a really good start to what looks to be a very interesting story. Great work. I really can't wait to read more.
I just read the first chapter (the prologue actually) and i just felt like i need to say that I like it alot! Anyways, I'll continue reading and make a more interesting review when I get more into it.
It's a really good start to what looks to be a very interesting story. Great work. I really can't wait to read more.
8/12/2005 c3 12NeverFroze
Finally an update! XD I can't remember the last version (been so long) so yeah. I think the leader of the thief has very good characterization though! ^_^
12NeverFrozeFinally an update! XD I can't remember the last version (been so long) so yeah. I think the leader of the thief has very good characterization though! ^_^