for Held1/11/2004 c1 
28frugale
Enigmatic, very pleasant to read. It leaves me wanting more, and that's perfect that way...
28frugaleEnigmatic, very pleasant to read. It leaves me wanting more, and that's perfect that way...
8/15/2003 c1 210Kelpylion
Hm, that's very interesting, actually-I like the repetition a lot, and it has a rather sad tone to it.
210KelpylionHm, that's very interesting, actually-I like the repetition a lot, and it has a rather sad tone to it.
6/7/2003 c1 34Smoky Bear
sleepy poems are cool... although the subject matter is sad, i thought the haiku was cute... and yup, it's pretty romantic
34Smoky Bearsleepy poems are cool... although the subject matter is sad, i thought the haiku was cute... and yup, it's pretty romantic
5/6/2003 c1 1aleppine
? Some of the best things we write come when we're sleepy (or just woken up at 3 am by a really good idea), and they *usually* make sense enough ... I think this can be regarded as romantic, but not necessarily only that. I love the way you have broken up what could have been a single sentence into 3 lines to fit haiku style, rather than using three separate images.
1aleppine? Some of the best things we write come when we're sleepy (or just woken up at 3 am by a really good idea), and they *usually* make sense enough ... I think this can be regarded as romantic, but not necessarily only that. I love the way you have broken up what could have been a single sentence into 3 lines to fit haiku style, rather than using three separate images.
3/21/2003 c1 124Penumbra
romantic and sad. sometimes a good combination-in real life, it doesn't feel good though,i'm guessing. ^^;; keep writing!
124Penumbraromantic and sad. sometimes a good combination-in real life, it doesn't feel good though,i'm guessing. ^^;; keep writing!
3/20/2003 c1 35aurias
I don't think it's really haiku although the form is there, but the message is interesting. :)
35auriasI don't think it's really haiku although the form is there, but the message is interesting. :)
3/15/2003 c1 64not sure yet
i dont think its senseless, there's something there and very sad i think, good job
64not sure yeti dont think its senseless, there's something there and very sad i think, good job
3/13/2003 c1 128Zainab
OOh, you should continue writing poetry when ur tired. ^^ Strong haikus. Yes, you could consider this as a romance haiku.
128ZainabOOh, you should continue writing poetry when ur tired. ^^ Strong haikus. Yes, you could consider this as a romance haiku.
3/5/2003 c1 43Carter Tachikawa
It's not senseless. It's very romantic yet kinda sad. Ah, we need angst, every now and then? Good job. Keep it up.~CT
43Carter TachikawaIt's not senseless. It's very romantic yet kinda sad. Ah, we need angst, every now and then? Good job. Keep it up.~CT