5/27/2003 c8 2Taill
WOW! That was so awesome! I really enjoyed reading, please please please write more, you are very talented!

5/27/2003 c2 6kammei
Awesome story! Very well written too!

Your very talented! I must keep reading you've got me hooked.

I will continue reading now...

If you want you can R&R my story

(mine really sucks though)

Its called A Land in Dispair.

You keep writin k? and I will keep reading!

~*Kammei*~

5/27/2003 c2 Seeker of the Night
Ok, gotta say that this chapter is really long though it is very interesting. The whole Academy stuff is really cool. Right now I'm wishing I'm one of the Windriders. So mad!

Anyway, I think I better read the next chapter now. What's gonna happen to Saphra?

5/26/2003 c7 geuss
Hahaha! In _our_ portfolio, we can incorperate things we wrote for other classes or for not-school things. Anyway, it is really rather apperent that you enjoy writing about Sovay more, this chapter was rather more artful than the last, more character developement, more metaphors, more description, etc. My dad is hammer a chicken flat. It's scaring me . . . Anyway, maybe you should think about putting something into the other half of the story to make both main characters equally important. Otherwise later on when the two meet up, (the sheep on my computer are going to their spaceship - I've never seen that one before)Saphra will just seem like an add-on to Sovay. So maybe give her a chance to really shine by being comfortable on water and in the air. Or maybe she could get land sick during an earthquake. Hmm. . . now thw sheep iis burning. odd. Makes sense though, reentry does that sometimes . . . Anyway, as to some subplots here are acouple of ideas I had: ~Sovay gets herself a _really_ nice sword after the mutiny incident (when it broke) and has fun figuring out how to abduct a very very good weaponsmith. Or maybe she could get an alternate to a sword so people look at her weapon and give her a skeptical look if not start laughing outright. . . until they find themselves looking at the buisness end(s) ~Someone goes on a quest for the philosipher's stone, finds it has been turned into a lawn ornament, and perhaps as a added twist, the lawn ornament (through alchemy) has been brought to life as . . . Lieutenant Tollin. Long reveiw. Bye now!

-not telling

the sheep is flaming again.

5/26/2003 c7 2Animeguy2
This is pretty much... GOOD! This is excellent, write more stories likwe this, you are very talented!

ANIMEGUY OFFICIAL REVIEW: 9.5/10

5/26/2003 c4 wacka dkid
an the lil baby grows up to be.. a highwaywoman (heh.. which would it be?) wahoo. can't wait till Sovay meets Saphra

5/26/2003 c2 Raining Star
simply breathtaking