5/25/2003 c6 6Belle the Shadow-Cat
heh i miss Sovay too. But i like Saphra too. I'd miss the sky's too if i flew around all the time.
Keep going, soon enough i'll be caught up!
-Belle
heh i miss Sovay too. But i like Saphra too. I'd miss the sky's too if i flew around all the time.
Keep going, soon enough i'll be caught up!
-Belle
5/25/2003 c7 The-Mighty-Koshi
Heh heh, mutiny AND pirating are fun. I especially like the touch about how the sailors would definately have tight knots around the captain's hands. The mutiny was awesome and especially the signals. The braiding of the hair, the part about painting the decks red...all very cunning and sleathy. I hope to see more chapters so I can continue reading this. Keep up the sensational work!
*Bows*
Heh heh, mutiny AND pirating are fun. I especially like the touch about how the sailors would definately have tight knots around the captain's hands. The mutiny was awesome and especially the signals. The braiding of the hair, the part about painting the decks red...all very cunning and sleathy. I hope to see more chapters so I can continue reading this. Keep up the sensational work!
*Bows*
5/24/2003 c7 5Muzak-Freak06
Great story! Can't wait to read the next chapter! My favorite concept is the idea of windriders. It's great to finally see something that flies in a fantasy story. Hope the next chapter comes out soon! Really great!
If you want R&R my story, Title:Wind of Dreams
Great story! Can't wait to read the next chapter! My favorite concept is the idea of windriders. It's great to finally see something that flies in a fantasy story. Hope the next chapter comes out soon! Really great!
If you want R&R my story, Title:Wind of Dreams
5/24/2003 c4 Frojo
way too short for a chapter.
btw, there needs to be some explanation of why things happen usually.
im hooked, but im sleepy to read any more toniggt gotta finsih tomorrow
way too short for a chapter.
btw, there needs to be some explanation of why things happen usually.
im hooked, but im sleepy to read any more toniggt gotta finsih tomorrow
5/24/2003 c3 Frojo
what just happened here?
i am REALLY confused.
a little more deatail would be nice, and maybe some explanation of pasts and etc.
gotta read the next chapter though- im hooked!
what just happened here?
i am REALLY confused.
a little more deatail would be nice, and maybe some explanation of pasts and etc.
gotta read the next chapter though- im hooked!
5/24/2003 c2 Frojo
woah, hold on a second. can you explain some of this? or am i just dumb because i dont know everything. a little more complex and harder to understand than most stories.
dont get me wrong though, it still keeps me interested.
woah, hold on a second. can you explain some of this? or am i just dumb because i dont know everything. a little more complex and harder to understand than most stories.
dont get me wrong though, it still keeps me interested.
5/24/2003 c5 6Belle the Shadow-Cat
Interesting chapter i quite like Sovay. Mutiny eh? well she is an ambitious girl. And i say they're prejudiced. I loved how you descrined the bandits as panthers, it really seemed to fit. I read more later.
Interesting chapter i quite like Sovay. Mutiny eh? well she is an ambitious girl. And i say they're prejudiced. I loved how you descrined the bandits as panthers, it really seemed to fit. I read more later.
5/23/2003 c6 Scotia Li not logged in
Hehehe...you'll never guess...and don't expect that any of this is the central plot of the story, because I've barely scratched its surface so far.
^-^ Scotia Li
Hehehe...you'll never guess...and don't expect that any of this is the central plot of the story, because I've barely scratched its surface so far.
^-^ Scotia Li
5/22/2003 c6 9Magentian
Hm... I like the settings of warring countries you're developing so far. It makes everything a bit more interesting... or perhaps it's just your narrative that's so endearing. ^_^ Let me come out and say this right off the bat- dude, you should publish this. It's that good. I'm not sure if this is a new suggestion, it probably isn't, but let me just reaffirm that for ya: this is one of the best stories I've ever seen on here. Kudos to you! ^_^
In other news... Hmm. Something tells me that the various governmental regimes in place here aren't all they're cracked up to be... maybe they're even downright wrong! I don't trust Therris as far as I could throw him, he may have a lot of power, but I don't trust power... and I especially don't trust those who wield it. Maybe he only offered Saphra the job to put her off track in the search for her sister! Maybe one of the Thanes kidnapped Ashiri! If it's the East Thane, then Therris could just be putting Saphra on patrols to try to kill her... Or, if it's the West Thane... hmm. I guess I'll just have to wait and see...
(wow, this is a long review!) ^_^
Hm... I like the settings of warring countries you're developing so far. It makes everything a bit more interesting... or perhaps it's just your narrative that's so endearing. ^_^ Let me come out and say this right off the bat- dude, you should publish this. It's that good. I'm not sure if this is a new suggestion, it probably isn't, but let me just reaffirm that for ya: this is one of the best stories I've ever seen on here. Kudos to you! ^_^
In other news... Hmm. Something tells me that the various governmental regimes in place here aren't all they're cracked up to be... maybe they're even downright wrong! I don't trust Therris as far as I could throw him, he may have a lot of power, but I don't trust power... and I especially don't trust those who wield it. Maybe he only offered Saphra the job to put her off track in the search for her sister! Maybe one of the Thanes kidnapped Ashiri! If it's the East Thane, then Therris could just be putting Saphra on patrols to try to kill her... Or, if it's the West Thane... hmm. I guess I'll just have to wait and see...
(wow, this is a long review!) ^_^
5/22/2003 c5 Magentian
Al righ-tay! ^_^ Don't ask. I love the way Sovay thinks, turning every situation to her advantage and striving for power... and she manages to combine it with such a total attitude that it's impossible to accuse her of wrongdoing, just because she's such a funny, crazy little thing. ^_^ Very lovable. Good job! Can't wait till the mutiny... lol
Al righ-tay! ^_^ Don't ask. I love the way Sovay thinks, turning every situation to her advantage and striving for power... and she manages to combine it with such a total attitude that it's impossible to accuse her of wrongdoing, just because she's such a funny, crazy little thing. ^_^ Very lovable. Good job! Can't wait till the mutiny... lol
5/22/2003 c4 Magentian
^_^ I knew the floor'd go, the minute they started poking around the bottom of the carriage... lol Cool beans! I sort of wonder how you pronounce Uilm, though...
^_^ I knew the floor'd go, the minute they started poking around the bottom of the carriage... lol Cool beans! I sort of wonder how you pronounce Uilm, though...
5/20/2003 c1 29MelodyReiterLee
O, this is cool. The stuff is italics really catch attention. I'll be back to read more. Keep writing.
O, this is cool. The stuff is italics really catch attention. I'll be back to read more. Keep writing.
5/20/2003 c2 9Scythe de Zaran
Hmm...very interesting. Your prologue is very creative. Goodjob. Big spaces between places though... being literal as in between paragraphs.
Hmm...very interesting. Your prologue is very creative. Goodjob. Big spaces between places though... being literal as in between paragraphs.