for underground6/30/2013 c8 indy
well. if i happened to stumble across someone like Nathen in real life i'd have dumped him by this point. and that would be a clever thing to do. but since it's a story...
it is good.
but im a seme, so it just doesnt sit *perfectly* with me.
well. if i happened to stumble across someone like Nathen in real life i'd have dumped him by this point. and that would be a clever thing to do. but since it's a story...
it is good.
but im a seme, so it just doesnt sit *perfectly* with me.
1/24/2013 c1 mangatake
I tried getting past the third paragraph, but the narrator just rambles on and on and on. This must be a fantastic story if it has received over 200 reviews, so I'm hoping sometime in the not so distant future it might undergo a rewrite where all redundancy and mind-numbing idle chatter will be edited out, and then I will be among the first to pounce on this.
Thanks for sharing it at any rate. I'm sure it's lovely.
I tried getting past the third paragraph, but the narrator just rambles on and on and on. This must be a fantastic story if it has received over 200 reviews, so I'm hoping sometime in the not so distant future it might undergo a rewrite where all redundancy and mind-numbing idle chatter will be edited out, and then I will be among the first to pounce on this.
Thanks for sharing it at any rate. I'm sure it's lovely.
11/13/2011 c10 iwanttodeletethiswtf
ok. so. no, i haven't re-read this far yet.
but i have read the like, three? reviews i left the last time i read this.. i'm always appalled
as to what a nerdy loser i was when i was younger.but anyway! :)
i'll try to leave better reviews on the new story this time around.
-JB
ok. so. no, i haven't re-read this far yet.
but i have read the like, three? reviews i left the last time i read this.. i'm always appalled
as to what a nerdy loser i was when i was younger.but anyway! :)
i'll try to leave better reviews on the new story this time around.
-JB
11/13/2011 c17 iwanttodeletethiswtf
ahh! i can't remember most of this! like.. any of it. i'm going to read it again. you're not removing it right?
either way, i'm excited to read the new version :)
-JB
oh.. i know i reviewed this before. but under a different name.
ahh! i can't remember most of this! like.. any of it. i'm going to read it again. you're not removing it right?
either way, i'm excited to read the new version :)
-JB
oh.. i know i reviewed this before. but under a different name.
7/5/2009 c6 
1victorcharlie
oh-my-mother-'efing-freaking-god!
now say that realy fast a couple of times and you'll know what came out of my mouth for a good minute [other than drool].
that... that was "oh-my-mother-'effing-freaking-god!" good.
i am absolutely [now i really want to hear a british guy say it] speechless, this chapter has left me... rather hot and bothered my i tell you [hopefully that was your intention].
i must also tell you that i am love this. thank you.
1victorcharlieoh-my-mother-'efing-freaking-god!
now say that realy fast a couple of times and you'll know what came out of my mouth for a good minute [other than drool].
that... that was "oh-my-mother-'effing-freaking-god!" good.
i am absolutely [now i really want to hear a british guy say it] speechless, this chapter has left me... rather hot and bothered my i tell you [hopefully that was your intention].
i must also tell you that i am love this. thank you.
4/16/2009 c16 Clazziquai Project
I absolutely love this story. I'm definitely adding it to my favorites. I have to admit one of my favorite chapters is the first one. Jaisyn's demeanor and thoughts were just so similar to mine that I almost laughed. lol I really like your characters' development too. I thought that Jaisyn and Nathen fell for each other way too quickly though. Jaisyn also forgave Nathen too easily on some things, but I guess anyone would if they were really in love with the person. Overall, I really did enjoy reading this. Your writing is amazing.
I absolutely love this story. I'm definitely adding it to my favorites. I have to admit one of my favorite chapters is the first one. Jaisyn's demeanor and thoughts were just so similar to mine that I almost laughed. lol I really like your characters' development too. I thought that Jaisyn and Nathen fell for each other way too quickly though. Jaisyn also forgave Nathen too easily on some things, but I guess anyone would if they were really in love with the person. Overall, I really did enjoy reading this. Your writing is amazing.
12/23/2008 c16 oo
one of my favorites
happy holidays and keep writing.
one of my favorites
happy holidays and keep writing.
12/2/2008 c16 10sleepy fox spirit
Some issues with spelling and grammar (like the distinction between its and it's) but otherwise an excellent story. Such odd ways of spelling the names but I like the twist on Jaisyn, much more original than other variations I've seen.
10sleepy fox spiritSome issues with spelling and grammar (like the distinction between its and it's) but otherwise an excellent story. Such odd ways of spelling the names but I like the twist on Jaisyn, much more original than other variations I've seen.
10/8/2008 c16 aripie
oomg first time reading this story (at least I think so...ahaha) and its great! gonna check yer others out :)
oomg first time reading this story (at least I think so...ahaha) and its great! gonna check yer others out :)
11/25/2007 c1 1000CraneFlight
I simply have to say that this one of the best, if not the best, interpretations of the human mind that I've ever read. Period. I thank you much for creating this story.
I simply have to say that this one of the best, if not the best, interpretations of the human mind that I've ever read. Period. I thank you much for creating this story.