for underground4/19/2006 c16 
6kuroi-urufu
You know... this has to be one of the cutest emo boy love stories i've read. And i love the character development and how selective you are with information, like how you say 'And I now know why he doesn't like to watch sappy movies.' You don't give to much infomation out.
Overall i think it's very well writen
6kuroi-urufuYou know... this has to be one of the cutest emo boy love stories i've read. And i love the character development and how selective you are with information, like how you say 'And I now know why he doesn't like to watch sappy movies.' You don't give to much infomation out.
Overall i think it's very well writen
3/27/2006 c16 StarDust Rocker
I have been up since 10 pm last night and once I found this story I couldn't stop reading.
[insert long pause]
Oh my God, this story was awesome. Like, I do not have the words, but that may be because I've been all night but I'm pretty sure it's the story. ^_^
You should... Write a sequel!Dur nur nur! Really, Nathen and Jaysin deserve one don't you think?
I have been up since 10 pm last night and once I found this story I couldn't stop reading.
[insert long pause]
Oh my God, this story was awesome. Like, I do not have the words, but that may be because I've been all night but I'm pretty sure it's the story. ^_^
You should... Write a sequel!Dur nur nur! Really, Nathen and Jaysin deserve one don't you think?
12/28/2005 c5 klahrissa
I u nderstand that sometimes dialogue is needed to get a feel for the characters but this is way too much dialogue. Too much seemingly pointless dialogue makes the stary boring.
I u nderstand that sometimes dialogue is needed to get a feel for the characters but this is way too much dialogue. Too much seemingly pointless dialogue makes the stary boring.
12/4/2005 c1 69tomato-greens
Kayne and Abel! I get it!
...Right. Interesting premise. Like the main character. Will read more. Ugg ugg me like ugg.
(I'm sick, please forgive me for the bad review.)
69tomato-greensKayne and Abel! I get it!
...Right. Interesting premise. Like the main character. Will read more. Ugg ugg me like ugg.
(I'm sick, please forgive me for the bad review.)
11/1/2005 c1 11silvermyth
The way you spelled Jaisyn kind of threw me for a loop, there, cause it kind of looks like Jaidyn, this girl at my school. x_o;
11silvermythThe way you spelled Jaisyn kind of threw me for a loop, there, cause it kind of looks like Jaidyn, this girl at my school. x_o;
1/25/2005 c1 Js
Kayne and Abel? Why am I not surprised. After all the store is called Biblical Proportions. =P Very...original.
I like the story so far. =)
Kayne and Abel? Why am I not surprised. After all the store is called Biblical Proportions. =P Very...original.
I like the story so far. =)
1/8/2005 c16 Guest
Their relationship was so shallow, and based on sex to begin with. It just made me sick. Friends BEFORE sex, at the very least. Not after.
I think I just spent 4 hours reading this, and I just wasn't satisfied. Oh well, I like your other short stories, a whole lot... I think mostly because they and kind of sadly... Now I'll read you new one.
Their relationship was so shallow, and based on sex to begin with. It just made me sick. Friends BEFORE sex, at the very least. Not after.
I think I just spent 4 hours reading this, and I just wasn't satisfied. Oh well, I like your other short stories, a whole lot... I think mostly because they and kind of sadly... Now I'll read you new one.
12/31/2004 c12 Silver Shadows
JESUS! GIVE ME A FUCKING HEART ATTACK, WHY DON'T YOU? *ok, just breathe, Silver, just breathe* GRRH...gonna KILL Jake...KIL...
JESUS! GIVE ME A FUCKING HEART ATTACK, WHY DON'T YOU? *ok, just breathe, Silver, just breathe* GRRH...gonna KILL Jake...KIL...
12/31/2004 c10 Silver Shadows
Sorry that I haven't reviewed before this, I usually do, but for some reason I keep forgetting this isn't a book. Off screen, I mean. ^_^ I keep forgetting to review. So yeah. ^_^ This story is really wonderful. I keep getting lost in it, it's so good. And not many stories do that to me. Even with the killer headache staring at the screen gave me, I'm glad I read this! ^_^ And I'm not even done yet! But...jeez...I think I know who's winning the marathon. *wink*
Sorry that I haven't reviewed before this, I usually do, but for some reason I keep forgetting this isn't a book. Off screen, I mean. ^_^ I keep forgetting to review. So yeah. ^_^ This story is really wonderful. I keep getting lost in it, it's so good. And not many stories do that to me. Even with the killer headache staring at the screen gave me, I'm glad I read this! ^_^ And I'm not even done yet! But...jeez...I think I know who's winning the marathon. *wink*
7/25/2004 c16 ddz008
GREAT! GREAT! GREAT!
GREAT STORY!
I LOVE IT!
It was simply great, amazing and lovely!
The first chapter was kinda :s weird, I didn't completely like it... but something of it caught my attention and I couldn't stop reading until it was to late and my eyes were and I was almost sleeping in the board.
So I have finished until today!
And I LOVE it!
The whole story was fascinating!
Nathen and Jaysin are so cute!
I LOVE them!
Nathen was a bit scary sometimes :S
Jake also!
This story and it's characters were GREAT!
Hope to see more of you, you're a great author... you're going to be added to my fav stories list!
:D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D
GREAT! GREAT! GREAT!
GREAT STORY!
I LOVE IT!
It was simply great, amazing and lovely!
The first chapter was kinda :s weird, I didn't completely like it... but something of it caught my attention and I couldn't stop reading until it was to late and my eyes were and I was almost sleeping in the board.
So I have finished until today!
And I LOVE it!
The whole story was fascinating!
Nathen and Jaysin are so cute!
I LOVE them!
Nathen was a bit scary sometimes :S
Jake also!
This story and it's characters were GREAT!
Hope to see more of you, you're a great author... you're going to be added to my fav stories list!
:D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D
5/24/2004 c11 98ShadowGal
:blinks: What? Huh? I'm so confused, that was out of nowhere. Did I miss something? Poor Jaisyn...
98ShadowGal:blinks: What? Huh? I'm so confused, that was out of nowhere. Did I miss something? Poor Jaisyn...
5/24/2004 c10 ShadowGal
Ah yes, poor, *poor* Jaisyn. :rolls her eyes:
Oh, and have I mentioned yet how much I love the spelling of his name? (His being Jaisyn, of course)
Ah yes, poor, *poor* Jaisyn. :rolls her eyes:
Oh, and have I mentioned yet how much I love the spelling of his name? (His being Jaisyn, of course)
5/24/2004 c9 ShadowGal
:melts:: Good-good. No time for me to think of more to say, I must go on to the next chapter. Immediately.
Language? German? Meh... Whatever.
:melts:: Good-good. No time for me to think of more to say, I must go on to the next chapter. Immediately.
Language? German? Meh... Whatever.
5/24/2004 c8 ShadowGal
I'm very glad you added that little mini-disclaimer at the end, 'cause you had me sort of worried. Not big-time worried, just a little, but still...
Anyway, I'm very much addicted to this story, can't believe it took me so long to get back to it.
:rushes off to read some more:
I'm very glad you added that little mini-disclaimer at the end, 'cause you had me sort of worried. Not big-time worried, just a little, but still...
Anyway, I'm very much addicted to this story, can't believe it took me so long to get back to it.
:rushes off to read some more: