for A Simple Twist Of Fate5/28/2003 c3 Wildmage42
That was really cool. I like the mythology-type stories, like "Why so-and-so is such-and-such." It's very cool.
That was really cool. I like the mythology-type stories, like "Why so-and-so is such-and-such." It's very cool.
5/27/2003 c1 
29Lilly Of the Wolves
hey! i like your story. I wrote some more on mine to, thanks for the review!
29Lilly Of the Wolveshey! i like your story. I wrote some more on mine to, thanks for the review!
5/27/2003 c1 15La Bella Caracol
This looks really good so far! I like the plot; I can't wait to read more.
BTW: I read your profile, and I LOVE Tailchaser's Song! Also, in up coming chapters of AniMagi, Chronicles of Narnia show up in the form of people's names. :P
For reviews, I have a couple stories you can take your pick from:
Confessions of a Hawk on this site
Dragon Heart on fanfiction.net
any other story on fanfiction.net :P
-Riana Rogue
15La Bella CaracolThis looks really good so far! I like the plot; I can't wait to read more.
BTW: I read your profile, and I LOVE Tailchaser's Song! Also, in up coming chapters of AniMagi, Chronicles of Narnia show up in the form of people's names. :P
For reviews, I have a couple stories you can take your pick from:
Confessions of a Hawk on this site
Dragon Heart on fanfiction.net
any other story on fanfiction.net :P
-Riana Rogue
5/27/2003 c3 2Kro
Thanks for the review! I have to say that my favorite part of this story so far is the legends Silver and Dravidian tell. I just really enjoyed the writing style and the description. I also like the names you chose for your characters, particularly Dravidian and Cytosine, they are very individual. I do agree with others that some basic grammar checks need to be made, but to me the most important part of a story is just that, the story. I'm sure grammar will come to you more easily the more you write. I would also suggest trying to work some of the description of Cytosine's abilities and such into the story when she uses them, to avoid long narration paragraphs. Unless, of course, narration is what you're after. I'll read more of this as soon as I have the chance, so expect another review soon! :)
2KroThanks for the review! I have to say that my favorite part of this story so far is the legends Silver and Dravidian tell. I just really enjoyed the writing style and the description. I also like the names you chose for your characters, particularly Dravidian and Cytosine, they are very individual. I do agree with others that some basic grammar checks need to be made, but to me the most important part of a story is just that, the story. I'm sure grammar will come to you more easily the more you write. I would also suggest trying to work some of the description of Cytosine's abilities and such into the story when she uses them, to avoid long narration paragraphs. Unless, of course, narration is what you're after. I'll read more of this as soon as I have the chance, so expect another review soon! :)
5/26/2003 c1 8A-wolf-called-Skya
Okay! *Rubs hands together* Good start i think. now here's some construtive critique!
1. You really need to spell check, i one sentence i saw formidable spelt formable. also, at the start of a sentence, do a space before starting; don't worry, i got used to doing that in storys too!
Thats all i found wrong today; chapter 2 in my story is up! Rachel Morgan.
8A-wolf-called-SkyaOkay! *Rubs hands together* Good start i think. now here's some construtive critique!
1. You really need to spell check, i one sentence i saw formidable spelt formable. also, at the start of a sentence, do a space before starting; don't worry, i got used to doing that in storys too!
Thats all i found wrong today; chapter 2 in my story is up! Rachel Morgan.
5/26/2003 c1 30Silverfire Starr
You have a really good setting! I love Cytosine's character!
You might want to edit it a little, there are some typos and grammar probs.
I'll be reading more.
30Silverfire StarrYou have a really good setting! I love Cytosine's character!
You might want to edit it a little, there are some typos and grammar probs.
I'll be reading more.
5/26/2003 c1 4shadowtalon
this is aq great story ^_^ there are a few grammar mistakes, but other than that it's good. i like the idea of the moon clans, will read more later :)
4shadowtalonthis is aq great story ^_^ there are a few grammar mistakes, but other than that it's good. i like the idea of the moon clans, will read more later :)
5/25/2003 c8 27Loganberry
Hmm, favourite character? Tricky. Probably Cytosine, on account of anyone surviving a name like that has to be pretty strong-willed! =;)
It certainly feels as though things are building up towards a climax here, so it was unsurprising to be told that we're getting near the end. Despite his annoying nature, I shall rather miss Scout, you know. =;)
27LoganberryHmm, favourite character? Tricky. Probably Cytosine, on account of anyone surviving a name like that has to be pretty strong-willed! =;)
It certainly feels as though things are building up towards a climax here, so it was unsurprising to be told that we're getting near the end. Despite his annoying nature, I shall rather miss Scout, you know. =;)
5/22/2003 c2 7Fans'R Us
Here to review again. I like the chapter, and I still have to catch up with the rest. Thanks for your reviews, they really help me. I think I have the summary thing this go round, but you can still help if you like.
7Fans'R UsHere to review again. I like the chapter, and I still have to catch up with the rest. Thanks for your reviews, they really help me. I think I have the summary thing this go round, but you can still help if you like.
5/21/2003 c7 8Kezkay
Wow, that was a long one! Excuse me for a moment while I rub feeling back into my eyes...heh. That chapter really kept my attention! I have to agree with LazeyWinde on one thing though... Cytosine DID recover pretty dang quickly. I loved your description of Artemis, both the physical and the whole thing about him knighting himself. It's the small things like that that bring characters alive and make them different from the others. As for itallics, etc. codes, I just use Microsoft Word and save the file as an .html so that the codes are already there. Do you actually write this in html format? That would take a lot of work! Lunch is over, got to go, bye! -Kez
8KezkayWow, that was a long one! Excuse me for a moment while I rub feeling back into my eyes...heh. That chapter really kept my attention! I have to agree with LazeyWinde on one thing though... Cytosine DID recover pretty dang quickly. I loved your description of Artemis, both the physical and the whole thing about him knighting himself. It's the small things like that that bring characters alive and make them different from the others. As for itallics, etc. codes, I just use Microsoft Word and save the file as an .html so that the codes are already there. Do you actually write this in html format? That would take a lot of work! Lunch is over, got to go, bye! -Kez
5/20/2003 c2 14DigiDayDreamer
Sorry, just came to say thanks for the Scout and Silver plushies. Hey, that gives me an idea!
Nogar: What idea?
What if I made a fic about the plushies I have? So far, I have Ryuu, Chitoku, and the twins from Yui Shirou and I have Dravidian, Scout and Silver from Belle.
Nogar: You mean you're gonna bring them to life and have them fight silly?
Hey, that's not a bad idea, Nogar.
Nogar: No! I don't mean that!
Just kidding! Of course, it won't be so bad writing a humor fic every once in a while.
Nogar: @_@ Excuse while I find some Scotch tape to tape my stupid mouth shut.
^_^ Expect to see a humor fic about TUD!
Nogar: X_X *passes out*
I just noticed I wrote my other penname in one review. No wonder you knew it. Anyway, gotta get back to writing!
Spell ya later!
14DigiDayDreamerSorry, just came to say thanks for the Scout and Silver plushies. Hey, that gives me an idea!
Nogar: What idea?
What if I made a fic about the plushies I have? So far, I have Ryuu, Chitoku, and the twins from Yui Shirou and I have Dravidian, Scout and Silver from Belle.
Nogar: You mean you're gonna bring them to life and have them fight silly?
Hey, that's not a bad idea, Nogar.
Nogar: No! I don't mean that!
Just kidding! Of course, it won't be so bad writing a humor fic every once in a while.
Nogar: @_@ Excuse while I find some Scotch tape to tape my stupid mouth shut.
^_^ Expect to see a humor fic about TUD!
Nogar: X_X *passes out*
I just noticed I wrote my other penname in one review. No wonder you knew it. Anyway, gotta get back to writing!
Spell ya later!
5/20/2003 c1 7Fans'R Us
I like the idea, and the plot. I'll have to read some more later, but this is really good. Oh... and Silver sounds like a cool name. At least for a cat. Cool first chapter.
7Fans'R UsI like the idea, and the plot. I'll have to read some more later, but this is really good. Oh... and Silver sounds like a cool name. At least for a cat. Cool first chapter.
5/20/2003 c8 2Kayasuri-n
Hi! I sent you the next chapter. Beta reader... please! Any way, whats up between Cytosine and Dravidian? Dravidian is my fav character, 'cause I like dragons, but Cytosine's my second fav. By the way, you said 'one to the chapter' at the top. Just letten you know.
2Kayasuri-nHi! I sent you the next chapter. Beta reader... please! Any way, whats up between Cytosine and Dravidian? Dravidian is my fav character, 'cause I like dragons, but Cytosine's my second fav. By the way, you said 'one to the chapter' at the top. Just letten you know.
5/20/2003 c8 14DigiDayDreamer
Dravidian's getting better! It's a good chapter, nevertheless.
Those tips I gave you were from K'Arthur, whom you should give credit to.
Luna and Silver are quite a pair, though Luna's more talkative and Silver's more, uh, think-ative.
Hey, Scout's personality really reminds me of my character Tack. I enjoyed when he annoyed Dravidian and the dragon got smacked in the face. Nice change in Cytosine's character, she could laugh if she wanted to.
It's very obvious who my favorite is. *coughcoughDravidiancough* However, I also like Scout as a second favorite. ^_^ Yes, I'm getting that sequel going. But the first chapter's very long, so sorry if it's taking me longer thn I thought.~_~ Reading and reviewing other's fics can be rewarding in many ways, right?
Spell ya later!(You found out my other penname? That's a surprise.)
14DigiDayDreamerDravidian's getting better! It's a good chapter, nevertheless.
Those tips I gave you were from K'Arthur, whom you should give credit to.
Luna and Silver are quite a pair, though Luna's more talkative and Silver's more, uh, think-ative.
Hey, Scout's personality really reminds me of my character Tack. I enjoyed when he annoyed Dravidian and the dragon got smacked in the face. Nice change in Cytosine's character, she could laugh if she wanted to.
It's very obvious who my favorite is. *coughcoughDravidiancough* However, I also like Scout as a second favorite. ^_^ Yes, I'm getting that sequel going. But the first chapter's very long, so sorry if it's taking me longer thn I thought.~_~ Reading and reviewing other's fics can be rewarding in many ways, right?
Spell ya later!(You found out my other penname? That's a surprise.)
5/18/2003 c7 2LazeyWinde
Cytosene seemed to recover from being near drowned a little too quickly. That's all I can find to complain about. I thought I saw typoes but I can't find them now. Pretty good.
You sneaky felida, telling your friends about my story to give me reviews to make me write new chapters. *Scowls* It worked. :P Got a new one up about Rye.
2LazeyWindeCytosene seemed to recover from being near drowned a little too quickly. That's all I can find to complain about. I thought I saw typoes but I can't find them now. Pretty good.
You sneaky felida, telling your friends about my story to give me reviews to make me write new chapters. *Scowls* It worked. :P Got a new one up about Rye.