4/9/2015 c11 marylynx
Hi, dear author! I like you story so much! I have read all of the eleven chapters and I was really excited! I do not know, why you think that last chapter is worse than others. It seemed interesting for me! Why does everyone keep saying that it is the last chapter? I suppose that the story has just developed.
Hi, dear author! I like you story so much! I have read all of the eleven chapters and I was really excited! I do not know, why you think that last chapter is worse than others. It seemed interesting for me! Why does everyone keep saying that it is the last chapter? I suppose that the story has just developed.
4/18/2009 c11 12Petals-and-Tears
Perhaps you are going to leave this story unfinished after all it has been SIX years but I found this story as I was flipping thru Fictionpress and I really like it . . .
In fact I would really like to know what happens
plz continue it
Petals-and-Tears
Perhaps you are going to leave this story unfinished after all it has been SIX years but I found this story as I was flipping thru Fictionpress and I really like it . . .
In fact I would really like to know what happens
plz continue it
Petals-and-Tears
9/7/2006 c11 3D. Wilder
I have to admit...I've never had the urge to read any suspense/adventure stories on this site. But your story is very appealing. I like the characters and I most definitely like the plot. Please keep going, I will be waiting!
I have to admit...I've never had the urge to read any suspense/adventure stories on this site. But your story is very appealing. I like the characters and I most definitely like the plot. Please keep going, I will be waiting!
2/4/2006 c11 Finch
So how old are you exactly? :)
I mean, writing is my life, and I'm 17 and find it hard to string an essay introduction together - and im an A grade A level student!
I read fictionpress A LOT - and you're the second story to ever get my praise. I'm critical, and even though you seem young you're bloody amazing. Reading through this (I just found it and read it all the way through - took me an hour and 10 mins!) you really remind me of JK Rowling or Anthony Horowitz's writing styles. :)
You really impress me - update.
So how old are you exactly? :)
I mean, writing is my life, and I'm 17 and find it hard to string an essay introduction together - and im an A grade A level student!
I read fictionpress A LOT - and you're the second story to ever get my praise. I'm critical, and even though you seem young you're bloody amazing. Reading through this (I just found it and read it all the way through - took me an hour and 10 mins!) you really remind me of JK Rowling or Anthony Horowitz's writing styles. :)
You really impress me - update.
2/2/2006 c11 naz
i love the story, which ones the bad guy, A.J or Chase? pleese finish to the end, im saying this because some authors go half way through their stories and dont finish it, even though they are still getting reviews.
i love the story, which ones the bad guy, A.J or Chase? pleese finish to the end, im saying this because some authors go half way through their stories and dont finish it, even though they are still getting reviews.
1/6/2006 c11 2Megan Jacobson
It's gonna be A.J., isn't it? He's saying Chase is crazy, but Chase has been warning Danielle since the beginning.
It's gonna be A.J., isn't it? He's saying Chase is crazy, but Chase has been warning Danielle since the beginning.
1/6/2006 c10 Megan Jacobson
Jeez, a mansion of death. I can see why everyone wants to go there. Danielle and Luke better watch their backs.
Jeez, a mansion of death. I can see why everyone wants to go there. Danielle and Luke better watch their backs.
1/6/2006 c4 Megan Jacobson
Oh... So is Chase the bad guy? Or is it A.J.? Or it the security guy? Or maybe, just maybe, it'll turn out to be nerdy little Luke. I'll have to keep reading to find out.
Oh... So is Chase the bad guy? Or is it A.J.? Or it the security guy? Or maybe, just maybe, it'll turn out to be nerdy little Luke. I'll have to keep reading to find out.
1/6/2006 c3 Megan Jacobson
See! Luke's trying to get himself killed already, and it's only Chapter 3! *Shakes head* But seriously here, it's a solid story. I like it.
See! Luke's trying to get himself killed already, and it's only Chapter 3! *Shakes head* But seriously here, it's a solid story. I like it.
1/6/2006 c2 Megan Jacobson
Ah... bet Luke and Danielle will be our only survivors. Am I right? Or maybe Luke'll die tragically in Danielle's arms while she sobs... Sorry, *slaps self* never mind. Great job. I want to read more.
Ah... bet Luke and Danielle will be our only survivors. Am I right? Or maybe Luke'll die tragically in Danielle's arms while she sobs... Sorry, *slaps self* never mind. Great job. I want to read more.
1/6/2006 c1 Megan Jacobson
Ah, poor Danielle. Doesn't she realize that the mansions are ALWAYS haunted? But anyway, you've done a good job, it's clearly written and precise.
Ah, poor Danielle. Doesn't she realize that the mansions are ALWAYS haunted? But anyway, you've done a good job, it's clearly written and precise.
11/14/2005 c11 Hi
Ah it's been TWO YEARS and youd idn't finish the story. Can you please finish it? :-(
Ah it's been TWO YEARS and youd idn't finish the story. Can you please finish it? :-(
9/12/2005 c11 2a common mistake
Intriguing story, I've got to admit it's pretty original and I love the suspense... which at the moment is eating away at me because I can't figure out who killed who and who's the bad guy... and the good guy... But I love it. Excellent story, can't wait for the update!
Intriguing story, I've got to admit it's pretty original and I love the suspense... which at the moment is eating away at me because I can't figure out who killed who and who's the bad guy... and the good guy... But I love it. Excellent story, can't wait for the update!
9/4/2005 c11 Lily of the Shadow
This is very interesting, I look forward to more!
That was interesting, bringing up Chase with AJ. I was half-expecting him to be a ghost! Although... I'm fairly convinced that Luke's 'girlfriend' is the 16-year-old who drowned with her mother. I know that Luke feels that she's corporeal, but... She's still rather suspicious to me.
Anyway, like I said, this is really interesting!
This is very interesting, I look forward to more!
That was interesting, bringing up Chase with AJ. I was half-expecting him to be a ghost! Although... I'm fairly convinced that Luke's 'girlfriend' is the 16-year-old who drowned with her mother. I know that Luke feels that she's corporeal, but... She's still rather suspicious to me.
Anyway, like I said, this is really interesting!