for Tampa After Dark: Unexpected Hunter10/26/2004 c5 
41Willum
Too short of a chapter, KB. Not really a lot given in the way of info to progress the story, other than there seems to be a gov't group on the scene now.
Hope to see a new (longer) chapter soon.
41WillumToo short of a chapter, KB. Not really a lot given in the way of info to progress the story, other than there seems to be a gov't group on the scene now.
Hope to see a new (longer) chapter soon.
9/5/2004 c4 1Moozs
I really liked this. Your dialogue and character thoughts are good. they build up a main character that could easily have been a little dull. Anyway, overall really good. Im looking forward to reading more.
1MoozsI really liked this. Your dialogue and character thoughts are good. they build up a main character that could easily have been a little dull. Anyway, overall really good. Im looking forward to reading more.
9/5/2004 c4 41Willum
I'm enjoying this story, and hope that you continue with it soon. Not sure if it ties in with your previoius two, but that would seem a safe bet.
Mike is a likable character, and we can almost bet on what he has coming down the line to him, but I'll wait to see what spin you put on things.
Noticed a few grammer errors, but nothing that distracted from the story, and it's actually an easy read.
41WillumI'm enjoying this story, and hope that you continue with it soon. Not sure if it ties in with your previoius two, but that would seem a safe bet.
Mike is a likable character, and we can almost bet on what he has coming down the line to him, but I'll wait to see what spin you put on things.
Noticed a few grammer errors, but nothing that distracted from the story, and it's actually an easy read.
3/3/2004 c2 12restless-wandering
nice portrayel of conflicting emotions... woe to the voices inside of our heads... ;) so... what's next?
12restless-wanderingnice portrayel of conflicting emotions... woe to the voices inside of our heads... ;) so... what's next?
3/15/2003 c1 restless-wandering
A! YOU'RE GOING TO STOP THERE! what a cliffhanger. Just like a commercial. gr. You are going to write a second chapter. Right? I'll be waiting impatiently, lol. j/k.
Nice story, very suspensful. i can't wait until the next chapter comes out...
A! YOU'RE GOING TO STOP THERE! what a cliffhanger. Just like a commercial. gr. You are going to write a second chapter. Right? I'll be waiting impatiently, lol. j/k.
Nice story, very suspensful. i can't wait until the next chapter comes out...