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6/24/2005 c1 103Jesse the Storyteller
For some reason I like this version better than the "revised" one =P
3/16/2003 c1 23suckerplucker
what i really like about this poem is your parallel construction. The repitition, especially in the last line ( to think, to love, to live...) is really pretty. However, while i still really like line two, its like an emerald next to diamonds, if you make a decision about your ands and just clean it up a bit i think it would really be amazing. Also the line about auburn locks is just kind of out of place.

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3/15/2003 c1 1soyamiso
Nice...is it real?

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