
5/20/2003 c1
7Demeter Rose
I like the voice you've written this in and that you are using non-glamourous characters. I have one suggestion for you. If you're making the point that Old Silver is what holds the group together, then it would help if the other characters bickered about something while he was gone.

I like the voice you've written this in and that you are using non-glamourous characters. I have one suggestion for you. If you're making the point that Old Silver is what holds the group together, then it would help if the other characters bickered about something while he was gone.
5/12/2003 c1
18Savin
Aww...how sweet. But just how did he get those sandwiches? They must really live a hard life. But I still wonder how he got those sandwiches...*think hard*

Aww...how sweet. But just how did he get those sandwiches? They must really live a hard life. But I still wonder how he got those sandwiches...*think hard*
4/26/2003 c1
13NuttyGummy
I love it! Will you continue? Please do if you can, I want to read more if there is more.

I love it! Will you continue? Please do if you can, I want to read more if there is more.
3/16/2003 c1
1SweetSunsets
aww...that was nice! Please write more chapters! If you could, read and review my story, A dreamers hope.
Thanks!

aww...that was nice! Please write more chapters! If you could, read and review my story, A dreamers hope.
Thanks!