for Moose of the Suskahwa Valley9/23/2009 c1 
6Kalista Jia
I am speechless before this story.
It is so original and scary! I absolutely love it! So beautifully written and the description is really good. I love the creepiness you put in there with the stalking moose. Arg, my mental image is going to give me nightmare!
Moose... I will never look at them the same way afterreading this story. Oh man... now I shall be all eyes when we travel on the countryside highway... you never know when you will spot a creepy standing moose out there!
6Kalista JiaI am speechless before this story.
It is so original and scary! I absolutely love it! So beautifully written and the description is really good. I love the creepiness you put in there with the stalking moose. Arg, my mental image is going to give me nightmare!
Moose... I will never look at them the same way afterreading this story. Oh man... now I shall be all eyes when we travel on the countryside highway... you never know when you will spot a creepy standing moose out there!
4/25/2006 c1 cillian4
It wonderful the way you describe your setting. I can picture the home.
It wonderful the way you describe your setting. I can picture the home.
11/14/2003 c1 16RuathaWehrling
:) Yes, moose can definitely be dangerous, although I admit that I'd never thought they'd be dangerous in THIS kind of a way!
Here are some thoughts as I read:
"Mr. Burns grinned critically. "You're saying you think this deer is spyin' on you?" He tried not to laugh." - Deer? I think you mean moose!
"Trying to ignore the now- obvious and unflinching gaze of the animal, he groped for a change in subject." - Extra space before "obvious".
"There, holding onto the huge golden antlers, was her daughter, riding upon the moose's head." - This is a VERY cool image! I like the way you contrast the girl's fearless impression of the moose with the father's.
"It walked slowly away from him about ten feet, then placed her down on the ground." - The MOOSE placed her on the ground? How? Physically, how, I mean. Please describe!
"She called out to it quietly, mixing up its name as usual." - I like how she mixes up the name. My sisters used to do similar things when they were little. How old is Rebecca, anyways? 3-4?
I really like this story, but the last paragraph is too short an ending to do the story justice. Try expanding it somewhat.
Well, this was a wonderfully well written story. Your grammar and style are both beautiful and the characters you created are realistic. Thanks! :)
16RuathaWehrling:) Yes, moose can definitely be dangerous, although I admit that I'd never thought they'd be dangerous in THIS kind of a way!
Here are some thoughts as I read:
"Mr. Burns grinned critically. "You're saying you think this deer is spyin' on you?" He tried not to laugh." - Deer? I think you mean moose!
"Trying to ignore the now- obvious and unflinching gaze of the animal, he groped for a change in subject." - Extra space before "obvious".
"There, holding onto the huge golden antlers, was her daughter, riding upon the moose's head." - This is a VERY cool image! I like the way you contrast the girl's fearless impression of the moose with the father's.
"It walked slowly away from him about ten feet, then placed her down on the ground." - The MOOSE placed her on the ground? How? Physically, how, I mean. Please describe!
"She called out to it quietly, mixing up its name as usual." - I like how she mixes up the name. My sisters used to do similar things when they were little. How old is Rebecca, anyways? 3-4?
I really like this story, but the last paragraph is too short an ending to do the story justice. Try expanding it somewhat.
Well, this was a wonderfully well written story. Your grammar and style are both beautiful and the characters you created are realistic. Thanks! :)
3/26/2003 c1 Nicola Jones
Oh err...I'll never look at a moose in the same way again!
Oh err...I'll never look at a moose in the same way again!