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26Sylvara
This is cool! I read it on elfwood, but I am very happy to be able to faiv it here. You're quite an interesting writer, namely in fantasy, and I'd love to see you getting published one day...
Best luck and Merry Chrismas/Happy New Year!
26SylvaraThis is cool! I read it on elfwood, but I am very happy to be able to faiv it here. You're quite an interesting writer, namely in fantasy, and I'd love to see you getting published one day...
Best luck and Merry Chrismas/Happy New Year!
8/1/2006 c1 nardia
it's really good! Love it. Keep on writing!
it's really good! Love it. Keep on writing!
1/17/2006 c1 3Varena
I know this story is older and prolly finished, but I really wish that there was more! Awesome job!
3VarenaI know this story is older and prolly finished, but I really wish that there was more! Awesome job!
1/29/2004 c1 KaytalinPlatt
Ow... It's rather sad! I feel very sorry for Kaedyr. He thought he didn't belong and he had nothing left. Well, I liked it any way. ttfn If there is anything you'd like me to read, let me know, k?
Ow... It's rather sad! I feel very sorry for Kaedyr. He thought he didn't belong and he had nothing left. Well, I liked it any way. ttfn If there is anything you'd like me to read, let me know, k?
1/15/2004 c1 76Cobster
Ouch. A very powerful story. Kind of what I'm shooting for with my own series. I liked his contemplations being compared to cold soup.
About Silver Fire-thanks for pointing out the un-clarities of the third chapter. For most of them, I intended to fill in the blanks later. But the tuskorr, for example, was something different. A tuskorr is the elephant-like creature on which Glahck was riding. I implied this, although I suppose I should have made it clearer. Also: 1.) Elves, as in your story, can be evil too. There's a grey area for most of everything, and that's one of the recurring themes througout the story. 2.) The tribes are groups of Men. These groups have allied to make a last stand against Caliscio, and the alliance's main leader is (3.) Marren s'Olor, AKA Marten the Red.
By the way, if the list of confusions, as you say, goes on, then give the complete list to me via email. I'd really appreciate it, and thank you already for the time you've put into reading my story.
Updating this weekend, but don't expect that too long. Further along the line I ran into a dead end, and really had nowhere to go. This is really just a second draft, out of about six drafts that I'll probably get around to doing before I'm done with this thing.
76CobsterOuch. A very powerful story. Kind of what I'm shooting for with my own series. I liked his contemplations being compared to cold soup.
About Silver Fire-thanks for pointing out the un-clarities of the third chapter. For most of them, I intended to fill in the blanks later. But the tuskorr, for example, was something different. A tuskorr is the elephant-like creature on which Glahck was riding. I implied this, although I suppose I should have made it clearer. Also: 1.) Elves, as in your story, can be evil too. There's a grey area for most of everything, and that's one of the recurring themes througout the story. 2.) The tribes are groups of Men. These groups have allied to make a last stand against Caliscio, and the alliance's main leader is (3.) Marren s'Olor, AKA Marten the Red.
By the way, if the list of confusions, as you say, goes on, then give the complete list to me via email. I'd really appreciate it, and thank you already for the time you've put into reading my story.
Updating this weekend, but don't expect that too long. Further along the line I ran into a dead end, and really had nowhere to go. This is really just a second draft, out of about six drafts that I'll probably get around to doing before I'm done with this thing.
1/15/2004 c1 10Luminarie
Not only is this an incredible story but it also reflects life. Try being a highschool outcast, part of your own group in what I like to think of as a pit of vipers. I can really relate to the way Kaedyr feels.
10LuminarieNot only is this an incredible story but it also reflects life. Try being a highschool outcast, part of your own group in what I like to think of as a pit of vipers. I can really relate to the way Kaedyr feels.
3/19/2003 c1 9Katherine Daystar
Hi guys! I'm really flattered that you find this story interesting enough to be worthy of continuation, but I'm afraid this is it. I wrote this as a short story assignment for school last year, and thus the extreme brevity and vagueness. Afterwards I wanted to elaborate more on the themes in this short story and depict the characters 'more fairly' as Ruatha pointed out. If you are interested in this story, and do not mind that I changed some names around, read my main, "Identity Crisis". It provides what I hope is a more well-balanced view of elven, half elven, and several other societies. I'll be sure to R&R your stories and those of anyone else who reviews here later. Thanks! ^_^
9Katherine DaystarHi guys! I'm really flattered that you find this story interesting enough to be worthy of continuation, but I'm afraid this is it. I wrote this as a short story assignment for school last year, and thus the extreme brevity and vagueness. Afterwards I wanted to elaborate more on the themes in this short story and depict the characters 'more fairly' as Ruatha pointed out. If you are interested in this story, and do not mind that I changed some names around, read my main, "Identity Crisis". It provides what I hope is a more well-balanced view of elven, half elven, and several other societies. I'll be sure to R&R your stories and those of anyone else who reviews here later. Thanks! ^_^
3/19/2003 c1 16RuathaWehrling
It's intriguing, but it's too short for a short story. If you intend it to be a novel/novelette, you're on the right track. But if it's truly the short story you proclaim it to be, then you need to lengthen it. One event doesn't fairly show the beliefs of an entire nation or people.
16RuathaWehrlingIt's intriguing, but it's too short for a short story. If you intend it to be a novel/novelette, you're on the right track. But if it's truly the short story you proclaim it to be, then you need to lengthen it. One event doesn't fairly show the beliefs of an entire nation or people.
3/19/2003 c1 Nicola Jones
Aw!
Great start! Keep going cos I want to know what happens next!
Aw!
Great start! Keep going cos I want to know what happens next!