for Silence3/22/2003 c1 GoodbyeDeleteThisPage
Ah, I guess I'll submit a review to your poem now. This is one of your better poems I think. And I agree with the previous reviewer moonstruck that you should add a bit of repetion at the end, I think it would bring your meaning more together. Good, though.
-Oriana Amadis
Ah, I guess I'll submit a review to your poem now. This is one of your better poems I think. And I agree with the previous reviewer moonstruck that you should add a bit of repetion at the end, I think it would bring your meaning more together. Good, though.
-Oriana Amadis
3/21/2003 c1 
33Moonstruck1
ok, i really enjoyed reading it. I have a suggestion that may mean nothing to you but i figure i might as well share my thought... At the end, I think it would have a bigger effect if you just repeated 'Driven me insane' like 2 more times and deleted the last sentence:
The silence has driven me insane
Driven me insane...
Driven me insane...
I liked it though and i liked that you didn't repeat crazy.
~jackie
33Moonstruck1ok, i really enjoyed reading it. I have a suggestion that may mean nothing to you but i figure i might as well share my thought... At the end, I think it would have a bigger effect if you just repeated 'Driven me insane' like 2 more times and deleted the last sentence:
The silence has driven me insane
Driven me insane...
Driven me insane...
I liked it though and i liked that you didn't repeat crazy.
~jackie
3/21/2003 c1 11midnight dreams
silence is a either something wonderful or something so frightening. you placed beautiful words in this. good job. read mine please? thanks.
11midnight dreamssilence is a either something wonderful or something so frightening. you placed beautiful words in this. good job. read mine please? thanks.
3/20/2003 c1 9carterxoxo
better than usual. mildly amused, no not amused surpised at the insight wich you have shown. very good until the last line where you said "stuck" not so great. mabey try to reword that. then very good indeed
9carterxoxobetter than usual. mildly amused, no not amused surpised at the insight wich you have shown. very good until the last line where you said "stuck" not so great. mabey try to reword that. then very good indeed