for Loki12/1/2003 c10 Belle the Shadow-cat
YES! Yes you updated. *does a happy dance*
*glares* That guy's Loki isn't it? He may be a cute . . . sexy . . . guy now but . . . HE'S PSYCHO! YEah . . .nuts, powerhungry . . . jerk! Okay . . .anyway . . .
My shoulders dropped and I felt weariness catching up with me. “Just answer the damn question, would you?” I was sore, tired, and most certainly not of the disposition for verbal battle.
He lifted a finger, as if to admonish me, “Tsk, tsk. Careful, patience is a virtue for a reason.”
LOL! When i read that line, i thought back to a quote from "The Mummy" if you've seen it. And it kinda fits Zelle's attitude right now:
If you havn't seen it The main female character EEvee says "Patience is a virtue!" Then comes the resounded reply that fits this:
"Not now it isn't!" LOL.
Anyway, wonderful description, and i'm so glad your back. Good luck on Loki! And sorry my reviews short. I have tons of other people to review.
YES! Yes you updated. *does a happy dance*
*glares* That guy's Loki isn't it? He may be a cute . . . sexy . . . guy now but . . . HE'S PSYCHO! YEah . . .nuts, powerhungry . . . jerk! Okay . . .anyway . . .
My shoulders dropped and I felt weariness catching up with me. “Just answer the damn question, would you?” I was sore, tired, and most certainly not of the disposition for verbal battle.
He lifted a finger, as if to admonish me, “Tsk, tsk. Careful, patience is a virtue for a reason.”
LOL! When i read that line, i thought back to a quote from "The Mummy" if you've seen it. And it kinda fits Zelle's attitude right now:
If you havn't seen it The main female character EEvee says "Patience is a virtue!" Then comes the resounded reply that fits this:
"Not now it isn't!" LOL.
Anyway, wonderful description, and i'm so glad your back. Good luck on Loki! And sorry my reviews short. I have tons of other people to review.
11/30/2003 c10 Alaurei
xD I'm so happy! Hehehe, I'm like, super hyper/high now just from reading your story. *hugs pillow* Yay, you updated too! How awesome. Oh! Beleive me, no pressure to read my stories. I hardly have the time to work pn them. xP so much school work and stuff though I have anytime of day to read your stories.^_^;; yay! I just love your stories. They're so, intriguing. It's amazing how you twist and turn the words around to confuse me yet I understand what is going on...Very cool! :D I love that kind of feeling. O! Loki! Yay, he is finally back. And you know what, this chapter made me really think. Is Loki the hot young guy I picture him to be, or is he this old slob who can preform magic? I have no idea...anyway, he's got his own world! That's so cool. (sorry if I'm repepating myself,I'm trying to remember the details from some of the other chapters. :P)
Wow,I can't wait for the next chapter now...maybe I shouldn't have read that so fast. And now, she's in this spooky place with doors...I've had dreams like that before, they're creepy man! And you know what, it reminds me of the part inthe second Matrix movie with all of he doors. Cool! x.X I'm so weird right now, sorry. hehehe.
Well, I must be off to shower but I will be thinking about this chapter for a while. It lingers in my head! A good attribute for stories! Well, farewell!
-Nickel City
"To infinity, and beyond!"
xD I'm so happy! Hehehe, I'm like, super hyper/high now just from reading your story. *hugs pillow* Yay, you updated too! How awesome. Oh! Beleive me, no pressure to read my stories. I hardly have the time to work pn them. xP so much school work and stuff though I have anytime of day to read your stories.^_^;; yay! I just love your stories. They're so, intriguing. It's amazing how you twist and turn the words around to confuse me yet I understand what is going on...Very cool! :D I love that kind of feeling. O! Loki! Yay, he is finally back. And you know what, this chapter made me really think. Is Loki the hot young guy I picture him to be, or is he this old slob who can preform magic? I have no idea...anyway, he's got his own world! That's so cool. (sorry if I'm repepating myself,I'm trying to remember the details from some of the other chapters. :P)
Wow,I can't wait for the next chapter now...maybe I shouldn't have read that so fast. And now, she's in this spooky place with doors...I've had dreams like that before, they're creepy man! And you know what, it reminds me of the part inthe second Matrix movie with all of he doors. Cool! x.X I'm so weird right now, sorry. hehehe.
Well, I must be off to shower but I will be thinking about this chapter for a while. It lingers in my head! A good attribute for stories! Well, farewell!
-Nickel City
"To infinity, and beyond!"
11/30/2003 c10 LittleWolf
*Squeals* you updated!
Well that was well worth the wait i think. Loki is great teasing Zelle, though i think he's become his own worst enemy. All he does is make dearest Zelle more determined to go home... Mind you if i was her i'd reside myself to the fact there's a rather handsome tricker god after me... Hehe.
Anyways well done and i can't wait for the next chapter.
Em x Aka Littlewolf.
P.S. Keep your eyes open for the next chapter of 'For the love of a Wolf' it will be appearing soon, complete with sexy fictional men...*grins*
*Squeals* you updated!
Well that was well worth the wait i think. Loki is great teasing Zelle, though i think he's become his own worst enemy. All he does is make dearest Zelle more determined to go home... Mind you if i was her i'd reside myself to the fact there's a rather handsome tricker god after me... Hehe.
Anyways well done and i can't wait for the next chapter.
Em x Aka Littlewolf.
P.S. Keep your eyes open for the next chapter of 'For the love of a Wolf' it will be appearing soon, complete with sexy fictional men...*grins*
11/27/2003 c10 
8Kezkay
*twilight zone theme song, played whilst eating chocolate so it comes out all yucky*
"The silence was making me twitchy..." Too late. hehe, lovely atmosphere catcher thingamajigger.
"I snorted. 'I see rock. Lots and lots of—'" o! I love the description of the golden thread, especially,
"...my finger came up tentatively—almost afraid to scare it away" It makes it seem surreal, delicate, graceful... though the scene is slightly reminiscent of "Hypercube II" where the idiot male touches the 3D forming cube and it goes rabid and chomps him up... er, yeah.
"I was reminded of a snail oozing lazy patterns on red brick back home at high noon. " he! Nice choice of imagery!
HA! Didn't think Loki would outright lie! pft! (in the words of yours truly) I doubt that! "With a soft rustle of silk, he had crossed the distance between us and latched onto my arm. I hardly formulated the thought of protest when the earth dissolved beneath my feet…and we were floating in black nothingness. Falling, but not quite." hehe, funny. Hm, you have a couple of half sentences here...ex, "Standing in the middle of a room without windows," "Weaving in and around my mind in transparent threads and making me infinitely aware of every breath." I'm pretty sure these can be fixed with a coupla of semi-colons and whatnot.
oo! A little argument there between Zelle and Loki, mua ha ha! I can just -see- the lightning zapping each other, BAMMO!
"There was a deadly quiet." heheh...
"A primal electricity shivered through—in between the molecules of oxygen and shuddering all down my body like an electric shock, but warmer. Smelling of smoke and fire grates in winter and feeling like the moment just before the fall." I love it! So many sensations without the tricky sandtrap of words! bah! i hate you.
"And then I thought, with a furious solemnity: I’m going to kill him." *hoots!* I would have gotten past that little part, and would have been thinking in what painful, slow ways I was going to kill him...but that's just me... *takes a big bite of chocolate*
I am confoozled. This is good. This is deep. It suddenly got much deeper. Loki changed, him bad now, but much fun. Much fun. I so happy, I have returned to 2nd grade grammar. I want you to write more, but sooner, in less time than before. So much to think about. I talk to you later. -Kez
8Kezkay*twilight zone theme song, played whilst eating chocolate so it comes out all yucky*
"The silence was making me twitchy..." Too late. hehe, lovely atmosphere catcher thingamajigger.
"I snorted. 'I see rock. Lots and lots of—'" o! I love the description of the golden thread, especially,
"...my finger came up tentatively—almost afraid to scare it away" It makes it seem surreal, delicate, graceful... though the scene is slightly reminiscent of "Hypercube II" where the idiot male touches the 3D forming cube and it goes rabid and chomps him up... er, yeah.
"I was reminded of a snail oozing lazy patterns on red brick back home at high noon. " he! Nice choice of imagery!
HA! Didn't think Loki would outright lie! pft! (in the words of yours truly) I doubt that! "With a soft rustle of silk, he had crossed the distance between us and latched onto my arm. I hardly formulated the thought of protest when the earth dissolved beneath my feet…and we were floating in black nothingness. Falling, but not quite." hehe, funny. Hm, you have a couple of half sentences here...ex, "Standing in the middle of a room without windows," "Weaving in and around my mind in transparent threads and making me infinitely aware of every breath." I'm pretty sure these can be fixed with a coupla of semi-colons and whatnot.
oo! A little argument there between Zelle and Loki, mua ha ha! I can just -see- the lightning zapping each other, BAMMO!
"There was a deadly quiet." heheh...
"A primal electricity shivered through—in between the molecules of oxygen and shuddering all down my body like an electric shock, but warmer. Smelling of smoke and fire grates in winter and feeling like the moment just before the fall." I love it! So many sensations without the tricky sandtrap of words! bah! i hate you.
"And then I thought, with a furious solemnity: I’m going to kill him." *hoots!* I would have gotten past that little part, and would have been thinking in what painful, slow ways I was going to kill him...but that's just me... *takes a big bite of chocolate*
I am confoozled. This is good. This is deep. It suddenly got much deeper. Loki changed, him bad now, but much fun. Much fun. I so happy, I have returned to 2nd grade grammar. I want you to write more, but sooner, in less time than before. So much to think about. I talk to you later. -Kez
10/11/2003 c1 12Naamela
Kezkay told me to read this, and I'm glad she did.
I especially like the introduction, and how it shows that the scene looks normal and boring, but has something deeper beneath it. (Now wasn't *that* all English-class-ish for ya? ^-^)
Ah, Stella the star. I think maybe her name should be changed, not that it's important or anything, but it just seems a bit too, eh, blatant? No, that's not the word. *frantically searches for a thesaurus* Pht. Never mind! It doesn't matter anyway.
And Zelle is wondering if she's having a nervous breakdown as she's plummeting from the tree? Interesting...I wouldn't be paying attention to random laughter if I were her...I'd be too busy screaming my li'l heart out. But that's just me. :)
Very, very cool ending. I'll be back (read that bit in an Arnold-accent) to read more! Ciao!
-Skosh
12NaamelaKezkay told me to read this, and I'm glad she did.
I especially like the introduction, and how it shows that the scene looks normal and boring, but has something deeper beneath it. (Now wasn't *that* all English-class-ish for ya? ^-^)
Ah, Stella the star. I think maybe her name should be changed, not that it's important or anything, but it just seems a bit too, eh, blatant? No, that's not the word. *frantically searches for a thesaurus* Pht. Never mind! It doesn't matter anyway.
And Zelle is wondering if she's having a nervous breakdown as she's plummeting from the tree? Interesting...I wouldn't be paying attention to random laughter if I were her...I'd be too busy screaming my li'l heart out. But that's just me. :)
Very, very cool ending. I'll be back (read that bit in an Arnold-accent) to read more! Ciao!
-Skosh
10/1/2003 c9 misstress of loki
this is good! more and more! I really like it a lot! I love loki! Please be hurry with the next chappie!
this is good! more and more! I really like it a lot! I love loki! Please be hurry with the next chappie!
8/9/2003 c9 DigiDayDreamer
Hey, glad to hear you enjoying my funniest story, Zelle. Oh, right. The review thing.
Well, Zelle the character seems to be in a tight spot, being forced to move on with what little information she knows about Sigyn, Skodde and Loki.
Yeah, I'm worried about Sigurd too. Wonder if Loki knew about this before Zelle came into this world. He seems to be responsible for everything that happened to her.
Once again, you showed the goodness of your story in such fine writing. Somehow, I like Skodde's reactions, makes you think that no man alive ever looked at her without fear. ^_^
Sigh, I must cut this review short so I can get on with my stories (I neglected them for too long) but at least your story is fine, very fine indeed. Hope you keep it up!
Spell ya later!
Hey, glad to hear you enjoying my funniest story, Zelle. Oh, right. The review thing.
Well, Zelle the character seems to be in a tight spot, being forced to move on with what little information she knows about Sigyn, Skodde and Loki.
Yeah, I'm worried about Sigurd too. Wonder if Loki knew about this before Zelle came into this world. He seems to be responsible for everything that happened to her.
Once again, you showed the goodness of your story in such fine writing. Somehow, I like Skodde's reactions, makes you think that no man alive ever looked at her without fear. ^_^
Sigh, I must cut this review short so I can get on with my stories (I neglected them for too long) but at least your story is fine, very fine indeed. Hope you keep it up!
Spell ya later!
8/5/2003 c9 kez
bah! Did I really say that? I've conveniently forgotten...harrumph. Anyway, I update tomorrow, whe~! Now, enough about me, let's talk about you..."A stray pond reed slapped against my nose—effectively snapping me out of my errant daydreaming. Not that I was dreaming about him…or anything" Ah, got to love that self denial...hehe. Well, since you didn't want me to review (or read for that matter) your first chapter 9, I can't really tell you how it compared to this chocolate&mint-dipped fondue strawberry piece of literary artwork... so- I loved it! I guess it was basically one of those "revelation-OMG-so-that's-what's-going-on!" chapters huh? I like the new facets of Skodde you're showing off...almost kind of badass-humorous, yet also a friend. I have to say, I'd like to see a little more of Loki (just to laugh at Zelle's reactions)! She's got Loki on the brain... isn't obsession a sign of the dreaded emotional curse of mushy-gushy *whispers*... my thoat tightens at the thought *laughs*! Sorry it took so long for me to review this chapter, I've been busy for so long! bah, I'll have a little more free time until Saturday, when I go to the Outerbanks NC for two weeks...without a computer! *dies* -Kez
bah! Did I really say that? I've conveniently forgotten...harrumph. Anyway, I update tomorrow, whe~! Now, enough about me, let's talk about you..."A stray pond reed slapped against my nose—effectively snapping me out of my errant daydreaming. Not that I was dreaming about him…or anything" Ah, got to love that self denial...hehe. Well, since you didn't want me to review (or read for that matter) your first chapter 9, I can't really tell you how it compared to this chocolate&mint-dipped fondue strawberry piece of literary artwork... so- I loved it! I guess it was basically one of those "revelation-OMG-so-that's-what's-going-on!" chapters huh? I like the new facets of Skodde you're showing off...almost kind of badass-humorous, yet also a friend. I have to say, I'd like to see a little more of Loki (just to laugh at Zelle's reactions)! She's got Loki on the brain... isn't obsession a sign of the dreaded emotional curse of mushy-gushy *whispers*... my thoat tightens at the thought *laughs*! Sorry it took so long for me to review this chapter, I've been busy for so long! bah, I'll have a little more free time until Saturday, when I go to the Outerbanks NC for two weeks...without a computer! *dies* -Kez
8/2/2003 c9 LittleWolf
hey me again! Once again i am left speechless by you amazing skill, i adore this story.
Things are beginning to fall into place.
This is great!
Yes you did review some of my stories, though it was only a chapter each i think *Shrugs* i'll have to check to be sure but i definitely know you have reviewed.
Anyways great job on the chapter, i can't wait for more.
Emma aka Littlewolf.
hey me again! Once again i am left speechless by you amazing skill, i adore this story.
Things are beginning to fall into place.
This is great!
Yes you did review some of my stories, though it was only a chapter each i think *Shrugs* i'll have to check to be sure but i definitely know you have reviewed.
Anyways great job on the chapter, i can't wait for more.
Emma aka Littlewolf.
8/1/2003 c9 kjcats88hotmail.com
Nice chapter. This was a good development chapter in a way, and Skode's little info about the memory thing and Zelle's realization was very infomative. ANd i thought the part about the "School Teacher Glare" was very funny and i could only imagine what it was like. And thanks for answering the memory question, and i'll try to update A.S.A.P.
But i'm currently working on another story, I have the "beggining" posted. ANd if you'd like to sign up i'd be honored. You'll see what i mean if you check the "story" out.
-Belle the Shadow-cat
Nice chapter. This was a good development chapter in a way, and Skode's little info about the memory thing and Zelle's realization was very infomative. ANd i thought the part about the "School Teacher Glare" was very funny and i could only imagine what it was like. And thanks for answering the memory question, and i'll try to update A.S.A.P.
But i'm currently working on another story, I have the "beggining" posted. ANd if you'd like to sign up i'd be honored. You'll see what i mean if you check the "story" out.
-Belle the Shadow-cat
8/1/2003 c9 Alaurei
Ack, eyes hurt so much from reading. Must go sleep. No, wait, must find out what happens. Loki is so hot, must read more...
Ha! I'm already in love with one of your characters and we've hardly seen him yet through this story. (though he is, or so it seems, everywhere the story is. I guess his pressence almost...am I alone in this thinking? *shrug*) So this was pretty cool. ^_^ Write more Loki! hehe.
I'm to lazy to critique right now because I'm not some mad reader who re-reads your chapters over and over untl I at leat find one mistake. Golly, (hardly ever say that) I'm glad I'm not like that. It's not like other people are I'm just saying, yeah.
I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH! *wink* You must publish. I know I haven't read all of it yet but still, please oh please promise me you'll publish this. If not, I'll go on a rampage with a bunch of friends here on fp until you do. *cheeks puff up* Promise? PROMISE ME!
Sorry, that is how I feel so please just promise me oki doki? ^_^ I love your story so much and I would be curious to see an illustrater draw a cover, or even several scenes for you book. It would be amazing with so much detail that you supply, no person could falter on what the charater looks like exactly. (yes, you're that good! Self-Esteam bulders! Whahaahha) So just promise me.
thanks! ttyl.
~Nickel City
ps. thanks for the review! Glady appreciated.
"To infinity, and beyond!"
Ack, eyes hurt so much from reading. Must go sleep. No, wait, must find out what happens. Loki is so hot, must read more...
Ha! I'm already in love with one of your characters and we've hardly seen him yet through this story. (though he is, or so it seems, everywhere the story is. I guess his pressence almost...am I alone in this thinking? *shrug*) So this was pretty cool. ^_^ Write more Loki! hehe.
I'm to lazy to critique right now because I'm not some mad reader who re-reads your chapters over and over untl I at leat find one mistake. Golly, (hardly ever say that) I'm glad I'm not like that. It's not like other people are I'm just saying, yeah.
I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH! *wink* You must publish. I know I haven't read all of it yet but still, please oh please promise me you'll publish this. If not, I'll go on a rampage with a bunch of friends here on fp until you do. *cheeks puff up* Promise? PROMISE ME!
Sorry, that is how I feel so please just promise me oki doki? ^_^ I love your story so much and I would be curious to see an illustrater draw a cover, or even several scenes for you book. It would be amazing with so much detail that you supply, no person could falter on what the charater looks like exactly. (yes, you're that good! Self-Esteam bulders! Whahaahha) So just promise me.
thanks! ttyl.
~Nickel City
ps. thanks for the review! Glady appreciated.
"To infinity, and beyond!"
8/1/2003 c3 5Naja Copperleaf
Ignore the question in the last review, I somehow managed to read Chapter Two before Chapter One. ;) Fantastic story!
5Naja CopperleafIgnore the question in the last review, I somehow managed to read Chapter Two before Chapter One. ;) Fantastic story!
8/1/2003 c2 Naja Copperleaf
Very vivid description. Everything seems wonderful so far, but I would think she would be more worried about Janie being left alone in her house. Well, nothing she can do about it anyway, I suppose. Great work!
Very vivid description. Everything seems wonderful so far, but I would think she would be more worried about Janie being left alone in her house. Well, nothing she can do about it anyway, I suppose. Great work!
8/1/2003 c9 Fate Thirteen
So, I reviewed this before, apparently *confused*... Oh well. Stranger things have happened.
You have literally only just put this up, it came zooming into my inbox and my messenger dude went 'BANG you have a message' and it was Lovely Loki...
It looks fab, my darling, and I'm very glad I could help out - it was a pleasure.
*Grins happily* More Loki. Yes! Loki and his awesome sexiness has been missing from the most recent chapters, so can't wait to see him again.
And, by the way, I think you'll find that Pirates of the Caribbean poster is actually mine *bitch fight ensues*. Oh, Johnny AND Orlando all in one film - I'm so spoilt!
So, I reviewed this before, apparently *confused*... Oh well. Stranger things have happened.
You have literally only just put this up, it came zooming into my inbox and my messenger dude went 'BANG you have a message' and it was Lovely Loki...
It looks fab, my darling, and I'm very glad I could help out - it was a pleasure.
*Grins happily* More Loki. Yes! Loki and his awesome sexiness has been missing from the most recent chapters, so can't wait to see him again.
And, by the way, I think you'll find that Pirates of the Caribbean poster is actually mine *bitch fight ensues*. Oh, Johnny AND Orlando all in one film - I'm so spoilt!
8/1/2003 c3 Alaurei
Whahahah! I finished another chapter. *evil grin* I am invinsible! Muwahahaha.
Emberlye: *COUGH (really loud)*
NC: *swiftly turns and glares at her muse*
NC: Shut up, I'm reviewing here, dumb brain...
Now, I LOVED this chapter. I liked the raven/human the most. I'm a huge fan of crows as it is but this just reinforced it. Thanks! ^^ I doubt you even knew me when you wrote this chapter though. Anyhoo, I didn't just love it for that reason. I loved all of it.
A tree with no roots? How absurd. Oh, may I say something? Yeah, I guess I will. Didn't she already dream about this place? From chapter one? The castle, the huge eagle in the odd tree surrounded by forest? It just is all to familiar for some reason. Sorry for my blabbling, you've done a great job to keep the story running through the reader's head.
Now, for the part all authors hate..heh heh heh, CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISIM!
#1.I found that the ground beneath my feet was gravelly with an abundance of pebbles that {slipped} and slided and shone with a myriad of colors—each one impossibly perfect. {Slipping} my gaze from the ground, it glided up the dizzying tall trunk of the tall tree I had been leaning on.
Okay, for this one, the words in the cool wavy things just sounded a little repetative. Maybe you should use another word. From reading the rest of your story, you're already a master at that. ^_^
Well, I think that was actually it. Wonderful! That is great news for a first time story! Only ONE recomendation. I have about...four or five but that is okay! I'm cool. *grin*
Ember: Yeah, Right!
NC: Gr
Ember: *loud growl*
NC: You suck stupid dragon. Now, onto the rest of the review.
I loved it and I'm going to go read chapter two. I bet people have already mentioned this to you but, your chapters are well, kinda out of order so if you get hte chance, I would fix that. It just makes it so much easier for the reader. But how you labeled them, I was able to find it so no biggy. ~_^
ttyl and great story! *wink*
-Nickel City
"To infinity, and beyond!"
Whahahah! I finished another chapter. *evil grin* I am invinsible! Muwahahaha.
Emberlye: *COUGH (really loud)*
NC: *swiftly turns and glares at her muse*
NC: Shut up, I'm reviewing here, dumb brain...
Now, I LOVED this chapter. I liked the raven/human the most. I'm a huge fan of crows as it is but this just reinforced it. Thanks! ^^ I doubt you even knew me when you wrote this chapter though. Anyhoo, I didn't just love it for that reason. I loved all of it.
A tree with no roots? How absurd. Oh, may I say something? Yeah, I guess I will. Didn't she already dream about this place? From chapter one? The castle, the huge eagle in the odd tree surrounded by forest? It just is all to familiar for some reason. Sorry for my blabbling, you've done a great job to keep the story running through the reader's head.
Now, for the part all authors hate..heh heh heh, CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISIM!
#1.I found that the ground beneath my feet was gravelly with an abundance of pebbles that {slipped} and slided and shone with a myriad of colors—each one impossibly perfect. {Slipping} my gaze from the ground, it glided up the dizzying tall trunk of the tall tree I had been leaning on.
Okay, for this one, the words in the cool wavy things just sounded a little repetative. Maybe you should use another word. From reading the rest of your story, you're already a master at that. ^_^
Well, I think that was actually it. Wonderful! That is great news for a first time story! Only ONE recomendation. I have about...four or five but that is okay! I'm cool. *grin*
Ember: Yeah, Right!
NC: Gr
Ember: *loud growl*
NC: You suck stupid dragon. Now, onto the rest of the review.
I loved it and I'm going to go read chapter two. I bet people have already mentioned this to you but, your chapters are well, kinda out of order so if you get hte chance, I would fix that. It just makes it so much easier for the reader. But how you labeled them, I was able to find it so no biggy. ~_^
ttyl and great story! *wink*
-Nickel City
"To infinity, and beyond!"