3/26/2003 c1 12Carmen Noriko
OOh! Fun. You're doing a pretty good job. Just a suggestions: make that last paragraph more paragraphs so that it's easier to read. That's really about it. I suggest continuing this no matter what happens in your life, because it has the makings of a good story. A very good plot. :)

And you used "Aileen"! She's gonna be happy. :)