for No Other One8/1/2003 c21 
15losingthebattle
cute, but we need action! how about a trip?have them go on a road trip or something. also, ryan needs to get better soon because i think its kind of dragging the story a little
great chappie! UpDaTe SooN!
15losingthebattlecute, but we need action! how about a trip?have them go on a road trip or something. also, ryan needs to get better soon because i think its kind of dragging the story a little
great chappie! UpDaTe SooN!
8/1/2003 c21 Frodo
Lol, trip the kids with crutches... that's a must. Nice work. I'm hoping for another update soon. I'm glad to see Ryan's getting over this well. He's gone through so much...
-Frodo
Lol, trip the kids with crutches... that's a must. Nice work. I'm hoping for another update soon. I'm glad to see Ryan's getting over this well. He's gone through so much...
-Frodo
8/1/2003 c21 xdemolitionxloversx
Hey! For ch21, you could make the title 'How's Kristen?' Just an idea..anyways, I like this story^_^update...
Hey! For ch21, you could make the title 'How's Kristen?' Just an idea..anyways, I like this story^_^update...
7/29/2003 c20 MzB1tch04
i love your story! its one of my fav stories on fictionpress.com and i come on here daily to see if you have updated it... and not to sound mean, but, u haven't and you had to leave it @ a good part! -lol- please post any new chap.'s if you have written them already because i love your story and i want to know what's going to happen between Ryan and Paige and the Danny ordeal.
i love your story! its one of my fav stories on fictionpress.com and i come on here daily to see if you have updated it... and not to sound mean, but, u haven't and you had to leave it @ a good part! -lol- please post any new chap.'s if you have written them already because i love your story and i want to know what's going to happen between Ryan and Paige and the Danny ordeal.
7/25/2003 c20 me
Please update asap!
Please update asap!
7/25/2003 c1 7SaintEm0
I absolutely love this story! please e-mail me at:
I'd like to ask you a few questions..
C U ON Da FLIP SIDE
Punkette
p.s college rocks!
7SaintEm0I absolutely love this story! please e-mail me at:
I'd like to ask you a few questions..
C U ON Da FLIP SIDE
Punkette
p.s college rocks!
7/20/2003 c20 EA5239
Your story's good...hope u keep on updating. I like all those twisty plots and it's kinda angsty..i guess..I just hope Ryan will focus on what's going on with his life rather that spending too much time lusting on Paige...but, at least you kept him alive. Keep it up!
Your story's good...hope u keep on updating. I like all those twisty plots and it's kinda angsty..i guess..I just hope Ryan will focus on what's going on with his life rather that spending too much time lusting on Paige...but, at least you kept him alive. Keep it up!
7/13/2003 c20 Frodo
Yay! Ryan survived. That would have truely been terrible if he hadn't made it. You made the right choice. Of course Ryan can't be better in like the next day, so you'll have to write about his recovery. It'll take time, as you have described his injuries as being really bad. You may want to check over your grammer before you post though. There are a lot of simple mistakes that you have. Nice work.
-Frodo
Yay! Ryan survived. That would have truely been terrible if he hadn't made it. You made the right choice. Of course Ryan can't be better in like the next day, so you'll have to write about his recovery. It'll take time, as you have described his injuries as being really bad. You may want to check over your grammer before you post though. There are a lot of simple mistakes that you have. Nice work.
-Frodo
7/13/2003 c8 Frodo
This sounds like it is unraveling into a really interesting story. I think more description would make this story really good. You have emotions in there, but you never describe the people's appearances or very rarely the surroundings. I do like the plot line, and I'll be reading more soon.
-Frodo
This sounds like it is unraveling into a really interesting story. I think more description would make this story really good. You have emotions in there, but you never describe the people's appearances or very rarely the surroundings. I do like the plot line, and I'll be reading more soon.
-Frodo
7/12/2003 c1 Frodo
Well, the summary made me first think "oh no.. Avril Lavigne", but I have a feeling that this story has respect. It sounds intresting. I'm kind of confused on how quickly Ryan (this guy who is shy and all) would become so comforting with Paige. It think it may have been to quick, but that's my opinion. I'm reading on.
-Frodo
Well, the summary made me first think "oh no.. Avril Lavigne", but I have a feeling that this story has respect. It sounds intresting. I'm kind of confused on how quickly Ryan (this guy who is shy and all) would become so comforting with Paige. It think it may have been to quick, but that's my opinion. I'm reading on.
-Frodo
7/10/2003 c20 12Little Mermaid
o so danny's still in the game. hm...interesting. so what's gonna happen next?
update asap
12Little Mermaido so danny's still in the game. hm...interesting. so what's gonna happen next?
update asap
7/2/2003 c19 12Little Mermaid
let him live! let him live! i love this story so much. he just cant die; he cant.
update asap
12Little Mermaidlet him live! let him live! i love this story so much. he just cant die; he cant.
update asap
7/2/2003 c20 Becca
All right at first I read the first chapter and wasn't impressed but I came back to give it another shot and it was a lot better. Not to be mean or rude but the beginning kind of sucked, it really developed quickly however. I love your characterization, it's really good. The plot twists are you know right there, great job on those. I can't wait for more.
All right at first I read the first chapter and wasn't impressed but I came back to give it another shot and it was a lot better. Not to be mean or rude but the beginning kind of sucked, it really developed quickly however. I love your characterization, it's really good. The plot twists are you know right there, great job on those. I can't wait for more.