for Bloodplay10/26/2006 c1 
42Hannah is a Palindrome
Whoa.
This is intense :].
I like it very much. Nice rhyme without overdoing it. Well done.
42Hannah is a PalindromeWhoa.
This is intense :].
I like it very much. Nice rhyme without overdoing it. Well done.
8/30/2006 c1 18tree plebian
wow. You make the blood seem almost seductive - the repition of "shiny" is what did it for me. And I love "ruby rain"
18tree plebianwow. You make the blood seem almost seductive - the repition of "shiny" is what did it for me. And I love "ruby rain"
4/1/2006 c1 26braindead1345
I like it, kind remidesme of braindamage"Paper holds there folded faces to the floor and every day the paper boy brings more
26braindead1345I like it, kind remidesme of braindamage"Paper holds there folded faces to the floor and every day the paper boy brings more
6/14/2004 c1 5Nonki
clear images/scenarios appearing in my head as each line enters my mind...
good writing...
keep it up!
5Nonkiclear images/scenarios appearing in my head as each line enters my mind...
good writing...
keep it up!
11/17/2003 c1 236mezzie
enticing combination of bloody unpleasantness with an almost childlike joy of play.
236mezzieenticing combination of bloody unpleasantness with an almost childlike joy of play.
6/2/2003 c1 34Xibalba
Wow ... I dunno why, but this is so disturbing that I love it! ^^ I like it when things come out of nowhere, like the lions ... this was cool. Thanks for the review - I had to write it for homework, and my teacher loves end rhymes, so I sort of had to. Heheheh. Wonderful job here!
34XibalbaWow ... I dunno why, but this is so disturbing that I love it! ^^ I like it when things come out of nowhere, like the lions ... this was cool. Thanks for the review - I had to write it for homework, and my teacher loves end rhymes, so I sort of had to. Heheheh. Wonderful job here!
5/31/2003 c1 23Quilir
Paper boat! Though i wouldn't want to sail it on that...
^_^
Very, um bloody poem, I like the way you added all the scientific relation words with blood, very kewl!
Keep writing
23QuilirPaper boat! Though i wouldn't want to sail it on that...
^_^
Very, um bloody poem, I like the way you added all the scientific relation words with blood, very kewl!
Keep writing
5/20/2003 c1 1aleppine
Second poem of yours I've read, and also of blood, lol. Ah well, tis all good ... I like some of the language you've used in this - 'Would you like to sail a paper boat?' HELL YES! And 'Create some ruby rain.' Simple yet oh so effective. Gorgeous.
1aleppineSecond poem of yours I've read, and also of blood, lol. Ah well, tis all good ... I like some of the language you've used in this - 'Would you like to sail a paper boat?' HELL YES! And 'Create some ruby rain.' Simple yet oh so effective. Gorgeous.
5/13/2003 c1 2shards of beauty
i will admit this is twisted...but i enjoyed it immensely(hahaha)...another of your brilliant poems.the comparison of SI and playing is a good one, wish i could've thought of that! lol...very good
2shards of beautyi will admit this is twisted...but i enjoyed it immensely(hahaha)...another of your brilliant poems.the comparison of SI and playing is a good one, wish i could've thought of that! lol...very good
4/10/2003 c1 38Shadafakup
Oh yeah.. I loved that.. Very nice.. The imagery and all.. Its 'cute'.. Forgive me for bein morbid but I like dark poems and yours is great..
38ShadafakupOh yeah.. I loved that.. Very nice.. The imagery and all.. Its 'cute'.. Forgive me for bein morbid but I like dark poems and yours is great..
4/8/2003 c1 127godawful teen-angst poetry
slightly disturbing, but good...I like the flow, how you go from a scene that seemed to me like self mutilation (hey, you said it was open to interprettation!), but by the end it almost seemed like...I don't know...a nursery rhyme. *shiver* Very good.
~Beth
127godawful teen-angst poetryslightly disturbing, but good...I like the flow, how you go from a scene that seemed to me like self mutilation (hey, you said it was open to interprettation!), but by the end it almost seemed like...I don't know...a nursery rhyme. *shiver* Very good.
~Beth