6/22/2005 c18 1Empyrea
i swear its the sign of the apocalypse or something. You updated in less than 3 months =). Good chapter, cant wait for the next etc. oh and update soon.
i swear its the sign of the apocalypse or something. You updated in less than 3 months =). Good chapter, cant wait for the next etc. oh and update soon.
6/22/2005 c17 9la-mocha
awesome story! really gripping and extremely well-written. one of the best on this site! fascinating plot and characters. update soon!
awesome story! really gripping and extremely well-written. one of the best on this site! fascinating plot and characters. update soon!
6/21/2005 c17 Lily Pierce
FP didn't send me an alert that you'd updated this story, so I didn't notice until I looked at my Favorite Stories list. *sweatdrops* Anyway, the chapter was really good! *grins* I like the Game Master, and the kiss was brilliant. Poor Sean, though, having to be a girl. I'm very curious as to who it was that he saw. The scenario was really interesting, and I can't wait to see what happens next!
FP didn't send me an alert that you'd updated this story, so I didn't notice until I looked at my Favorite Stories list. *sweatdrops* Anyway, the chapter was really good! *grins* I like the Game Master, and the kiss was brilliant. Poor Sean, though, having to be a girl. I'm very curious as to who it was that he saw. The scenario was really interesting, and I can't wait to see what happens next!
6/20/2005 c17 embersilence
Wow. This story is definitely different and amazing. xD
Jealousy is such a powerful thing, no? -Pats the Game Master- At least you got to kiss her, bub. Anyways, I don't get how he became interested in her.. so, maybe you could.. uhm, put an explanation to it on the next chapter or something? x.o;
Anyways, hope you update soon! ^^ 'Till next time.
Wow. This story is definitely different and amazing. xD
Jealousy is such a powerful thing, no? -Pats the Game Master- At least you got to kiss her, bub. Anyways, I don't get how he became interested in her.. so, maybe you could.. uhm, put an explanation to it on the next chapter or something? x.o;
Anyways, hope you update soon! ^^ 'Till next time.
6/19/2005 c17 moarikoT
you hav eno idea how much i love this story! it's wonderful, but you definately more Sydney/Game master moments. PLz update soon!
you hav eno idea how much i love this story! it's wonderful, but you definately more Sydney/Game master moments. PLz update soon!
6/15/2005 c17 13Vampgurl99
Hey!
I thought that i'd review for your lovely fiction event thought it's been a while since you updated. I think that this story is amazing. I've definitely not read a fiction where the main character is stuck in a virtual reality game without her knowing. I especially like the Game Master. He's so mysterious but that's, I guess, because he's not telling Sydney any thing. I don't think that there has ever been a main guy that's been this mysterious and yet it doesn't hinder your ability to write a fantastic story. I want to know so much about him (probably as much as Sydney) but I know that the only way that I'll learn is when the Game Master wants to 'give.' I didn't think that it would take seventeen chapters for you to finish the end of the beginning. I do have to say that not a lot has been going on other than what the scenario provides for the reader. I like how instead of a story having one time period like the eighteenth century or something, it has so many so that the characters are not restricted to just one place or time. It also puts to use abilities that the characters wouldn't normally have in realy life. I also like how you make the Game Master have so many masks that he hides under. You never truly know what he's feeling. How does he plan to make Sydney fall in love with him if he never really shows the correct emotion. I found it quite hilarious that Sean is a girl in the pirate scenario. Who is the captain? Is he always that rogue-ish in all of the scenarios? Does the game master know what he does every time? Is he somehow working with the Game Master? Man, not knowing all of the characters can be kind of frustrating. What about the friend that persuaded Sean to come? Who is he? Have we seen him yet? Where are Gabriella and Dominick from that makes Dom have an accent? I think that's about it for the questions. Please update soon!
~Vampgurl99
Hey!
I thought that i'd review for your lovely fiction event thought it's been a while since you updated. I think that this story is amazing. I've definitely not read a fiction where the main character is stuck in a virtual reality game without her knowing. I especially like the Game Master. He's so mysterious but that's, I guess, because he's not telling Sydney any thing. I don't think that there has ever been a main guy that's been this mysterious and yet it doesn't hinder your ability to write a fantastic story. I want to know so much about him (probably as much as Sydney) but I know that the only way that I'll learn is when the Game Master wants to 'give.' I didn't think that it would take seventeen chapters for you to finish the end of the beginning. I do have to say that not a lot has been going on other than what the scenario provides for the reader. I like how instead of a story having one time period like the eighteenth century or something, it has so many so that the characters are not restricted to just one place or time. It also puts to use abilities that the characters wouldn't normally have in realy life. I also like how you make the Game Master have so many masks that he hides under. You never truly know what he's feeling. How does he plan to make Sydney fall in love with him if he never really shows the correct emotion. I found it quite hilarious that Sean is a girl in the pirate scenario. Who is the captain? Is he always that rogue-ish in all of the scenarios? Does the game master know what he does every time? Is he somehow working with the Game Master? Man, not knowing all of the characters can be kind of frustrating. What about the friend that persuaded Sean to come? Who is he? Have we seen him yet? Where are Gabriella and Dominick from that makes Dom have an accent? I think that's about it for the questions. Please update soon!
~Vampgurl99
6/13/2005 c17 Tara
Awesome story I must say. I am totally reviewing so you can keep writing. So keep up the fabulous work you've been doing on this story. Peace Out.
Awesome story I must say. I am totally reviewing so you can keep writing. So keep up the fabulous work you've been doing on this story. Peace Out.
6/13/2005 c17 2yuri sasou
Oh,people will bother 'bout your story,so don't worry :)It's really interesting so please continue writing... Update soon :)Hopefully with more action between Sydney and the uber sexy Game Master :P
Oh,people will bother 'bout your story,so don't worry :)It's really interesting so please continue writing... Update soon :)Hopefully with more action between Sydney and the uber sexy Game Master :P
6/11/2005 c17 pinkisyourfriend
I love love love your story, it's the best, yep, i9 thought that was hilarious when sean was a girl. Yeah well update soon, ta
I love love love your story, it's the best, yep, i9 thought that was hilarious when sean was a girl. Yeah well update soon, ta
6/11/2005 c17 Suze
Oh gosh that was good beyond belief.
I'm gonna take a wild wild guess as to who the GM is and say that if Syd somehow knows him or is obliviously linked to him, then he's the "son" that was in the car that her father hit. That's my crazy theory. I mean, why else would you have bothered to mention him. Unless you just like details. I dunno.
I shouldn't even make guesses like that 'cause then it just ruins the ending in the cases where I'm right.
I'm still loving this story a lot and you should really consider getting it published someday. It's the most original I've read so far.
Ta!Suze.
Oh gosh that was good beyond belief.
I'm gonna take a wild wild guess as to who the GM is and say that if Syd somehow knows him or is obliviously linked to him, then he's the "son" that was in the car that her father hit. That's my crazy theory. I mean, why else would you have bothered to mention him. Unless you just like details. I dunno.
I shouldn't even make guesses like that 'cause then it just ruins the ending in the cases where I'm right.
I'm still loving this story a lot and you should really consider getting it published someday. It's the most original I've read so far.
Ta!Suze.
6/10/2005 c17 silkensilverberries
man, that was an amazing chapter! i want to know who it was that walked into the room that sean was in. he's a woman! lol.
i loved the last bit, with the game master and sydney in the ..place. lol. that kiss was amazingly written. i loved the descriptions of sydney's emotions and fears. it was incredible.
i can't say enough to describe how much i loved this chapter - and how increasingly jealous i become of your writing talent. you are a truly amazing writer, and i envy you that. lol
anyway, fantastic writing! i think this chapter was one of my favourites (granted that i cannot really remember a lot about the other chapters preceding it, only that they were all really, really good).
it's almost nine-thirty and i need to get to bed..i have to be up again in eight and a half hours! gross! six a.m. on a saturday morning! oh well..i only have two days of school next week and then final exams start, none of which i am writing, so i get to sleep in. :D ..oh god..and then summer vacation starts..that's a terrifying thought! i wish i had stopped talking after telling you how jealous i was of your writing..lol.
anyway, great work! i hope to see another update soon! *hug* loves,
*ssb
man, that was an amazing chapter! i want to know who it was that walked into the room that sean was in. he's a woman! lol.
i loved the last bit, with the game master and sydney in the ..place. lol. that kiss was amazingly written. i loved the descriptions of sydney's emotions and fears. it was incredible.
i can't say enough to describe how much i loved this chapter - and how increasingly jealous i become of your writing talent. you are a truly amazing writer, and i envy you that. lol
anyway, fantastic writing! i think this chapter was one of my favourites (granted that i cannot really remember a lot about the other chapters preceding it, only that they were all really, really good).
it's almost nine-thirty and i need to get to bed..i have to be up again in eight and a half hours! gross! six a.m. on a saturday morning! oh well..i only have two days of school next week and then final exams start, none of which i am writing, so i get to sleep in. :D ..oh god..and then summer vacation starts..that's a terrifying thought! i wish i had stopped talking after telling you how jealous i was of your writing..lol.
anyway, great work! i hope to see another update soon! *hug* loves,
*ssb
6/10/2005 c10 puppy dog eyes
Good story and continue to update. I do feel sorry for her though. She's stuck with a hyper little girl that always bugs her.
Good story and continue to update. I do feel sorry for her though. She's stuck with a hyper little girl that always bugs her.
6/10/2005 c17 Aragwen
Hey i can't believe that you finally updated! i loved the chapter even though i'm kinda worried about what will happen next. oh well guess i'll have to wait and see! keep writing and updating!
Hey i can't believe that you finally updated! i loved the chapter even though i'm kinda worried about what will happen next. oh well guess i'll have to wait and see! keep writing and updating!