8/17/2004 c16 Cinnamon Moon Fairies
Hi there,
This is really well written; bravo! I'm excited for the next chapter so please write fast. I'm curious though, in this next chapter, will Sydney and TGM have an encounter? It has been a couple chapters since they have actually come face to face. I think the next chapter should have Sydney and TGM having a...erm...confrontation?... and maybe TGM come out with his wrath. *evil smile* I really like how this is going. Don't give up on this.
Cinnamon
Hi there,
This is really well written; bravo! I'm excited for the next chapter so please write fast. I'm curious though, in this next chapter, will Sydney and TGM have an encounter? It has been a couple chapters since they have actually come face to face. I think the next chapter should have Sydney and TGM having a...erm...confrontation?... and maybe TGM come out with his wrath. *evil smile* I really like how this is going. Don't give up on this.
Cinnamon
8/12/2004 c16 1stellarr
i absolutely adore your story! it's quite different then anything i have ever read on fictionpress. i especially like the way you have done the scenarios in the game, they are so well-developed. i also really like the characters, although i do have some reservations about the GameMaster. he is so incredibly sweet, yet so very very creepy..lol i hope you continue this story! i demand that you update so taht i can read more! and nice to know that this is going to be a long story and this is only the end of the beggining part =)
anxiously awaiting next update
stellarr..
i absolutely adore your story! it's quite different then anything i have ever read on fictionpress. i especially like the way you have done the scenarios in the game, they are so well-developed. i also really like the characters, although i do have some reservations about the GameMaster. he is so incredibly sweet, yet so very very creepy..lol i hope you continue this story! i demand that you update so taht i can read more! and nice to know that this is going to be a long story and this is only the end of the beggining part =)
anxiously awaiting next update
stellarr..
8/9/2004 c16 fourlane
Come now, you can't leave the Game Master heartbroken for such a long period of time. :)
Come now, you can't leave the Game Master heartbroken for such a long period of time. :)
7/24/2004 c16 BlackRose
hey, i've been reading and i'd LOVE to know what happens next. i didn't think i'd like the story from the discription, but i went 'what the heck' and now i can't wait for the next chapter! write more soon!
hey, i've been reading and i'd LOVE to know what happens next. i didn't think i'd like the story from the discription, but i went 'what the heck' and now i can't wait for the next chapter! write more soon!
7/15/2004 c16 Snow Tears
Ooh, thank God you updated. I was beginning to think you forgot about us lol. Please update quicker next time. Was that last scene about the Game Master? I hope in the next chapter we'll get a li'l somethin somethin *wink wink nudge nudge* between the Game Master and Sydney. I like how you incorporated how she found out about his jealousy and her having revenge. Very suave. Perhaps she could actually develope some kind of feelings for Dom so she's not exactly using him?
Anyway, great story and PLEASE update sooner.
Tears
Ooh, thank God you updated. I was beginning to think you forgot about us lol. Please update quicker next time. Was that last scene about the Game Master? I hope in the next chapter we'll get a li'l somethin somethin *wink wink nudge nudge* between the Game Master and Sydney. I like how you incorporated how she found out about his jealousy and her having revenge. Very suave. Perhaps she could actually develope some kind of feelings for Dom so she's not exactly using him?
Anyway, great story and PLEASE update sooner.
Tears
7/5/2004 c16 IceShiva528
Please keep going! I love this story and I've actually been lookin for a good one ever since I finished reading several others. Sydney's awesome... I take it that from your hint, its off to a pirate adventure!
Please keep going! I love this story and I've actually been lookin for a good one ever since I finished reading several others. Sydney's awesome... I take it that from your hint, its off to a pirate adventure!
7/2/2004 c16 9that-was-my-heart
Aw poor Game Master. His wittle heart is broken. Somehow I don't think he'll just let Sydney *ehem* "go". I smell hissy fit fights. Lol great job and I await the next chapter. I hope the Game Master really does have good intentions concerning Syd.
Aw poor Game Master. His wittle heart is broken. Somehow I don't think he'll just let Sydney *ehem* "go". I smell hissy fit fights. Lol great job and I await the next chapter. I hope the Game Master really does have good intentions concerning Syd.
7/1/2004 c16 29TheAwakenerViari
NICE. update asap, i love this story. i've always wondered what it would be like to be transported into a VR game, so when i saw this, i was like "OOH! lemme read!" lol. so i love it, and you should update soon.
NICE. update asap, i love this story. i've always wondered what it would be like to be transported into a VR game, so when i saw this, i was like "OOH! lemme read!" lol. so i love it, and you should update soon.
6/30/2004 c16 aoao
Lovely! just lovely! the chapter rocked!~ Whoa, the ending just left me breathless, literally ^_~. I didn't expect it all, i mean, i was figuring there was gonna be "action" somewhere, but i didn't expect the scene you wrote. that was great! i mean, poor GameMaster, he's our favorite guy. but all the same, finally, some juicy parts! really really juicy parts! now u know there will be alot of action in the upcoming chappies, so yay! good job! i just can't wait until we find out Sydney's harsh past, and her past with the GameMaster. was he the stalker before when she was in highschool as valerie had mentioned? i wanna know i wanna know! so plz UPDATE ASAP, alright? u're killing us here!
- aoao ^_^
Lovely! just lovely! the chapter rocked!~ Whoa, the ending just left me breathless, literally ^_~. I didn't expect it all, i mean, i was figuring there was gonna be "action" somewhere, but i didn't expect the scene you wrote. that was great! i mean, poor GameMaster, he's our favorite guy. but all the same, finally, some juicy parts! really really juicy parts! now u know there will be alot of action in the upcoming chappies, so yay! good job! i just can't wait until we find out Sydney's harsh past, and her past with the GameMaster. was he the stalker before when she was in highschool as valerie had mentioned? i wanna know i wanna know! so plz UPDATE ASAP, alright? u're killing us here!
- aoao ^_^
6/30/2004 c16 aoao
Lovely! just lovely! the chapter rocked!~ Whoa, the ending just left me breathless, literally ^_~. I didn't expect it all, i mean, i was figuring there was gonna be "action" somewhere, but i didn't expect the scene you wrote. that was great! i mean, poor GameMaster, he's our favorite guy. but all the same, finally, some juicy parts! really really juicy parts! now u know there will be alot of action in the upcoming chappies, so yay! good job! i just can't wait until we find out Sydney's harsh past, and her past with the GameMaster. was he the stalker before when she was in highschool as valerie had mentioned? i wanna know i wanna know! so plz UPDATE ASAP, alright? u're killing us here!
- aoao ^_^
Lovely! just lovely! the chapter rocked!~ Whoa, the ending just left me breathless, literally ^_~. I didn't expect it all, i mean, i was figuring there was gonna be "action" somewhere, but i didn't expect the scene you wrote. that was great! i mean, poor GameMaster, he's our favorite guy. but all the same, finally, some juicy parts! really really juicy parts! now u know there will be alot of action in the upcoming chappies, so yay! good job! i just can't wait until we find out Sydney's harsh past, and her past with the GameMaster. was he the stalker before when she was in highschool as valerie had mentioned? i wanna know i wanna know! so plz UPDATE ASAP, alright? u're killing us here!
- aoao ^_^
6/25/2004 c16 silkensilverberries
aww! i just want to hug the game master. he's so...aww! poor guy! ...interesting bit with he and sean there. good lord your writing is amazing. lol. anyway, awesome awesome awesome work. i did notice repeatedly that words were duplicated, but you did say that you didn't get a chance to proofread and whatnot, so eh. excellent work outside of that though. i'm tres tres impressed! lol..good work, hun. *hug* loves,
*ssb
aww! i just want to hug the game master. he's so...aww! poor guy! ...interesting bit with he and sean there. good lord your writing is amazing. lol. anyway, awesome awesome awesome work. i did notice repeatedly that words were duplicated, but you did say that you didn't get a chance to proofread and whatnot, so eh. excellent work outside of that though. i'm tres tres impressed! lol..good work, hun. *hug* loves,
*ssb
6/25/2004 c16 Twistedness
It wasn't terrible at all! -hugs- POOR um... what's his name, GAME MASTER! I was so sad that he didn't come to talk to sydney! But that's okay...
aww i cant get over his tear. I FEEL SO TERRIBLE FOR HIM! POOR BABY! -hugs him- I like Dom too -sniff- I'm hopelessly stuck between the two but one thing for sure...; DESTROY SEAN! .
It wasn't terrible at all! -hugs- POOR um... what's his name, GAME MASTER! I was so sad that he didn't come to talk to sydney! But that's okay...
aww i cant get over his tear. I FEEL SO TERRIBLE FOR HIM! POOR BABY! -hugs him- I like Dom too -sniff- I'm hopelessly stuck between the two but one thing for sure...; DESTROY SEAN! .