for Legends of Azyria9/5/2003 c3 Your Evil side
Well I'm very glad to see another chapter out, but I think you could have told about it before you left for college. Regardless, I think you did an excellant job as usual.
One minor criticism however, In the fourth paragraph, second sentance:
"The road was as safe a place as ANYONE could be."
Don't you mean "anywhere"?
I don't mean to nitpick (blatant lie) but you author types are always asking for criticisms and such so I thought I'd add my two cents. That and I think it's great that I (the one who very nearly flunked english) am correcting you (the one who had a tendancy to turn short writing assignments into full-blown novelets) on the use of pronouns with proper antecedents and such.
Of course if you somehow prove me wrong I'll feel like an idiot and will deny vehemently having ever made any such comment.
On a final note I can see you have decided to veer slightly from the comic version and I don't have any problems with that, not that was worrying you or anything but there it is. Now I can look foward to the next chapter and expect some surprises.
So, NO SLACKING OFF!, sleep is for the weak, write instead (or work on the comic, either or)
Until next time.
P.S.-I have a review coming up so feel free to skip classes or something
Well I'm very glad to see another chapter out, but I think you could have told about it before you left for college. Regardless, I think you did an excellant job as usual.
One minor criticism however, In the fourth paragraph, second sentance:
"The road was as safe a place as ANYONE could be."
Don't you mean "anywhere"?
I don't mean to nitpick (blatant lie) but you author types are always asking for criticisms and such so I thought I'd add my two cents. That and I think it's great that I (the one who very nearly flunked english) am correcting you (the one who had a tendancy to turn short writing assignments into full-blown novelets) on the use of pronouns with proper antecedents and such.
Of course if you somehow prove me wrong I'll feel like an idiot and will deny vehemently having ever made any such comment.
On a final note I can see you have decided to veer slightly from the comic version and I don't have any problems with that, not that was worrying you or anything but there it is. Now I can look foward to the next chapter and expect some surprises.
So, NO SLACKING OFF!, sleep is for the weak, write instead (or work on the comic, either or)
Until next time.
P.S.-I have a review coming up so feel free to skip classes or something
5/19/2003 c2 
3Aimie Bean
this such a good story! i think you have some thing there! it's great! please update soon and can you please do me a favour and r&r my story! it's me 1st one so i kinda need to know what people think of it and if should carry on with it! it's called the crystals of the elementals!
from Aimie =^.^=
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3Aimie Beanthis such a good story! i think you have some thing there! it's great! please update soon and can you please do me a favour and r&r my story! it's me 1st one so i kinda need to know what people think of it and if should carry on with it! it's called the crystals of the elementals!
from Aimie =^.^=
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