for I Never Wanted to Love You10/15/2004 c2 
2RaNDoM mOnKEys
Its of to a good start. Advise, you should have described the Location that the girls were at a bit earlyer. was'nt sure wear they were. Be realistic with what happeneds in the next chapter! if the age difference is to much i.e 17 29 that wll ruin the plot. dont make willow sleep with him that night, she will look like a groupie and i dont think that was were you were going. A fight would be nice, or willow could fall in love with another band member. This plot is open to many ideas. Know what direction you want the plot to go before you close in on an idea. can't wait till the next chapters up, sorry 4 the long review
2RaNDoM mOnKEysIts of to a good start. Advise, you should have described the Location that the girls were at a bit earlyer. was'nt sure wear they were. Be realistic with what happeneds in the next chapter! if the age difference is to much i.e 17 29 that wll ruin the plot. dont make willow sleep with him that night, she will look like a groupie and i dont think that was were you were going. A fight would be nice, or willow could fall in love with another band member. This plot is open to many ideas. Know what direction you want the plot to go before you close in on an idea. can't wait till the next chapters up, sorry 4 the long review
6/5/2004 c2 Bloody Love
That was good. I really liked it. I hope you get the next chapter out soon. I really want to know whats going to happen.
That was good. I really liked it. I hope you get the next chapter out soon. I really want to know whats going to happen.